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2020 北京一摸作文解析汇编
海淀一模
第三部分：书面表达（共两节，35 分）
第一节（15 分）
51.假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。你的美国朋友 Jim 得知你对探月感兴趣，发来邮件和
你讨论该话题。请你给他回复邮件，内容包括：
1. 月亮在中国文化中的寓意；
2. 你对人类探月活动的看法。
注意：1.词数不少于 50；
2.开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
提示词：探月 moon exploration
Dear Jim,
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【答案】Dear Jim,
I am glad to share with you more details about my passion for moon exploration.2
It started with what I had been told about the moon as a kid and grew stronger with time. As
you can guess, there is rich cultural meaning behind the faithful companion 伴侣 of the earth. In
Chinese culture, as opposed to the masculinity 阳刚之气 of the sun, the moon is often compared to
a quiet and elegant lady. Also, it reminds people of their family and friends far away. People feel
reassured 安心 knowing that they are watching the same moon as if the moon could serve as their
messenger.
Human beings have never stopped exploring our closest neighbor. I believe it is of great
significance. The development of relevant technology facilitates 促进 the progress of science in
general, which benefits our everyday life. What’s more, I think moon exploration shows an
important human trait 特征, that is, curiosity about the unknown, which is the driving force that has
brought our species this far.
I hope you find what I‘ve mentioned above interesting and reasonable. By the way, what do
you think of when you gaze at the moon? Write back and tell me about it!
Yours,
Li Hua
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求考生写一封信给美国朋友 Jim，和Jim 探讨有关探月的话题。
【详解】第一步：审题
体裁：应用文
时态：根据提示，时态应为一般现在时
人称：第一人称为主
结构：总分法
总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。3
要求：1. 月亮在中国文化中的寓意；
2. 你对人类探月活动的看法。
第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）
moon exploration；be compared to；remind sb. of sb./sth.；as if；serve as；gaze at
第三步：连词成句
1. I am glad to share with you more details about my passion for moon exploration.
2. the moon is often compared to a quiet and elegant lady.
3. Also, it reminds people of their family and friends far away.
4. People feel reassured knowing that they are watching the same moon as if the moon could serve
as their messenger.
5. By the way, what do you think of when you gaze at the moon?
(根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。）
第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）
1.表文章结构顺序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At
last, Last but not least
2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition, As well as, not
only…but (also), including, also
3.表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, Although + clause(从句), In spite of + n/doing,
On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…
4.表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result
5 表换一种方式表达：In other words, that is to say,
6.表进行举例说明：For example; For instance; such as + n/doing 4
7.表陈述事实：In fact, frankly speaking
8.表选择：either…or…，or
连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰。
第五步：润色修改
【点睛】范文内容完整，结构严谨，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意
思连贯，符合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了主从复合句，如 It started with what I had been
told about the moon as a kid 这句话中用了 what 引导的宾语从句，如 which is the driving force
that has brought our species this far 中用了 which 引导的非限制性定语从句；使用了非常好的
短语，如 be compared to，remind sb. of sb./sth.，serve as，gaze at 等，为文章增色不少；并注
意了句子的衔接，如 Also，What’s more，By the way。全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示
了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色
添彩。
第二节（20 分）
52.假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。请根据下面四幅图的先后顺序，写一篇英文周记，记
述你确定大学志愿的过程。
注意：词数不少于 60。5
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【答案】The past week was by no means ordinary, for I had finally decided on my major.
This Monday, the topic was brought up again by my parents during dinner. I had asked myself
the same question many times, but still couldn’t make up my mind. Seeing my hesitant look, mom
patted me on my shoulder, her smile encouraging me to do more research.
Later that evening, I turned to the Internet for help. Faced with so many choices, I seemed to be
lost. Law could be a good choice. Business and computer science were also attracting top students. I
noted down one after another major, but crossed them all off, for what I wanted was a profession
that could make a difference in people’s lives.
The inspiration came unexpectedly with the CCTV News yesterday. The moment “Role 6
Models of Our Time” appeared on the screen, I was awed 敬畏的. The news story focused on
superheroes without a cape — police officers, healthcare workers, delivery men, city cleaners —
who guarded us and ensured our life ran normally. Suddenly, I realized my life’s purpose —
relieving pain and saving lives. And to pursue this call, I decided to specialize in medical science.
I jumped excitedly at this idea. Mom and dad were also happy that I had found the compass for
my future life, and said they would be so proud to see me in white. Now, determined to become a
healthcare worker, whenever I start my schoolwork, I know I am studying for a noble cause.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求考生根据所给的四幅图写一篇周记，记述自己确定大学志愿
的过程。
【详解】第一步：审题
体裁：应用文
时态：根据提示，时态应为一般过去时
人称：第一人称为主
结构：总分总法
总分总法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，结尾再重申一下自己的主题，并以
这种方式安排所写内容。
要求：1. 挖掘四幅图所给出的信息：图 1——和父母讨论大学志愿选什么，图 2——自己网
上查找大学志愿资料，图 3——看电视新闻给自己选大学志愿的启发，图 4——确定了自己
的大学志愿；
2. 自己确定大学志愿过程中的感悟。
第二步:列提纲（重点词组）
by no means；make up one’s mind；encourage sb.to do sth.；turn to…for help；make a difference；7
focus on
第三步：连词成句
1. The past week was by no means ordinary, for I had finally decided on my major.
2. I had asked myself the same question many times, but still couldn’t make up my mind.
3. Seeing my hesitant look, mom patted me on my shoulder, her smile encouraging me to do more
research.
4. Later that evening, I turned to the Internet for help.
5. for what I wanted was a profession that could make a difference in people’s lives.
6. The news story focused on superheroes without a cape.
(根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。）
第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）
1.表文章结构顺序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At
last, Last but not least
2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition, As well as, not
only…but (also), including, also
3.表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, Although + clause(从句), In spite of + n/doing,
On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…
4.表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result
5 表换一种方式表达：In other words, that is to say,
6.表进行举例说明：For example; For instance; such as + n/doing
7.表陈述事实：In fact, frankly speaking
8.表选择：either…or…，or8
连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰。
第五步：润色修改
【点睛】范文内容完整，结构严谨，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意
思连贯，符合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了主从复合句，如 for what I wanted was a
profession that could make a difference in people’s lives 这句话中既用了 for 引导的原因状语从
句，又用了 that 引导的定语从句；文章多处用了非谓语动词结构，如 Seeing my hesitant look
和 Faced with so many choices 在句中做状语；使用了非常好的短语，如 by no means，encourage
sb.to do sth.，turn to…for help，make a difference 等，为文章增色不少；并注意了句子的衔接，
如 but，either…or…。全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外，
文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。
朝阳一模
第三部分：书面表达（共两节，35 分）
第一节（15 分）
51.假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。你的美国笔友 Jim 对中国文化十分感兴趣，你在英文
报纸 China Daily 上看到“中华文化表情包设计大赛 (The China Daily Emoji Design Contest of
Chinese Cultural Symbols) ”征集来自世界各地参赛作品的活动，请给他写一封邮件，邀请他
参加投稿，内容包括：
1. 介绍稿件要求；
2. 告知投稿时间和方式；
3. 询问对方意向。
注意: 1. 词数不少于 50；
2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3. 开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
Dear Jim,9
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Yours,
Li Hua
【答案】Dear Jim
I am writing to tell you about The China Daily Emoji Design Contest of Chinese Cultural
Symbols organized by China Daily. I know you’re keen on traditional Chinese culture, so why not
have a try?
You may choose any symbol that best represents Chinese culture in your eyes, such as the
panda, kung fu, the Great Wall and so on. There is no limit on the style, but be sure to give your
work a name and explain designing ideas and its culture meanings. Your work should be submitted
online with required personal information by the end of September. All winning designs will be
shared and promoted on the China Daily app, and winning designers will receive prizes!
Are you interested? If you need any help, I would be very glad to help. Let your creative juices
flow!
Yours,
Li Hua
【解析】
【分析】
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本篇书面表达属于应用文，你在英文报纸 China Daily 上看到“中华文化表情包设计大赛”征
集来自世界各地参赛作品的活动，请给你对中国文化十分感兴趣的美国笔友 Jim写一封邮件，
邀请他参加投稿。
【详解】第一步：审题
体裁：应用文
时态：根据提示，时态应为一般现在时和一般将来时。
结构：总分法
总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。
要求：1. 介绍稿件要求。（introduce the requirements）
2. 告知投稿时间和方式。（inform the time and method of submission）
3. 询问对方意向。（ask about his intention）
第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）
be keen on; such as; be sure to; give…a name; personal information; by the end of; be glad to
第三步：连词成句
1. I am writing to tell you about The China Daily Emoji Design Contest of Chinese Cultural
Symbols organized by China Daily.
2. I know you’re keen on traditional Chinese culture, so why not have a try?
3. You may choose any symbol that best represents Chinese culture in your eyes, such as the panda,
kung fu, the Great Wall and so on.
4. There is no limit on the style, but be sure to give your work a name and explain designing ideas
and its culture meanings.
5. Your work should be submitted online with required personal information by the end of
September.11
6. All winning designs will be shared and promoted on the China Daily app, and winning designers
will receive prizes!
7. Are you interested?
8. If you need any help, I would be very glad to help.
9. Let your creative juices flow!
第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）
1.表文章结构顺序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At
last
2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not
only…but (also), including,
3.表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, Although+clause(从句), In spite
of+n/doing,On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…
4.表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result
第五步：润色修改
【点睛】范文内容完整，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯，符
合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了较多主从复合句，如：You may choose any symbol that best
represents Chinese culture in your eyes, such as the panda, kung fu, the Great Wall and so on.这句
话运用了 that 引导的主语从句。使用了一些固定词组，如 be keen on; be sure to; by the end of;
be glad to 等。全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外，文章
思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。
第二节（20 分）
52.假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，为校刊 “英语园地”写
一篇短文，讲述你在这个寒假居家自主学习的过程。 注意：词数不少于 60。12
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【答案】I spent an unforgettable winter vacation this year, during which I became an autonomous
learner.
At the beginning of the vacation, I made a detailed learning plan. I first listed the learning tasks
for the following days and then made plans in great details to ensure that they are practical and
feasible. Then I started learning as scheduled. With the learning materials piled on my desk, I was
always in high spirit every day. To my delight, I could carry out the plan strictly.
Whenever I met with difficulties, I turned to my teachers and classmates for help through the
Internet. Thanks to the convenient video chat app, I could get my problems solved in time, which
guaranteed my learning in a right and smooth way. At the end of the vacation, I had a systematic
revision of previous lessons, and gained more confidence in weak subjects. My parents also took
notice of my progress and gave me a thumb up for my self-discipline.
I had a great sense of accomplishment because my autonomous learning ability was cultivated, 13
which I believe will have a far-reaching influence on me.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求考生根据所给的图画内容为校刊“英语园地”写一篇短文，讲
述自己在这个寒假居家自主学习的过程。
【详解】第一步：审题
体裁：应用文
时态：根据提示，时态应为一般过去时。
结构：总分法
总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。
要求：1. 定制详细的学习计划。（make a detailed learning plan）
2. 介绍学习渠道。（introduce the ways of study）
第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）
at the beginning of; in great details; in high spirit; to my delight; carry out; meet with difficulties;
gave me a thumb up for; have a great sense of
第三步：连词成句
1. I spent an unforgettable winter vacation this year, during which I became an autonomous learner.
2. At the beginning of the vacation, I made a detailed learning plan.
3. I first listed the learning tasks for the following days and then made plans in great details to ensure
that they are practical and feasible.
4. Then I started learning as scheduled.
5. With the learning materials piled on my desk, I was always in high spirit every day.14
6. To my delight, I could carry out the plan strictly.
7. Whenever I met with difficulties, I turned to my teachers and classmates for help through the
Internet.
8. Thanks to the convenient video chat app, I could get my problems solved in time, which
guaranteed my learning in a right and smooth way.
9. At the end of the vacation, I had a systematic revision of previous lessons, and gained more
confidence in weak subjects.
10. My parents also took notice of my progress and gave me a thumb up for my self-discipline.
11. I had a great sense of accomplishment because my autonomous learning ability was cultivated,
which I believe will have a far-reaching influence on me.
第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）
1.表文章结构顺序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At
last
2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not
only…but (also), including,
3.表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, Although+clause(从句), In spite
of+n/doing,On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…
4.表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result
第五步：润色修改
【点睛】范文内容完整，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯，符
合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了较多主从复合句，如：Thanks to the convenient video chat
app, I could get my problems solved in time, which guaranteed my learning in a right and smooth
way.这句话运用了 which 引导的非限制性定语从句。使用了一些固定词组，如 in great details;
in high spirit; to one’s delight; carry out; meet with difficulties; have a great sense of 等。全文中没15
有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、层次分明，上
下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。
东城一模
第三部分：书面表达（共两节，35 分）
第一节（15 分）
51.假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。你的英国好友 Jim 在给你的邮件中提到新冠病毒爆发
给他带来了焦虑，并询问你在疫情期间的生活。请给他回邮件，内容包括：
1．安慰与鼓励；
2．疫情期间你的生活与学习情况；
3. 疫情给你带来的思考。
注意：1．词数不少于 50；
2．开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
提示词：新冠病毒 novel coronavirus；
Dear Jim,
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Li Hua
【答案】Dear Jim,
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I do understand how you feel. The outbreak of novel coronavirus is a big challenge to every
one of us. Please don’t be so anxious. With everybody standing together, I’m sure we can defeat the
virus.
We can do our bit in this battle! I’d like to share what I have done in the past three months. To
help prevent the virus from spreading, I have responded to the government’s call and stayed at home
with my families. While keeping an eye on the situation, I have been studying with the help of the
online course offered by our school. Communicating with my teachers and classmates online, I have
never felt lonely. Besides, I have kept on doing some inside sports to keep fit and helped my mom
with the housework.
Not going out is my way to fight the virus. Thinking of the medical staff, we have no reason not
to discipline ourselves. We need to thank them and at the same time, treasure our life.
Please take care of yourself. Keep calm and carry on!
Yours,
Li Hua
【解析】
【分析】
这是一篇提纲类写作。
【详解】第 1 步：根据提示可知，假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。你的英国好友 Jim 在给
你的邮件中提到新冠病毒爆发给他带来了焦虑，并询问你在疫情期间的生活。请给他回邮件，
内容包括：1．安慰与鼓励；2．疫情期间你的生活与学习情况；3. 疫情给你带来的思考。
第 2 步：根据写作要求，确定关键词（组）：novel coronavirus (新冠病毒)；outbreak (爆发)；
defeat (打败)；prevent from (阻止)；with the help of(在……的帮助下)等。
第 3 步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。此处文章主要17
应用现 完成时和一般现在时。
第 4 步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，
保持整洁美观的卷面是非常重要的。
【点睛】范文内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级表
达方式，如 I’d like to share what I have done in the past three months.运用了宾语从句；To help
prevent the virus from spreading, I have responded to the government’s call and stayed at home with
my families.非谓语动词的运用。全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能
力。另外文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。
第二节（20 分）
52.假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，给学校英文报投稿，
记述学校法制宣传周期间的系列活动。
注意：1. 词数不少于 60
2. 开头已给出，不计入总词数。
提示词：模拟法庭 moot court
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Legal Awareness Week was opened in our school. A series of activities were carried out.
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【答案】Legal Awareness Week was opened in our school. A series of activities were carried out.
On Monday morning, an expert was invited to our school and delivered a lecture on law
knowledge. We learned about the basic rules of law and some legal cases from the lecture. After that
we got down to making some posters. We put up the posters on the bulletin board, aiming to
enhance the understanding of laws.
The next day, we took part in a moot court to experience what a real trial was like. Several
students acted as judges and lawyers, having a heated argument about legal issues. The vivid
presentation on the moot court drew us closer to the law.
A class meeting was held as scheduled on Friday. We shared what we had learned during the
week. All of us expressed that we had deepened the understanding of the law and it was of great
importance to raise our legal awareness.
【解析】
【分析】
这是一篇图画类写作。
【详解】第 1 步：根据提示可知，假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。请根据以下四幅图的先
后顺序，给学校英文报投稿，记述学校法制宣传周期间的系列活动。
第 2 步：根据写作要求，确定关键词（组）：deliver a lecture (发表演讲)；put up (张贴)；enhance
(增强)；take part in (参加)；moot court(模拟法庭)等。19
第 3 步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。此处文章主要
应用一般过去时。
第 4 步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，
保持整洁美观的卷面是非常重要的。
【点睛】范文内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级表
达方式，如 We put up the posters on the bulletin board, aiming to enhance the understanding of
laws.非谓语动词的运用；The next day, we took part in a moot court to experience what a real
trial was like.运用了宾语从句。全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能
力。另外文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。
西城一模
第三部分：书面表达（共两节，35 分）
第一节（15 分）
假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。你的英国好友 Jim 在做关于“中学生做家务”的调查，
想了解你做家务的情况。请你给他回复邮件，内容包括：
1）你平时做哪些家务；
2）你对中学生做家务的看法。
注意: 1.词数不少于 50；
2.开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
Dear Jim,
Knowing you are conducting a survey of the housework that high school students do at
home,(交代背景) I’m writing to tell you about what I do (写信目的).
( 要 点 1)Although my school schedule is rather tight, I still manage to help with the
housework from time to time. I will clean up after dinner. I also help with other things like
sweeping and dusting. Every once in a while, I will cook something for my family. So far, my
spaghetti has been the most delicious dish.
(要点 2)I think high school students should do some housework. For one thing, by doing
housework we learn to take responsibility at home, and in the longer term, in society. For another,
I find the time spent doing housework with my parents really fun and rewarding; we chat with
each other and sometimes even sing together. Doing housework can be a great break from my
busy school work.20
Good luck with your survey.
Yours,
Li Hua
（请务必将作文写在答题卡指定区域内）
第二节（20 分）
假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。上周,你们班参加了学校的“爱科学月”板报展活动。
请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，写一篇英文周记，记述整个过程。
注意： 词数不少于 60。
（请务必将作文写在答题卡指定区域内）
内容要点：
1. 讨论 2. 准备 3. 制作 4. 展示
Last week, our class participated in the school poster exhibition with the topic “We Love
Science”. We had a memorable experience working together. (综述)
Having been informed of the activity, we put forward ideas as to the contents of the
poster. After a brief discussion, we agreed on the subjects of AI and 5G, since they are the hottest
topics of the advanced technologies.（图一）21
No time was wasted in our preparation. We first went to the school library to research the
history and development of the two fields.// When realizing that the library couldn’t provide us
with enough information about cutting-edge technologies, we turned to our teacher for help, who
proved to be a valuable resource and gave us lots of practical advice. （图二）（主语人、物交替
使用，主被动语态的交替使用，使表达多样、丰富）
With the material collected, we got down to making our poster. Each of us had been
assigned different tasks, to which we devoted all our effort. We designed, wrote and painted. I
even framed the poster to make it more eye-catching. （图三）（长短句交错）
On the day of the exhibition, our elaborately designed poster attracted much attention. The
students gathered in front of our poster, appreciating our work. Filled with pride, we are looking
forward to the next activity. （图四+感受）
石景山一模
第三部分：书面表达（共两节，35 分）
第一节（15 分）
一、评分原则
1.本题总分为 15 分，按 4 个档次给分。
2.评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言质量初步确定其档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，
确定或调整档次，最后给分。
3.评分时应考虑：内容是否完整，条理是否清楚，交际是否得体，语言是否准确。
4.拼写、标点符号或书写影响内容表达时，应视其影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写
及词汇用法均可接受。
5.词数少于 50，从总分中减去 1 分。
二、各档次的给分范围和要求
第一档
（13 分—15 分）
完全完成了试题规定的任务。
* 内容完整，条理清楚；
* 交际得体，表达时充分考虑到了交际的需求；体现了
较强的语言运用能力；22
完全达到了预期的写作目的。
第二档
（9 分—12 分）
基本完成了试题规定的任务。
* 内容、条理和交际等方面基本符合要求；
* 所用语法和词汇满足了任务的要求；
* 语法或用词方面有一些错误，但不影响理解。
基本达到了预期的写作目的。
第三档
（4 分—8 分）
未恰当完成试题规定的任务。
* 内容不完整；
* 所用词汇有限，语法或用词方面的错误影响了对所写
内容的理解。
未能清楚地传达信息。
第四档
（1 分—3 分）
未完成试题规定的任务。
* 写了少量相关信息；
* 语法或用词方面错误较多，严重影响了对所写内容的
理解。
0 分 未传达任何信息；所写内容与要求无关。
三、范文
One possible version:
Dear Jim,
I feel proud of your novel idea. Personally speaking, I am willing to share my clothes on your
app. It feels like I am emotionally connecting someone in my clothes. In turn, I also can try others’
new clothes. We can wear different types of clothes without actually spending any money.
Anyway, sharing clothes is a creative way to make full use of them and benefits others as well as
myself.
Yours,
Li Hua
第二节（20 分）
一、评分原则23
1．本题总分为 20 分，按 5 个挡次给分。
2．评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言质量初步确定其档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡
量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。
3．评分时应考虑：内容要点完整性、上下文的连贯、词汇和句式的多样性及语言的准
确性。
4．拼写、标点符号或书写影响内容表达时，应视其影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写及
词汇用法均可接受。
5．词数少于 60，从总分中减去 1 分。
二、内容要点
1. 听讲座 2. 看操作 3. 参加考试 4. 获得证书
三、各档次的给分范围和要求
第一档
18 分－20 分
完全完成了试题规定的任务。
* 覆盖了所有内容要点；
* 运用了多样的句式和丰富的词汇；
* 语法或用词方面有个别错误，但为尽可能表达丰富的内容所致；体
现了较强的语言运用能力；
* 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，所写内容连贯、结构紧凑。
完全达到了预期的写作目的。
第二档
15 分－17 分
完全完成了试题规定的任务。
* 覆盖了所有内容要点；
* 运用的句式和词汇能满足任务要求；
* 语法和用词基本准确，少许错误主要为尽可能表达丰富的内容所致；
* 使用了简单的语句间连接成分，所写内容连贯。
达到了预期的写作目的。
第三档
12 分－14 分
基本完成了试题规定的任务。
* 覆盖了内容要点；
* 运用的句式和词汇基本满足任务要求；
* 语法和用词方面有一些错误，但不影响理解。
基本达到了预期的写作目的。24
第四档
6 分－11 分
未恰当完成试题规定的任务。
* 漏掉或未描述清楚主要内容；
* 所用句式和词汇有限；
* 语法或用词方面的错误影响了对所写内容的理解。
未能清楚地传达信息。
第五档
1 分－5 分
未完成试题规定的任务。
* 明显遗漏主要内容；
* 句式单调、词汇贫乏；
* 语法或用词方面错误较多，严重影响了对所写内容的理解。
0 分 未能传达任何信息；所写内容与要求无关。
四、范文
One possible version:
Last week, I took part in the Red Cross first aid training.
At the beginning, we assembled in the school hall to listen to the importance and basic steps
of first aid. After realizing how important first aid is, we couldn’t wait to learn more. After a short
grouping, we were led to a classroom where a trainer demonstrated the detailed procedure. We
watched closely as he showed every move. Then came the test for first aid. Although I was
nervous, I managed to carry out all the moves taught.
To my excitement, I was issued a first aider certificate. I held the certificate with pride and
thought that I could help more people in need with the knowledge of first aid.
平谷一模
第三部分 书面表达（共两节，满分 35 分）
第一节（15 分）
51.假设你是红星中学高三学生李华，你 美国朋友 Jim 对北京的历史文化感兴趣。你校暑
假期间将为交换生组织“Knowing Beijing”游览活动，请你写信邀请 Jim 来参加。内容包括：
1 时间安排；
2 活动内容；
的25
3 邀请参加。
注意：1．词数不少于 50；
2．开头和结尾已经给出，不计入总词数。
Dear Jim,
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Yours,
Li Hua
【答案】Dear Jim，
How is it going？ I'm writing to invite you to our activity-" Knowing Beijing "．
We are going to organize the activity at school next Friday afternoon．We'll experience Chinese
traditions，such as making dumplings，learning a dragon dance，drinking Chinese tea and so on． I
hope we'll enjoy ourselves． I believe you can learn more about China and love Chinese traditional
culture by having this kind of activity．
I'm looking forward to your early reply．
Yours，
Xiao Hua
【解析】
【分析】
这是一篇应用文。
【详解】根据提示可知,本篇为一封信; 假设你是红星中学高三学生李华，你的美国朋友 Jim26
对北京的历史文化感兴趣。你校暑假期间将为交换生组织“Knowing Beijing”游览活动，请你
写信邀请 Jim 来参加。内容包括：1 时间安排；2 活动内容；3 邀请参加。根据提示及关键
词(组)进行遣词造句,注意主谓一致和时态问题。
【点睛】本文内容完整,语言规范,语篇连贯,词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级表达方
式,如 In the morning, we will go to The Forbidden City which used to be the imperial palace for
the Ming and Qing 24emperors to live.定语从句的运用，I believe you can learn more about
China and love Chinese traditional culture by having this kind of activity．中使用了宾语从句。全
文中没有中国式英语的句式,显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外, 文章思路清晰、层次分明，
上下句转换自然,为文章增色添彩。
第二节（20 分）
52.假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，用英语写一篇短文向
校刊“英语园地”投稿，记述你班上周组织主题为“平安校园”法制教育系列活动的全过程。
注意：词数不少于 60。
提示词：平安校园：Safe Campus
法律意识： legal awareness
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【答案】Last week ,our school organized an activity with the theme “safe campus”which will
make us aware that safety should always come first whatever we do.
At the class meeting, our teacher stressed the importance of safety at school.After that,,our PE
teacher gave us a lecture.Accidents can happen easily at school. We searched the internet for related
information .Besides, to reaise more students’leagal awareness,we made a poster.The next day,we
went to the campus to find our demonstration .Back home,I shared what I had learned with my
parents .
Through the experiene,I deeply realize the importance of safety at school.
【解析】
【分析】
本文属于图画作文，根据图画内容写一篇短文投稿。
【详解】假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，用英语写一篇短
文向校刊“英语园地”投稿，记述你班上周组织主题为“平安校园”法制教育系列活动的全过程。
分析四幅图可知，图画作文内容要点比较清晰，其中包括：老师宣布活动内容和意义，我参
加平安校园活动的过程，介绍活动感受。这样有利于学生写作时发挥与扩展。全文分成三部
分，开头段概括活动，中间段描述图画，结尾段总结收获和意义。文章用第一人称来写，使
用一般过去时。
【点睛】本文内容完整，语言表述通顺。使用了连接词，衔接词，使文章自然，流畅。文章
使用了定语从句 our school organized an activity with the theme “safe campus”which will make us
aware that safety should always come first whatever we do.还使用了 Besides 等过渡词，使文章上
下文衔接流畅。
密云一模28
第三部分:书面表达(共两节，35 分）
第一节(15 分)
51.假设你是红星中学高三学生李华，请给交换生朋友 Jim 写一封邮件，告诉他你打算参加
中国结(Chinese knot)社团，希望他一起参加。
邮件内容包括:
1.介绍社团相关内容(例如:时间、地点);
2.说明你打算参加的原因;
3.询问对方的意向。
注意:词数不少于 50
Dear Jim,
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Yours,
Li Hua
【答案】Dear Jim,
How is everything going? I clearly remember you’ve mentioned your strong interest in
traditional Chinese culture, so I’m writing to share some good news with you! Our school will set up
a wide variety of clubs for us to choose from, of which the Chinese knot club is included. As for me,
I will definitely go for it without hesitation. The club is scheduled to be open in Room 302 in our
Science Building every Friday at 4:00 pm, when I suppose you will be free. Would you like to come 29
and join me?
I have been longing to become a member of such a club. The reasons are as follows. First of all,
the Chinese knot is always appealing to me because of its rich shapes and I’m curious about how it’s
made. Attending this club, which offers hands-on learning experience, I can learn how to create
works of mine. Besides, I strongly believe I can benefit a lot from this club as it will offer classes
introducing the history of the Chinese knot as well as its symbolic significance. Don’t you think this
is a good opportunity to get close to Chinese traditional culture? What’s more, I, as your best friend,
will always be with you, which guarantees your free communication within the club.
Dear friend, as a Chinese traditional culture lover, why not take the chance to join this club? I
am looking forward to your early positive reply.
Yours,
Li Hua
【解析】
【分析】
这是一篇应用文。本篇要求考生给朋友 Jim 写信，邀请他参加中国结社团，并给他介绍社团
的大致情况。
【详解】体裁：应用文
时态：根据提示，时态应以一般现在时和一般将来时为主
结构：总分
要求：
1.介绍社团相关内容(例如:时间、地点…);
2.说明你打算参加的原因;
3.询问对方的意向。30
第二步：列提纲（重点词组）
be interested in/ invite sb. to do sth./ introduce sth. to sb./ set up/ be aimed at/ have a better
understanding of/ would like to do sth./join sb.
第三步：连词成句
How is everything going?
Knowing your strong interest in traditional Chinese culture, I’m writing to share some good news
with you!
Our school will set up a wide range of clubs for us to choose from, of which the Chinese knot club is
included.
Undoubtedly, as for me, I will definitely go for it
The club is scheduled to be open in Room 302 in our Science Building every Friday at 4:00 pm,
when I suppose you will be free.
Would you like to come and join me?
第四步：连句成篇（加入衔接词或从句）
表示并列的连词：and/but/or/so…
状语从句连词：because/ if/ though/ although…
定语从句连词：which/ that/ when/ where…
第五步：修改润色（加入高级词汇或短语）
【点睛】范文内容完整，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯，符
合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了一些主从复合句，例如：I clearly remember you’ve
mentioned your strong interest in traditional Chinese culture, so I’m writing to share some good
news with you!中使用了宾语从句；The club is scheduled to be open in Room 302 in our Science 31
Building every Friday at 4:00 pm, when I suppose you will be free.中 when 引导定语从句。
第二节(20 分)
52.假设你是红星中学高三(1)班班长李华。寒假期间，你组织你班同学参加了北京教育网站
征集的“同心抗疫”( Fighting against the Epidemic together)主题活动。请你根据以下四幅图的
先后顺序，写一篇英文周记，记述整个过程。
注意:词数不少于 60
提示词:新型冠状病毒:COVID-19;微信群:Wechat group.
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【答案】Due to the outbreak and spread of the virus called COVID-19, this winter vacation was
bound to be special to everyone. Last week, our class, under my organization, joined in an online
activity themed “Fighting against the Epidemic together” released by Beijingjiaoyu, which proved
to be instructive and greatly enhanced our confidence to win the battle.32
Last Monday while surfing the Internet for the news of the epidemic, I happened to know this
activity under way from the official website of Beijingjiaoyu, advocating we do our bits for
defeating the epidemic. So meaningful was it that I, being a monitor, informed my classmates of this
activity through Wechat. Soon we had a heated online discussion on how to participate in the
activity and various ideas were put forward like making videos, writing letters and so on.
Eventually, we decided on filming videos as a response to this activity.
Without delay, we got down to filming the videos separately. Some expressed their
thankfulness for the front-line soldiers for their sacrifice and devotion; some promised to obey the
instructions made by the government; some showed great determination to make full preparations
for the coming National College Examination. Watching the videos filmed by our classmates, I was
touched by their patriotism and sense of responsibility. Also I strongly advocated strengthening
self-protection from the disease;
All these showcased our willingness and capability to devote ourselves to fighting against the
epidemic, I zipped the videos and submitted it to Beijingjiaoyu on behalf of my classmates as
planned, with the firm belief that we are able to win the battle with joint effort.
【解析】
【分析】
这是一篇看图作文。本篇要求考生根据图片提示内容，写一篇周记，周记内容是参加北京教
育网站征集的“同心抗疫”主题活动的事情。
【详解】根据图片内容，本文可以从三个方面进行叙述：
在网上看到了关于新型冠状病毒的一个名为“同心抗疫”的活动，作为新时代的高中生，我觉
得有必要和责任为祖国、社会和所在的城市出一份力。
在微信群里和同学们就如何尽自己的努力进行了热烈的讨论，大家想出了很多方案，例如有
的提出用录制视频，有的提出用写信。最后，我们达成一致，用录制视频的方式。
很快我就收到了大家发来的视频，有同学表达了对抗疫一线人员的感谢，有同学给大家讲述
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了实用的自我防护措施，及其重要性，也有同学表达了自己要努力备战高考，争取日后成为
对社会有用的人。大家都用自己的方式来表达自己的责任心和决心，我被他们的话语感动了。
最后，我把所有的视频编辑在一起，发送给了相关单位。我坚信通过全国人民的共同努力，
我们一定会取得抗疫的胜利。
【点睛】范文内容完整，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯，符
合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了一些高级表达，例如：Last week, our class, under my
organization, joined in an online activity themed “Fighting against the Epidemic together” released
by Beijingjiaoyu, which proved to be instructive and greatly enhanced our confidence to win the
battle.中实用了过去分词作后置定语，which 引导非限制性定语从句；So meaningful was it that
I, being a monitor, informed my classmates of this activity through Wechat.使用了部分倒装。这些
句子的使用不仅让文章色彩纷呈，也展示了作者扎实的语言基础。
房山一模
第三部分：书面表达 （共两节, 35 分）
第一节（15 分）
一、评分原则：
1．本题总分 15 分，按 4 个档次给分。
2．评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言质量初步确定其档次，然后以档次的要求来衡量，
确定或降低档次，最后给分。
3．评分时应考虑：内容是否完整，条理是否清楚，交际是否得体，语言是否准确。
4．拼写、标点符号或书写影响内容表达时，应视其影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写及
词汇用法均可以接受。
5. 词数少于 50，从总分中减去 1 分。
二、内容要点：
1. 诗词的题目和作者；
2. 诗词的主要内容；34
3. 你推荐该诗词的理由。
三、各档次的给分范围和要求：
分值 评分标准说明
第一档
(13 分－15 分)
完全完成了试题规定的任务。
·内容完整，条理清楚；
·交际得体，表达时充分考虑到了交际的需求；体现出较强的语言运用
能力。
完全达到了预期的写作目的。
第二档
（9 分－12 分）
基本完成了试题规定的任务。
·内容、条理和交际等方面基本符合要求；
·所用语法和词汇满足了任务的要求；
·语法和用词方面有一些错误，但不影响理解。
基本达到了预期的写作目的。
第三档
（4 分－8 分）
未恰当完成试题规定的任务。
·内容不完整；
·所用词汇有限，语法或用词方面的错误影响了对所写内容的理解。
未能清楚地传达信息。
第四档
（1 分－3 分）
未完成试题规定的任务。
·写了少量相关信息；
·语法或用词方面错误较多，严重影响了对所写内容的理解。
0 未能传达任何信息；写的内容与要求无关。
One possible version
Dear Jim,
How is everything going? Hopefully everything is fine. From your letter, I’ve learnt that you 35
are going to participate in a Chinese Poetry Recital Contest and you asked for my advice in
choosing a Chinese poem for you.
I highly recommend a classical Chinese poem “A Tranquil Night”. It is written by Li Bai, one
of the well-known poets from the Tang Dynasty, which witnessed the peak of classical Chinese
poetry. In this poem, Li Bai associates the moon with his homesickness, expressing his longing for
the reunion with his families.
I have some good reasons for recommending this poem for you. First, this is a pretty simple
poem, which means that you can have an easy start with your preparation. Second, this poem is
pretty famous for establishing the typical image of the moon through which the poet conveys his
homesickness. For centuries, this poem has been read and recited by millions of Chinese people. I
am sure the poem will help you build connections with the audience when you are reciting it.
What do you think of my recommendation? If you have got any question, do not hesitate to
ask me. Looking forward to your next letter.
Y
ours,
L
i Hua
第二节（20 分）
一、评分原则：
1．本题总分为 20 分，按 5 个档次给分。
2．评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言质量初步确定其档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡
量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。
3．评分时应考虑：内容要点的完整性、上下文的连贯、词汇和句式的多样性及语言的
准确性。
4．拼写、标点符号或书写影响内容表达时，应视其影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写及
词汇用法均可接受。
5．词数少于 60，从总分中减去 1 分。
二、内容要点：36
1. 得知消息； 2. 着手准备；
3. 参加演讲； 4. 接受采访。
三、各档次的给分范围和要求：
第一档
（18 分－20 分）
完全完成了试题规定的任务。
·覆盖了所有内容要点；
·运用了多样的句式和丰富的词汇；
·语法或用词方面有个别错误，但为尽可能表达丰富的内容所致；体现了较强
的语言运用能力；
·有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，所写内容连贯、结构紧凑。
完全达到了预期的写作目的。
第二档
（15 分－17 分）
完全完成了试题规定的任务。
·覆盖了所有内容要点；
·运用的句式和词汇能满足任务要求；
·语法和用词基本准确，少许错误主要为尽可能表达丰富的内容所致；
·使用了简单的语句间连接成分，所写内容连贯。
达到了预期的写作目的。
第三档
（12 分－14 分）
基本完成了试题规定的任务。
·覆盖了内容要点；
·运用的句式和词汇基本满足任务要求；
·语法和用词方面有一些错误，但不影响理解。
基本达到了预期的写作目的。37
第四档
（6 分－11 分）
未恰当完成试题规定的任务。
·漏掉或未描述清楚内容要点；
·所用句式和词汇有限；
·语法或用词方面的错误影响了对所写内容的理解。
未能清楚地传达信息。
第五档
（1 分－5 分）
未完成试题规定的任务。
·明显遗漏主要内容；
·句式单调、词汇贫乏；
·语法或用词方面错误较多，严重影响了对所写内容的理解。
0 分 未能传达任何信息；所写内容与要求无关。
One Possible Version：
Last Friday, our school organized a speech contest themed “Touching the Heart of China”,
which proved to be meaningful and memorable.
Last Monday, on the class meeting, our head-teacher announced the detailed information of
the speech contest, which aroused our keen interests in the activity. I thought it a good opportunity
for me to tell the truly touching stories, so I was determined to take part in the contest.
On arriving at home, I started my preparation work. First of all, I surfed the Internet for some
videos and materials related to the theme, including people of different ages and from different
backgrounds who made contributions to our country. Then I threw myself into writing my speech
referring to the newspapers and magazines reporting their heroic deeds.
The big day came at last. Standing on the stage in the school auditorium, I delivered my
speech in which I described doctors and nurses’ moving deeds and saluted to them with the
highest admiration. All the audiences were deeply moved by my words. At the end of my speech,
they gave loud applauses.
It surprised me that I won the First Prize. With the diploma in hand, I was honored to accept
the interview from the host. I expressed that the activity came to an end, but the moving deeds still
happens every day in our country. We should respect and learn from these people who have
touched the heart of every Chinese. 38
顺义一摸
第三部分:书面表达（共两节,35 分）
第一节（15 分）
假设你是红星中学高三学生李华,你的英国笔友 Jim 在给你的邮件中说想 了解北京空
气质量方面的情况。请你给他回复邮件，内容包括：
1. 空气变好；
2. 变好原因；
3. 你的感受。
注意：1.词数不少于 50；
2.开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
第二节（20 分）
假设你是红星中学高三学生李华，你们班上周组织了一次以“感受工匠精 神”为主题的
社会实践活动。请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，写一篇英文日记, 记述你们在北京木制文化
传承园活动的全过程。
注意:词数不少于 60o
提示词：北京木制文化传承园 Beijing Wood Culture Inheritance Garden
工匠 craftsman
第三部分书面表达
第一节
One possible version:
Dear Jim,39
I'm glad that you're concerned with the air quality in Beijing and I'm eager to tell you some
details.
It's obvious that the air quality in Beijing is getting better and better due to our concerted
efforts. On the one hand, more and more Chinese are willing to take public transportations instead of
private cars, which can reduce the burning of fuels. On the other hand, our government has taken
effective measures to control air pollution such as banning smoking and punishing illegal factories.
To my delight, our efforts count. I really appreciate the cleaner air nowadays and I'm confident
about a brighter future of air quality in Beijing.
I hope my introduction can be of good use for you. If you want to know more, please let me
know. Best wishes.
Yours,
Li Hua
第二节
One possible version:
Last week was memorable because our class organized an activity called “Feel the Spirit of
Craftsmen”.
Early in the morning, the school bus took us to the Beijing Wood Culture Inheritance Garden.
On arrival, the guide showed us around the exhibition hall, giving a specific introduction about
Beijing wood culture, which drew our attention and aroused everyone's interest. After that, with the
help of an expert, we couldn't wait to try ourselves. We worked together to make a chair. Besides,
we experienced the best way to carve Chinese characters on a piece of wood. It was such a
wonderful and meaningful day that we benefited lot.
On the way back, we shared our art works and feelings in our WeChat group. I hope our class
can organize more activities like this.
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