2020 届浙江省新高考高三英语作文“内容概要”
模拟练习(四)写作指导
一、概写原文
阅读下面短文,根据其内容写一篇 60 词左右的内容概要。
Scientists in London say they have found the best diet for both humans and
the planet. If the world followed the so-called "planetary health" diet, the
scientists told Reuters that each year more than 11 million early deaths could be
prevented. Scientists say that the way we produce and eat food is very bad for
the planet. For the health of the planet, they claim the same diet would reduce
greenhouse gases and save more land, water and animals.
Tim Lang, a professor at Britain's University of London, co-led the research.
He told Reuters, "The food we eat and how we produce it determines the health
of people and the planet, and we are currently getting this seriously wrong."
Lang added that the world's population is expected to grow to 10 billion people
by 2050. If we want to feed everyone, he explained, we all need to change what
we eat and the way we eat by "improving food production and reducing food
waste."
Well, what do you eat on the planetary health diet? The scientists who
created this diet say it is largely plant-based but still has small amounts of dairy, fish and meat. The diet calls for cutting red meat and sugar by 50 percent and
doubling the amount of nuts, fruits, vegetables and legumes.
Food situations around the world are not equal. In certain areas, this would
mean great changes. People in North America, for example, eat 6.5 times the
recommended amount of red meat. On the other hand, people in South Asia eat
only half the amount suggested by the new planetary health diet. Meeting the
targets for vegetables would need big changes in other areas. In sub-Saharan
Africa, people on average eat 7.5 times the suggested amount of vegetables like
potatoes and cassava.
The scientists admit their goal will be difficult to achieve. But for them doing
nothing is also not an option. Willet said, "If we can't quite make it, it's better to
try and get as close as we can."
二、概写步骤
第一步:通读理解全文,了解文章结构,明确各段落之间的逻辑关系,提取全文中心
词(尤其是名词与动词)。
第二步:细读原文,划出各段的主题句与关键词,关键词以动词与名词为主,涵盖段
落全部要点与次要点。
第三步:根据所划内容,结合理解,重新组织语言。可用中文概括出段落大意,然后
用一句话翻译出来。第四步:通读修改。修改是一个重要的环节,要考虑连接词的使用;高级词汇的替
换;句式的多样;语法是否正确以及字数的多少。
第五步:用自信衡水体抄到试卷上,力求清楚美观。
三、分段概括
关键词句已在原文标出,结合理解,用中文概括出一句话并译成英文。
❶科学家发现的所谓"Planetary health 饮食"被认为,不仅对人类,而且对地球,是
最健康的饮食。
The "Planetary health" diet, discovered by scientists, is considered as the
healthiest not just for humans, but for the planet.
❷一位研究人员强调:我们的饮食对两者都有影响,我们应该改变当前不健康的饮
食。
A researcher stresses that our diets affect both and we should change the
current unhealthy diet.
❸所推荐的饮食主要由蔬菜组成,还包括一点肉类。
The recommended diet mainly consists of vegetables, including a little meat.
❹但是全球食物消耗存在不公平,这使得取得这个目标成为一个挑战。However, there exists inequality in the global food consumption, which
makes it challenging to achieve this goal.
❺尽管这样,科学家将继续追求这个目标。
Even so, the scientists will continue to pursue the aim.
四、下水范文
The "Planetary health" diet, discovered by scientists, is considered as the
healthiest, not just for humans, but for the planet. A researcher stresses that our
diets affect both and we should change the current unhealthy diet. The
recommended diet mainly consists of vegetables, including a little meat. But
there exists inequality in the global food consumption, which makes it
challenging to achieve this goal. Even so, the scientists will continue to pursue
the aim.【73 字】
参考范文:
Scientists claim they have obtained the best diet benefiting both humans
and the planet. Tim Lang, the leader of the research, emphasized the significance
of changing the food and the way we eat. In other words, it is more scientific for
diet to be more based on plants than animals. However, the food condition is not globally balanced. Tough as the target is to realize, it is worth trying. (69 words).
【69 字】