读后续写话题素材一
人际交往
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
There was once a guy who suffered from cancer, a cancer that can't be
cured. He was 18 years old and he could die anytime. One day, he wanted to go out for
walking. So his mother gave him permission.
He walked down his block and found a lot of stores. He passed a CD store and
looked through the front door for a second as he walked. He stopped and went back to
look into the store. He saw a beautiful girl about his age and he knew it was love at first
sight. He opened the door and walked in, not looking at anything else but her. He walked
closer and closer until he was finally at the front desk where she sat.
She began to looked up and asked, "Can I help you?"
She smiled and he thought it was the most beautiful smile he had ever seen before.
"Uh...Yeah...Umm...I would like to buy a CD," he looked at her and said.
He picked one out and gave her money for it.
"Would you like me to wrap it for you?" she asked, smiling her cute smile again.
人际交往
主题语境：社会交往
语篇类型：短篇小说
语篇难度：★★★★
关键词：a CD store
短文词数：348
建议时间：20 mins
He nodded and she went to the back. She came back with the wrapped CD and
gave it to him. He took it and walked out of the store.
From then on, he went to that store every day and bought a CD, and she
wrapped it for him. He took the CD home and put it in his closet. He was still too
shy to ask her out. His mother found out about this and told him to just ask her. So
the next day, he took all his courage and went to the store. He bought a CD once
again. She went to the back of the store and came back with it wrapped. He took
it and left a piece of paper of his phone number on the desk and ran out.
"RRRRRING!" She was surprised to find that.
One day the phone rang, and the mother picked it up and said, "Hello?“
注意：
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1：It was the girl!
Paragraph 2：The mother was deeply moved by her son.
语篇解读
这是一篇记叙文类读后续写。通过阅读原文，可以归纳其发展脉络：身患绝症——憧
憬美好——音响店购买CD——邂逅美丽女孩——暗自眷恋——发出爱的信号……
原文的情节提示设置的悬念：男生邂逅美丽的女孩后，激发了他怎样的勇气和动力？
在生命走向尽头的前夕，他勇敢地迈开了什么步伐？这些勇气反映在哪些方面？或体
现在什么东西上？母亲是如何揭示这些秘密的？
续写的情节构思：（1）母亲接起电话；（2）女孩的反应；（3）母亲在收拾儿子的
遗物；（4）发现的东西；（5）真情实意；（6）令人感动的理由。
难句分析
原文：There was once a guy who suffered from cancer, a cancer that can't be
cured.
译文：曾经有一个人，他患了癌症——一种无法治愈的癌症。
分析：该句含有两个定语从句。第一个定语从句是由指人的关系代词who引导，修饰
先行词a guy，该关系代词在定语从句中作主语。第二个定语从句是由指物的关系代词
that引导，修饰先行词a cancer，该关系代词在定语从句中也作主语，且第二个定语
从句是解释说明上文提到的cancer，故翻译时该加上破折号。
笔前点睛
审题分析
☞ 审要求
1. 文章属于记叙文；
2. 顺应文章发展脉络，使用第三人称进行续写；
3. 以一般过去时为主，适时使用相应的过去时态和一般现在时；
4. 后续事件须自然过渡、合情合理；
5. 突出正能量，展示积极向上的勇敢精神。
★ 思路点拨
第一段：
1.母亲听闻女孩的电话而抽泣；
2.告诉女孩儿子已经故去；
3.母亲思绪万千，整理儿子遗物；
4.发现儿子写给女孩的情书。
第二段：
1. 母亲极为感动；
2. 一份朴素的情感；
3. 让儿子活了更长时间；
4. 活要活得美好，梦要梦得热烈，爱要爱得完整。
高分范文
Paragraph 1: It was the girl! The mother couldn't hide her deep sadness, so
she began to cry and said, "Lovely girl, my son is already gone." The girl kept
silent for a second, and then continued to comfort the boy's mother. A few
minutes later, she had to say goodbye to the mother. Eventually, the mother
lost control of her emotions and burst out crying. "What a good girl!" she said.
And then she was collecting his son's relic in his room. She was surprised
to find out a new notebook, which was placed among all his CDs, from which
the notebook dropped. There was full of
love on it, and on the last page it was written as follows: "Hi.. pretty girl, I
wrote RRRRRING on a piece of paper to you. Do you see it?"
Paragraph 2: The mother was deeply moved by her son. Sure enough, this
kind of courage could make people touched. What is love? As an old saying
goes, "Live beautifully, dream passionately and love completely." (157 words)
篇章分析
重要短语
hide one's deep sadness 隐藏某人的深痛
keep silent 保持沉默
say goodbye to 向……说再见
lose control of 失去对……的控制
burst out crying 突然哭起来
be full of love 满满的爱
as follows 如下
sure enough足够了
☛ 高级句型
1. What a good girl！
（what引导的感叹句）
2. a new notebook, which was placed among all his CDs, from which the notebook dropped.
（句中含有两个定语从句，即which引导的非限制性定语从句和“介词from+which”引导的非限制
性定语从句）
3.As an old saying goes, "Live beautifully, dream passionately and love completely."
（关系代词as引导非限制性定语从句）
高分解密
1.作者从语篇材料内容的阅读到段落开头语和标注的关键词的综合分析，再到想
象力的自由发挥，充分展示了高超的续写文章的能力。表达逻辑性强，层次分明，
上下文衔接完美。
2.语言运用丰富。使用了较多的高级词汇，如hide one's deep sadness、keep
silent、say goodbye to、lose control of、burst out crying、full of love、as
follows 以及sure enough等。高级句式运用得体，如which引导的非限制性定语
从句，as引导的非限制性定语从句等。
3.过渡性词语的使用恰到好处，如so、and then、a few minute later、
eventually 以及sure enough等。
模拟训练
参考范文
写作思路
读后续写话题素材二
人生态度
人生态度
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Everybody has to face bad days in their life. Some face diseases, some
face fears, some face poverty, some face helplessness, etc. No one can escape
from it. It is a rule of life. Two things always combine together like joy and
sadness, laugh and cry, health and illness, profit and loss, morning and night,
victory and failure. Likewise, good days and bad days always combine together.
You know what is the biggest advantage of bad days? First of all in hard days
you come to know yourskills and your potential. All the superheros we watch in
the television had badly past life therefore they are what they are today. In bad
times we try hard to come out of it. Remember one thing that when bad days
finish and good days start a person changes hisattitude and forgets his pain and
this is the reason that good days and bad days keep on coming and going.
One thing I must say is that your hard days are your teacher and nobody can
understand what you face. Make sure whatever you have faced you will never do
that with others though your whole life passes in good days or bad days.
主题语境：人生态度
语篇类型：论说文
语篇难度：★★★★
关键词：life
短文词数：320
建议时间：25mins
When bad days come a person first of all cannot understand what is going on, why
me? But after some time he realizes his strength and starts doing every single thing
to come out of it. That journey is very painful but when you once cross it you will
find your journey very meaningful. You have totally changed your thoughts, your
perception （感知）, and you can understand life better. You get the meaning of
your life. In short, you start becoming wise.
The biggest lesson of life during bad days according to me is that a person becomes
wise and a giver whom he wasn't before. Life means to create it.
注意：
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语
Paragraph 1：Therefore, you shouldn't fear hard days in your life.
Paragraph 2：However, when you go into the good days...
语篇解读
生活中的事情是五彩缤纷、绚丽多彩的，是喜怒哀乐的混合体，所以在艰辛的日
子望不气馁，在阳光明媚的日子里不自做，要有清醒的生活理念，才能成为生活
的强者、胜者。
难句分析
原文：One thing I must say is that your hard days are your teacher and
nobody can understand what you face.
译文：有一件事我必须说，你的艰难日子是你的老师，你所面对的，没有人能理
解。
分析：这是一个主从复合句。主语中I must say为省略关系词的定语从句，that引
导表语从句，其中从句中的what引导宾语从句。
文章来源
本文选自英文网站sunnyskyz.com，原文题目为：“Life's Biggest Lessons During
Hard Days”《在艰苦岁月中生活的最大的教训》，作者为Sonia Kaur。
笔前点睛
审题分析
☞ 审要求
读后续写，本文属于议论文；
☞ 审人称、时态
第二人称、兼顾第一人称，以一般现在时为主；
☞ 审要点
艰辛的日子不气馁，生活态度积极，光明就在眼前；好日子要珍惜，否则会家破人亡，遗憾终生。
☞ 原文所给的关键词分类
人物：person
事件：bad days、life、good days、skills、attitude、the meaning of your life、the reason、
journey、lesson
在续写时，除了注意原文给出的关键词，还需要注意以下线索：
1. What does the author think of bad days？
2. What do bad days bring you？
3. How do you speak of bad days？
4. What's the relationship between bad days and good days？
5. How can you become a winner of life？
思路点拨
本篇续写内容难度大，涉及对生活的感悟，该话题对学生来
说较深奥，可以先把文章理解透，正确把握原文内容，根据
最后段落，发现规律和逻辑关系，结合提示语、提示词从而
找到续写线索，本文着重写了bad days对人生的影响以及人
们如何才能把不利条件变为有利条件，从中汲取教训避免走
弯路，然后再过渡到good days的叙述上，但要珍惜来之不易
的生活，不能让它流失，这样才能成为生活的胜者。此外，
要注重提升表达层次，多用复杂句式和高级词汇。
高分范文
Paragraph 1：Therefore, you shouldn't fear hard days in your life. ①You should
first think what you want in your life, and then you should smile at everything
and have a positive attitude to start finding a good idea of solving it with
your skills. ②This is one of the most important things I have learnt in my life.
To pass through the bad days is the same as for a person to have a
hard journey. ③However, by doing that, you'll change yourself and get a bright
future in the end."
Paragraph 2: However, when you go into the good days, you should value them
and work hard than ever. Otherwise, you'll lose the things belonging to you.
④For example, one of my friends once had a rich, happy family, but he didn't
work hard so that he had to drop out of school, which made his parents
sad. ⑤Even worse, his parents got parted because of him some day, so that he
felt sad and regretful. So you should know the meaning of your life. (152 words)
高分解密
本篇续写能够依据提示句、提示词并结合原文内容合理安排了所要补充的内容，
较好地完成了续写任务；另外，作者在使用复杂句式的同时，注重段、句之间的
逻辑关系，较多地使用了过渡词，如 however、otherwise、for example、even
wo
篇章分析
①first..and then..首先……接着……，表示做某事的顺序，此处说明做事情的逻
辑性，句中的what引导宾语从句。
②I have learnt...为省略关系代词的定语从句。
③过渡词However起到承上启下的作用，表示意思转折。
④本句为并列复合句。but连接前后两个并列分句，后一分句中so that引导结果
状语从句，which引导非限制性定语从句。
⑤本句中的过渡词Even worse强化观点，而so that引导结果状语从句。
rse等，使得全文结构紧凑，成为得高分的亮点之处。
模拟训练
参考范文
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范文解析
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读后续写话题素材三
法治意识
法治意识
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
One day Kavya and I were playing with the racketball and the ball went
into Takku's house. Though we were scared, we went to his house and asked him if
he could give us our ball.
He said, "No." We felt helpless. Suddenly, I had an idea. There was a water
tank behind Takku's house. I looked at it and said to Kavya, " Kavya, look at this.
We can climb the water tank and jump over the gate." Kavya agreed, but we were
both wearing skirts. We couldn't climb. " It doesn't matter. We can see tomorrow.
Don't forget to wear trousers," said Kavya. I said bye to her and went back home.
The next day I went to Kavya's house early. We were both wearing trousers.
"Best of luck," said Kavya's brother Vijay. He knew everything. He said, "Shout
loudly if you need me." We went to the water tank. "Who will climb first?" asked
Kavya. "You" I said. She agreed. She climbed down into Takku's house. I followed
her and then we were looking under a bed for the ball when we heard a noise. It
was Vijay. "Mother is calling you," he whispered. We hurried and took out the lost
ball. But along with the ball was a gold bar! We quickly took both the ball and the
gold bar and climbed up the water tank again.
主题语境：法治意识
语篇类型：个人故事
语篇难度：★★★
关键词：ball
短文词数：311
建议时间：21 mins
When we reached Kavya's house, the TV was on. It was news time. I couldn't
believe my ears when it said that 20 gold bars were stolen from a gold shop. They
showed a picture of the gold bars and it was exactly like the one we had found.
We all knew it because there was a look of surprise on everyone's face. We quickly
told the story to Kavya's mother.
注意：
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1：When we finished it, Kavya's mother felt shocked.
Paragraph 2：When we arrived home...
语篇解读
本文是记叙文，叙述了作者与朋友一起寻找丢失的球的过程中，偶然发现了一块
金条，而那块金条与新闻报道中丢失的金条一模一样，然后快速地告诉了朋友的
妈妈……
难句分析
原文：Though we were scared，we went to his house and asked him if he
could give us our ball.
译文：尽管我们很害怕，我们还是去了他家并且问他是否可以把球给我们。
分析：这是一个主从复合句。连词though引导让步状语从句，主句中并列连词
and 连接两个并列谓语；连词if引导的从句作动词asked的宾语。
文章来源
本文选自英文网站 fantasyscrollmag.com，原文题目为“The Lost Ball”《丢失的
球》。
笔前点睛
审题分析
☞ 审要求
读后续写，本文语篇类型属于记叙文；
☞ 审人称、时态
以第一人称为主，兼顾第三人称；时态主要是一般过去时。
☞ 审要点
报警 ☞ 到Takku的家 ☞ 警察搜寻 ☞ 找到赃物——偷来的金条
收获 ☞ 奖品 ☞ 同学的欢迎和尊敬
☞ 原文所给的关键词分类
地点：Takku's house、home、under a bed
人物：Kavya、Vijay、Kavya's mother
事件：ball、gold bars
事物：a water tank、trousers
在续写时，除了注意原文给出的关键词，还需要注意以下线索：
1.Why didn't Takku give their lost ball？
2.What did Kavya's mother do after listening to their story？
3.What would the police give them？
4.Why were they pleased with a reward？
5.How did their classmates feel？
思路点拨
本篇续写暗示有两方面的事情，第一是发现Takku家
有偷来的金条后的处理方式。第二是Kavya和“我”
协助警察抓到小偷后警察、家人和同学等对她们的
看法。只要把这两件事情弄清楚，注意两段之间的
联系就能完成这篇续写。另外要把握好提示语，结
合提示词，适当运用高级句式就能写出高质量的作
文。
高分范文
Paragraph 1: When we finished it, Kavya's mother felt shocked. So she decided to
call the police. ①After the police came quickly, they followed us to Takku's house.
②When they entered the house, they searched the house at once. To our surprise,
the police found moregold bars under a bed. As a result, they caught Taktu. At the
same time, the police said thanks to us and they gave us each a bag as a reward.
③What made me pleased was that we helped the police catch a thief. So we
returned home excitedly.
Paragraph 2: When we arrived home, we couldn't wait to open the bags. There was
an investigative book and a pen for kavya. And there was an investigative book and
a ball for me. So I gave my investigative book to kavya's brother Vijay.
④After Kavya's mother saw what we did, she felt very satisfied. ⑤The next day,
when we went to school, our classmates were all waiting for us at the gate of the
school. They hugged us together firmly and treated us as heroes. (164 words)
高分解密
本篇续写内容与原文融合度高，故事性强，是原文恰如其分
的补充和延伸，没有这部分续写，读者就不知道最后的结论，
坏人就不能得到惩治，好人不能得到肯定，故事就不完整，
尤其是原文的最后一句把经过很快地告诉Kavya的妈妈，那
么接下来会发生什么事情呢？读者肯定会努力地猜测。另外，
作者虽然多次使用时间状语从句，但不显得单调，分别用了
连词after、when等，是语境中的自然运用；再者，本文中
大量使用了高级词汇：call the police、to our surprise、as
a result、reward、couldn't wait to、investigative等。
模拟训练
参考范文
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读后续写话题素材四
公益事业
公益事业
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
“Can you tell me if anyone in our store doescommunity service?” Bill asked. A
person said, “I know that Rose does. She helps the homeless at her church.” Bill,
my husband, had recently been transferred to this store as the store manager. Bill
liked to recognize employees who worked in community service. He met with Rose
and found out about the outreach program operating out of her inner-city church.
Bill told Rose that he thought I would enjoy helping her.
When Bill came home that night after the two-hour commute, he told me
about his conversation with Rose. I was excited at the idea of helping in such a
program. I started to spread the word that Bill had an employee who was helping
the homeless out of her church. I asked if anyone wanted to help by donating
usable items. The response was amazing. Different kinds of donations were
flooding in.
主题语境：公益事业
语篇类型：个人故事
语篇难度：★★★
关键词：snowmobile suit
短文词数：346
建议时间：24 mins
I took this opportunity to clean out the closets in our home, too. Bill had an overcoat he
seldom wore. I put the overcoat in, along with clothes our children had outgrown and
several articles of clothing of my own. Every so often Rose would stop in Bill's office and tell
him stories about the mission. One day she talked about an overcoat that her minister had
taken from the clothes we had donated. As Rose described the overcoat, Bill knew it was
his. He was happy that he had been able to provide this young minister with the warm coat.
One cold day I walked by our downstairs closet. I noticed a snowmobile suit that had
been our oldest son, Todd's. The thought to put this snowsuit in for the mission immediately
came to my mind.I dismissed the thought as I had been saving this snowsuit for Brandon, our
youngest son. Todd had died in a car accident a few years ago and for some reason, I had
saved this snowmobile suit for Brandon. This was one of the very few things I had saved of
Todd's.
注意：
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语
Paragraph 1：I shouldn't have decided to give up this"special"snowsuit I had been saving all
these years.
Paragraph 2：Word about the mission spread like wildfire.
语篇解读
你曾经做过社区服务吗？Bill所在商店的员工Rose常做社区服务。在Bill夫妇的帮助下，很多人参与社区
服务，无偿捐赠物品帮助穷人。
篇章分解
★ background
Bill want to know who does community service
☟
Have conversation with Rose
☟
Spread the news that people can help the homeless by donating something
☟
Todd's snowmobile suit
★ whether to donate or not
This was one of the very few things I had saved of Todd's. But ...
★ development of the mission
What does churches get? What does people do in our community?
笔前点睛
审题分析
☞ 审要求
读后续写，文章语篇类型属于记叙文；
☞ 审人称、时态
第一人称、一般过去时；
☞ 原文所给的关键词分类
地点：community、church
人物：Todd、Brandon
事件：at the idea of helping、donating usable items、the mission、saved
时间：that night
事物：snowmobile suit
在续写时，除了注意原文给出的关键词，还需要注意以下线索：
1. What's the story behind the snowmobile suit ?
2. Did the author donate the snowmobile suit ?
3. How did the mission spread? Did anyone join in the donation? If yes, how ？
思路点拨
1. 研读试题中要求的四条注意事项。
2. 续写时注意“上下求索”，读懂上下文的逻辑关系，读懂提示句。根据关键词
语，顺着原来文章的思路续写，并适当发挥。
3. 注意使用各种语法结构和丰富、准确的词汇，尽可能少犯语法、拼写以及标点
等方面的错误。
难句分析
原文：I started to spread the word that Bill had an employee who was helping
the homeless out of her church.
译文：我开始传播消息，即比尔有一个雇员在帮助她教堂外的那些无家可归的人。
分析：这是一个主从复合句。句中that Bill had an employee who was helping
the homeless out of her church为同位语从句，该从句中who引导定语从句。
高分范文
Paragraph 1: I shouldn't have decided to give up this "special" snowsuit I had
been saving all these years.However, the thought came again, "Put
thesnowmobile suit in." I walked over and took it off the hanger. I looked at
the tag inside.
When Todd died, he was six feet tall. Brandon wasn't quite three years old
when Todd died. Even now he wasn't big enough for this suit. I decided it was
time to part with this "special" snowmobile suit I'd beensaving. I laid it
lovingly on top of a bag of other clothes for the mission.
Paragraph 2: Word about the mission spread like wildfire. Churches were
calling, offering clothing and food. Once a week I stopped by a church in a
nearby town. Each week I loaded the back end of our van with the things the
people in their communities gave away. An older couple from
our community gave us a check and told us to use the money to buy things to
take to the mission. When Bill drove to work every day, his car was loaded
with help for the homeless, given by total strangers.(159 words)
高分解密
与所给短文衔接紧密，与所提供各段开头语衔接合理；内容丰富，应用了短文中标出的
大部分关键词语；文中运用了现在分词作伴随状语及定语从句、过去分词作定语等；此
外，文中较好地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构比较紧凑。
篇章分析
☞ 重要短语
part with sth. 放弃，交出（尤指不舍得的东西）
take...off... 从……上取下……
give away 捐赠
be loaded with 装载着
☞ 高级句型
1. I decided it was time to part with this "special" snowmobile suit I'd been saving.
（定语从句）
2. Churches were calling, offering clothing and food.
（现在分词短语作伴随状语）
3. When Bill drove to work every day, his car was loaded with help for the homeless,
given by total strangers.
（when引导时间状语从句；过去分词短语作定语）
模拟训练
参考范文
Paragraph 1 Paragraph 2
高分解析
读后续写话题素材五
家庭生活
家庭生活
主题语境：家庭生活
语篇类型：个人生活
语篇难度：★★
关键词：son
短文词数：303
建议时间：23 mins
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
James was a captain in the United States Army, but no war zone could have prepared him for taking care of three-year-old son Shawn on his own.
James had taken leave from the Army so his wife Jessica could go to take care of her sick mother. He was excited about playing Mr. Mom for a few
weeks, but he had greatly underestimated Shawn.
Morning one started out interestingly. Shawn woke at 7:00 a.m, ready to start the day. James was still fast asleep when Shawn made his way into
the bedroom. James was awoken to a firm slap on the forehead and a usually sweet little voice demanding that "Daddy get up". James yawned and
rubbed his head, saying, "Good morning, little man. How are you?"
"Get up, Daddy. I'm hungry."
"Okay, I'm getting up." James was out of bed, had his teeth brushed, his face washed, and was fully dressed in less than five minutes. Years of
military training and repetition came in handy at times. Poor James had no idea just how much of that training he would need to pull from to get
through the morning.
"Daddy, I'm hungry," Shawn repeated, not so much informing, but rather ordering.
"How about we go get you dressed first?"
"No."
"Yes. Let's get dressed and then we will have breakfast."
"No!" Shawn ran from the room.
"Excuse me, sir. You come back here!"
"No, sir!"
once James finished laughing and regained his composure, he ran after Shawn who was
waiting for him in the kitchen." Shawn, we need to get dressed and then we'll have
breakfast."
"Carry me," Shawn ordered, lifting his arms up toward James, "Aren't I supposed to be
giving the orders around here?" James questioned as he picked up Shawn and carried him
towards the bedroom.
注意：
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1：James threw his son to the bed and ordered him to take off his sleeping
clothes.
Paragraph 2：Therefore, Shawn ordered his daddy to
文章来源文章来源本文选自英文网站 thestoryshack.com，原文题目为 “Captain Daddy”《上校
爸爸》，作者为Jen Beaney，Izzy Wingham
语篇解读
本文是记叙文。作者描述了一位上校军官，在家照顾孩子的令人啼笑皆非的故事。
孩子不是军人，但孩子模仿军人，军人对待孩子不能只是命令，而是启发引导。
这个故事说明了淘气是孩子的天性，而因材施教是成年人的必修功课。
难句分析
原文：Poor James had no idea just how much of that training he would need
to pull from to get through the morning.
译文：可怜的詹姆斯不知道他需要从那个训练中拿出多少（技能）才能熬过那天
下午。
分析：这是一个主从复合句。how much of...为同位语从句，其中that training
后的he would need to pull from作定语，是一个省略关系词的定语从句。
笔前点睛
审题分析
☞ 审要求
读后续写，本文语篇类型属于记叙文；
☞ 审人称、时态
以第三人称为主兼顾第二人称，以一般过去时为主兼顾一般现在时态；
☞ 审要点
爸爸的命令 ☛ 换衣服的命令没有见效 ☛ 商量换衣服后去吃饭的效果显著
儿子的命令 ☛ 吃饼干的命令见效 ☛ 哭闹想要见妈妈见效
☞ 原文所给的关键词分类
地点：kitchen、bedroom
人物：James、son、Shawn、captain
事件：breakfast、orders
事物：bed、forehead
在续写时，除了注意原文给出的关键词，还需要注意以下线索：
1.What's James？
2.Why did James underestimate his son？
3.What kind of ways could be effective？
4.What would Daddy usually do while staying alone with a child？
思路点拨
本文的第一段最后一句提到James低估了儿子Shawn，暗示着这篇续写短文要依
据与儿子的相处，写出儿子的淘气和不容易管理；本文强调James是一位上校，
显然管理士兵与管理儿子所用方式是不同的，结合生活经验，围绕孩子的衣、食、
住等内容来续写；续写时要注意提示句以及提示词的导向作用，不能偏离这些内
容，同时注意两段之间的关联以及亮点句式、词汇的运用。
高分范文
Paragraph 1: James threw his son to the bed and ordered him to take of his
sleeping clothes. However, his son cried, "No, I'm unwilling to change them."
① At that moment, He had no idea but to stop Shawn's crying.
Suddenly James patted himself on the forehead, and then a good idea
occurred to him. ②He wasn't a captain, but a father. So he should show love
to his son, not just give orders. "My dear, we change clothes in order to
have breakfast, OK?" "Oh, OK! Daddy!" After that, Shawn wanted to eat
biscuits.
Paragraph 2: Therefore, Shawn ordered his daddy tomake some biscuits for
him. He said, "Daddy, I'm hungry again, so you must give me some biscuits."
He did that just like his father asked soldiers to obey his orders. ③At first
James didn't respond, but Shawn rushed to the kitchen."④ Seeing that,
James quickly said,"OK, sir. ⑤The noon was coming near, and James put his
son onto the bed, but he cried again," Where is my mummy? I want Mummy."
James felt angry, ⑥shouting at his son," You must shut up your mouth.
However, there was no effect at all. He had to ask his wife to come back in
the end. (170 words)
高分解密
本篇范文能够从原文中找到underestimate、captain等要点提示，续写内容合乎
生活规律并且科学严谨，语句有条理、过渡自然，把淘气的儿子、无奈的爸爸以
及爸爸教育孩子采用的方式变化生动地写了出来，故事性强。作者使用了一些高
级语法结构，如not...but...、had no idea but to...等，成为范文的亮点；本题
满分25分，本篇范文得24分。
篇章分析
①have no idea but to do sth. “除了做某事别无办法”
②not…but... 不是……而是……
③连词but 连接表示转折意义的并列分句
④现在分词短语 Seeing that 作时间状语
⑤连词and连接并列分句；连词but连接表示转折意义的并列分句
⑥现在分词短语shouting...为伴随状语
读后续写话题素材六
人与环境
人与环境语境考察
例题展示主题语境：人与环境语篇类型：短篇小说语篇难度：★★关键词：
magic hole短文词数：311建议时间：21 mins
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Penny was a little girl who lived in Alaska.It was ice-cold there.She kept
praying that she could play green and warm gardens like we do but of course,
she couldn't.
Her father, like all the men there, didn't have a job. He hunted seals and
caught fishes, as was the custom. So her father hadn't even heard of money
and even if he had money, there weren't any aeroplanes to take them abroad.
Now somewhere near Penny's house was a deep, dark forest. Everyone was
afraid to enter it. They said that whoever entered it would be sucked in by a
magic hole.
One day, Penny was playing with her Eskimo friends when one of the boys
shouted, "Hey, I dare one of you to enter the magic forest."
No one dared. Penny picked up a twig and threw it at the edge of the forest.
Nothing happened. Penny astonished. "It's all a legend! We can play hide-and-
seek in the woods if we want," she thought. She walked slowly towards the
woods. It was getting colder and colder as she took each step. She walked
right into the middle of the forest.
There was a small hill with a great big hole right in the middle of it. She
wanted to jump into it. She took a big, deep breath and jumped.
There was a sinking feeling in her stomach. She realized that she was falling
down deep somewhere. But she did not land. Her head was spinning and
suddenly all her fur clothes disappeared and there was a skirt and blouse
instead of them. She was at the beach.
She found that she had a bag with her. Inside the bag there was a swimsuit, a
mat, a book, a bottle of lotion（护肤液）and a towel. She took all these
home.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划
线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，
请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1：When she almost stepped out of the forest, she heard her
family crying.__________________________________________
Paragraph 2：However, Penny didn't say anything at all.
____________________________
语篇解读
★ background
Penny wished to play in a warm garden.
☟Father couldn't afford it.
☟near their house, forest, a great hole
★ Penny walked into the forest furtherA magic hole : The warm spring could
be for swimming.
★ Going hometaking a swimsuit, a mat, a book, a bottle of lotion and a towel
out
难句分析原文：She kept praying that she could play in the green and warm
gardens like we do but of course，she couldn't.译文：她不断祈祷能像我们一样
在绿色温暖的花园里玩耍，但是，当然，她不能这样做。分析：这是一个并列复
合句。并列连词but连接前后两个并列分句；前一分句中that引导宾语从句。
审题分析
☞ 审要求读后续写，本文语篇类型属于记叙文；
☞ 审人称、时态第三人称、以一般过去时为主兼顾现在时态；
☞ 审要点家人以及朋友对Penny的担心、焦虑守候；Penny的归来；对Penny遭遇的好奇；
Penny对自己的遭遇的冷静处理和淡化；Penny对遭遇的利用以及与朋友一起致富的做法。
☞ 原文所给的关键词分类
地点：Alaska、gardens、house、forest、at the beach；
人物：Penny、father、friends；
事件：hole、mat
在续写时，除了注意原文给出的关键词，还需要注意以下线索：
1. Why did Penny wish to play in the green and warm gardens？
2. How did the magic hole affect people there？
3. Why was it getting colder and colder？
4. What happened to Penny in the magic hole？
5. Why was she at the beach？
6. What did she take out from the magic hole？
思路点拨
本文线索比较明确，只要抓住Penny的愿望与
下文Penny进入魔洞的经历就可以联想到洞里
边是温泉。写作时要依据给出的提示，理清
原文结尾的内容，预测接下来文章怎么发展，
合理、科学地把它们衔接起来。尽可能多使
用高级句式、语法结构以及高级词汇来表述
要点，防止要点遗漏、句式单一等问题。
高分范文
Paragraph 1: When she almost stepped out of the forest, she heard her family
crying. ①As soon as the family and her friends saw her standing at the edge
of the forest, they couldn't help jumping. ②The father approached her and
hugged her firmly, afraid that she would disappear again. Penny felt very
excited. Then, they went to their house.③ After going home, the family felt
surprised and asked her what happened to her in the forest.
Paragraph 2: However, Penny didn't say anything at all. ④She only took out
the things that she brought back, the swimsuit, the mat, the book and so on.
⑤As years passed by, Penny grew up. Their family was poor and couldn't bath
at a warm place. ⑥ One day, when she saw her swimsuit, she suddenly
thought that she had been in a magic hole and stayed at the beach, where it's
warm. Therefore, she decided to take her family and friends there and make
it a tourist spot. They are living a happy life nowadays. (164 words)
高分解密
本文与原文衔接自然，续写符合思维习惯，但结局出人意料，故事性强，并能体
现正能量；作者使用了比较多的复杂句式，如状语、定语、宾语从句等，高级词
汇和短语，如approach、disappear、surprised、pass by、therefore、live
a...life等，展示了作者深厚扎实的语言功底；本题满分25分，本篇范文得分24分。
语境演练题型: 书面表达难度: 准确率: 21.74%
①连词as soon as 引导时间状语从句。②afraid that 意为“担心……”，that 引导
宾语从句。③“after + v-ing”结构作状语，剧中的what引导的从句为asked的宾
语。④that引导的定语从句。⑤连词as引导的时间状语从句。⑥本句比较复杂，
连词when引导的从句作时间状语，主句中thought后的that引导的从句为宾语从
句，其中where引导的从句为非限制性定语从句，修饰先行词beach。
模拟题演练
We moved on into the jungle --a forest where large numbers of tall trees and
plants grow very close together. Old Mali went in front and I followed close
behind him. We stopped for the night about an hour before it began to get
dark.
Old Mali lit a fire.When it was bright he showed me how to make a bed with
moss(青苔,苔藓).It was soft and comfortable.
-Mali, how did you learn to make such a bed? I asked.
-I learned to make beds like that, Mali replied, -by watching and listening to
others. That is the real way to learn anything.
-Will you let me watch you always? I asked Old Mali. -I want to learn all the
things you know about the jungle.
When we had finished our supper, Old Mali got onto his bed and lay down. It
was now completely dark. In the fire light, Old Mali seemed to be fast asleep
on his bed. I suddenly felt alone and afraid.
All day in the jungle, while we had been walking, I had heard noises of
animals. Now they seemed to be much nearer. The jungle was now a wall of
blackness in the light of the fire.I felt frightened and suddenly my mouth
went dry. I wanted to scream.
I felt my mouth opening wide, ready to scream as loud as possible.But I did
not scream. I saw Old Mali's face in the firelight. This made me feel ashamed.
I held my teeth tightly together to stop myself from screaming. I lay down
and closed my eyes.
As soon as I closed my eyes. I heard a thousand noises. The whole jungle
became alive with animals moving quietly and carefully all around me.
Suddenly Old Mali took a deep breath and made a noise. I was hearing so
many imaginary noise and the real noise made by Old Mali gave me a terrible
fright.
I opened my eyes and jumped out of bed. I pulled my knife out and held it
above my head.
注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右；2.应使用 5 个以上短文中标有下划线
的关键词语;3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4.续写完成后,请用下
划线标出你所使用的关键词.
Paragraph 1 I was going to see if there was a wild animal beside the fire.
______________________________________
Paragraph 2 Old Mali's quiet calm voice made me feel better.______________
范文
Paragraph 1: I was going to see if there was a wild animal beside the fire.
Through the burning fire, I believed I saw its sharp teeth and cruel red
eyes. Its craws would insert into my flash without mercy as soon as I
came into its sight (高分句型一). I couldn't help trembling and screaming
loudly at the thought of it. Then a soft voice came from the dark, "Are
you okey?" It was Old Mali who was now lying on his side with his eyes
wide open.
Paragraph 2: Old Mali's quiet calm voice made me feel better. Adjusting
breath quickly and observing carefully, I found the "animal" was just the
shade of trees. I laughed in relief and told Old Mali what had happened
just now (高分句型二). Having known the whole story, Mali gave me an
understanding smile and told me his former experiences in jungle. With
these stories, I go t back to my bed and lay down. Exhausted, I closed my
eyes, and knowing Old Mali was watching, I soon fell fast asleep. That
night was so unforgettable that it would stay in my memory forever.
高分解析
写好这类作文要注意几个步骤:1.认真审题,找准提示语中的关键词或句,
确定中心思想.2. 依据关键句,草拟提纲,梳理文章的脉络3. 准确定位人称、
时态.注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次.4. 最后还要认
真查验是否有漏写情况,有无拼写错误及标点误用等、
高分句型一:Its craws would insert into my flash without mercy as soon
as I came into its sight 本句运用了 as soon as 等短语;意为:一些人不觉
得困难是困难，他们相信"失败是成功的母亲","相信自己,我会赢".
高分句型二:I laughed in relief and told Old Mali what had happened
just now.本句运用了 in relief 等短语;意为:我想如果你能有一个好心理
学,当你在生活中遇到的困难,将会有更多的自信.
读后续写话题素材七
性格品质
性格品质
例题展示主题语境：优秀品行语篇类型：个人故事语篇难度：★★★关键词：
delivery短文词数：340建议时间：23 mins
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
There was a rich couple who was throwing a big New Year party at their
house. So they went shopping at the market where everything was of high
cost and fixed price. They wanted to maintain their level of standard so they
didn't mind paying for it. After purchasing all they needed, they called a
porter to carry everything and drop it at the their home. The porter who
came was of an old age, and looked very unhealthy, and his clothes were
torn, and he looked as if he wasn't even able to meet his daily needs.
They asked the porter about the charges for delivering their goods to their
home. The old porter quoted just $20, well below the market price. Yet, the
couple argued and bargained with the porter and finally settled for $15. The
porter was struggling to make even one time's meal so he needed anything he
could earn.
The couple was very happy thinking how well they bargained with the poor
porter and paid him $15 in advance and left after giving the porter their
address for delivery. They reached their home and one hour passed, and two
hours passed, but the porter still didn't deliver their stuff.
The wife started to get angry at her husband, "I always tell you not to trust
such person, but you never listen to me. I am sure instead of delivering the
goods to our home, he must have disappeared with everything. We must
immediately go back to the market to inquire and then to the police station
to file the complaint against him."
They both left towards the market. On their way near the market, they saw
another porter. They stopped him to inquire about the old porter and noticed
that he was carrying their goods in his cart! The angry wife asked him, "Where
is that old thief? This is our goods and he was supposed to deliver them. It
seems you poor thieves are stealing our goods and going to sell them.“
注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关
键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用
下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1：When the porter heard the angry wife asking,____________
Paragraph 2：Upon hearing this, the husband had tears in his eyes,
_____________
语篇解读
本文是记叙文。作者叙述了一场误会。一对夫妇在集市购买举办聚会的
物品后，让搬运工送货到家，但是几个小时过后还没有送到，这对夫妇
就返回集市，结果在路上遇到另一位搬运工在运送他们购买的物品。他
们认为这些人是小偷……
难句分析原文：The porter who came was of an old age, and looked
very unhealthy, and his clothes were torn, and he looked as if he
wasn't even able to meet his daily needs.译文：来的是一位年老的搬运
工，看上去非常不健康，他的衣服撕破了，他看起来甚至好像无法满足
他的日常需求。分析：这是一个并列复合句。关系代词who引导定语从
句修饰先行词the porter，连词as if引导表语从句。
审题分析
☞ 审要求读后续写，本文语篇类型属于记叙文；
☞ 审人称、时态第三人称、一般过去时；
☞ 审要点要点一：the porter escaped ☞ run after the porter ☞ call the
police ☞ see the old porter again
要点二：hearing the explanation ☞ buy a meal for the old man ☞ The old
man explained the reason ☞ say sorry to each other
☞ 原文所给的关键词分类地点：at their house、at the market、home人物：
rich couple、porter、police、thief事件：delivery事物：hour、meal
在续写时，除了注意原文给出的关键词，还需要注意以下线索：1. Why did the
porter escape after hearing the wife asking？2. What did the couple do while
the porter escaped？3. What did the couple do at first sight of the old porter
？4. Why didn't the old porter deliver the goods by himself？5. What did the
couple do after they knew the truth？
思路点拨：本篇续写线索清晰，首先要把握住诚信的搬运工与以貌待人的夫妻之
间的交谈，了解这对夫妇态度的转变，从而涵盖要点，抓住所给的提示信息，掌
握续写方向；用自己有把握的句式增加得分点；运用高级词汇以及过渡词提升表
达层次。
高分范文
Paragraph 1: When the porter heard the angry wife asking, he turned back
and rushed to the market. ①Seeing the porter escaping quickly, the rich
couple ran after him while calling the police. The police nearby rushed. At
last, the porter stopped at the market, out of breath. ②The police seized
him fast, but at this moment, they saw the old man lying there near the
porter. ③When the couple arrived, they recognized the old man was the
porter who they asked for delivery for them. Therefore, the angry wife
shouted, "A thief here." ④However, the police stopped the woman and asked
the old man to tell what happened to them.
Paragraph 2: Upon hearing this, the husband had tears in his eyes, and the
wife felt ashamed. However, they didn't say a word. Suddenly the wife went
to the market and bought a meal for the old man. ⑤After the old man
finished it, he struggled to his feet, saying sorry to the couple.⑥ Because he
was badly ill, he couldn't finish the delivery to their home. And he had to ask
his workmate to do that. ⑦After the police knew they had settled the
problem, they were willing to deliver the goods for the couple." (174
words)
高分解密
本篇续写短文能够按照提示要点以及提示词来续写内容，谋篇布局合理，并且通
过这对夫妇对待老年搬运工的方式说明了社会中的部分人以貌取人的现象，揭示
了诚实是不分贫富和社会地位高低的；最后从这对夫妇态度的转变说明了正气压
倒邪气的社会风气；另外作者使用了较多的复杂句式，如各种状语、定语、宾语
等从句以及现在分词、省略句等语法现象，提高了本文的表达水平；本题满分25
分，本范文得分24分。
①Seeing...为现在分词短语，在句中作状语表示时间；“while+现在分词”为省
略结构，在句中作状语。②并列连词：but 连接的前后分句，其中but后的分句是
see sb.doing sth，构成的复合宾语结构。③连词 when引导的从句作时间状语，
而主句中关系代词who引导的是定语从句。④本句中的what引导的从句作动词
tell的宾语。⑤连词after引导时间状语从句，主句中现在分词短语 saying.为伴随
状语。⑥连词 because 引导原因状语从句。⑦连词after引导的从句是时间状语
从句，其中动词knew 后为省略连接词that的宾语从句。
模拟题
To some people, to live an honest life is much important than having a lot of money. And
in the busy city of New York,there was such an astonishing thing that ever happened.
On a Friday night,a poor young artist stood at the gate of the subway station, playing his
violin. Though the music was great,people were quickly going home for the weekend. In
this case,many of them slowed down their paces and put some money into thehatof the
young man.
The next day, the young artist came to the gate of the subway station, and put his hat on
the ground gracefully. Different from the day before, he took out a large piece of paper
and laid it on the ground and put some stones on it. Then he adjusted the violin and began
playing. It seemed more pleasant to listen to.
Before long, the young violinist was surrounded with people, who were all attracted by the
words on that paper. It said, "Last night, a gentleman named George Sang put an important
thing into my hat by mistake. Please come to claim（认领） it soon.“
Seeing this,people were greatly excited and wondered what it could be. After about
half an hour, a middle-.aged man ran there in a hurry and rushed through the crowd to the
violinist and grabbed his shoulders and said, "Yes, it's you. You did come here. I knew that
you're an honest man and would certainly come here.“
The young violinist asked calmly, "Are you Mr. George Sang?"The man nodded. The violinist
asked, "Did you lose something?" "Lottery. It's lottery, " said the man.The violinist took out
a lottery ticket on which George Sang's name was seen. "Is it?" he asked.
George nodded promptly and seized the lottery ticket and kissed it, then he danced with
the violinist.
注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右；2.至少使用 5 个短文中标有下划线的
关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段,每段开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后,请用下
划线标出你所使用的关键词语.
The story turned out to be this： George Sang is an office clerk who bought a
lottery ticket issued by a bank a few days ago. ______________________
Later someone asked the violinist why he didn't take the lottery for himself.
___________________________________
范文
The story turned out to be this: George Sang is an office clerk who bought a
lottery ticket issued by a bank a few days ago. The awards opened yesterday
and he won a prize of $500,000. So he felt very happy after work and felt the
music was so wonderful that he took out 50 dollars and put in the hat.
However the lottery ticket was also thrown in. The violinist was a student at
an Arts College and had planned to attend advanced studies in Vienna. He had
booked the ticket and would fly that morning. However when he was cleaning
up he found the lottery ticket. Thinking that the owner would return to look
for it, he cancelled the flight and came back to where he was given the
lottery ticket. （高分句型一）（George Sang捡到中奖彩票）
Later someone asked the violinist why he didn't take the lottery for
himself.The violinist said that Although he didn't have much money, he lived
happily; but if he lost honesty he wouldn't be happy forever. He also told
people that when he was very young, his parents set a very good example for
him to follow and he learned this from his teachers.（高分句型二） He really
has experienced the wonderful feeling of being honest in his life. Dishonest
people are just like the water on the mountain. It stands high above the
masses at the beginning, but gradually it comes down inch by inch and loses
the chance of going up.（George Sang把彩票归还失主）
高分句型解析
Thinking that the owner would return to look for it, he cancelled the
flight and came back to where he was given the lottery ticket.（高分
句型一）句中Thinking that the owner would return to look for it为现
在分词短语作状语以为失主会回来找的,他取消了航班,回到了得到彩票的
地方.
He also told people that when he was very young, his parents set a
very good example for him to follow and he learned this from his
teachers.（高分句型二）句中 set a very good example for 为固定表达,
意为"为……做个好的榜样"他还告诉人们,当他很小的时候,他的父母为他
树立了一个很好的榜样,让他效仿,他从老师那里学到了这一点.
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