高考英语写作专题:
懂套路 添文采 求飞扬
PartⅠ 英语写作之标准解读
PartⅡ 英语写作之文采飞扬
PartⅢ 英语写作之六步写法
优秀高考英语作文的六个基本特征
1、层次不乱 2、句式多变
3、亮点若干 3、巧妙串联
4、蠢错不犯 6、整洁卷面
蠢错不犯
初中二年级学生就应该掌握的基本语言表达能力
1. I very like the Chinese culture.
2. There have many students talking outside.
3. There are many students talk outside.
4. It seems to be something wrong with him today.
5. My hometown which is located on the East Sea.
6. We should keep the room is warm.
整洁卷面
英文书写大方、圆润、自然
词与词间距适当
字母大小适当
无大面积涂改
不影响交际
卷面整洁
高考书面表达的评分原则:
按评分标准分为五个档次
第五档:21—25分
第四档:16—20分
第三档:11—15分
第二档:6—10分
第一档:1—5分
0分
24-25 21-23
19-20 16-18
14-15 11-13
9-10 6-8
4-5 1-3
高考书面表达的评分原则:
评分从以下四个方面考虑:
1、内容要点(content points)
2、运用词汇和语法结构的数量(application of vocabulary
and grammatical structure)
3、词汇的准确运用和句子的结构把握(accuracy of
vocabulary and structures)
4、上下文的连贯性(coherence)
书面表达血的教训
一、有以下情况之一的,在正常评分以后再扣2分
1.全文不分段
2.词数少于120
3.词数多于150
二、有以下情况之一的,扣2分
1.每遗漏一个次要点的。
2.冠词、介词用错,其他单词拼写错误分别达4处以上的。
3.大小写、标点符号分别达4处以上的。
三、有以下情况之一的,扣5分
每遗漏一个主要点的。
Remember:
不要照抄试卷上阅读或其他的篇章内容!!
第一 杜绝 0 分
第一档
( 4-5分) 大部分句子可读性差,只能通词汇勉强传递少部分
信息,词汇明显有限,基本
没有句子能力。
(1-3分)只能提到零星内容要点,写了一些无关内容, 无
法传递所需信息
第三档
(14-15)允许遗漏一个主要内容要点,但不影 响预期的
写作目的。句子虽然有一些错误,但基本可读。至少有2-3个
基本正确的句子并都与不同的主要内容要点有关。基本达到预
期的写作目的。
第二 保证15 分
第五档
24-25 1) 覆盖所有内容要点
2)句式灵活,能合理使用复合句,非谓语动词,倒装句,省
略句等语法结构
3)衔接合理,过度自然,句子流畅,层次分明,词汇丰富地
道,语气自然得体。
完全达到预期的写作目的。允许有个别语法结构或词汇方面的小
错误(因尽力使用复杂结构,高级词汇所致)
21-23 要求同上,允许有2-4个不影响理解的小错误
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1. 词汇多样 : think
2. 短语优先:
I cannot bear it.
I want it.
I think...
guess / suppose / assume /
consider / conceive / insist
I cannot put up with it.
I am looking forward to it.
I hold the belief that... / From my perspective... / As far as I'm concerned3.弃旧取新:
We all have the same chance.
There are more opponents.
possess opportunity
exist
1. 较高级词汇
我相信通过这些活动你会更好地理解和欣赏这个传统节日。
1. I believe you will have a better understanding and appreciation of
the traditional festival through the activity.
2. I am convinced you will have a better understanding and
appreciation of the traditional festival through the activity.
如果尽早回复我会不胜感激。
1. I'd appreciate it if you could write back earlier.
较高级词汇(Exercises 1)
2. I'd appreciate it if you could write back at your
earlist convenience.
1.We all think he is a great man.
2. As a result the plan was a failure.
3. She went there in order to study music.
4. I'm writing to you to get an opportunity.
We all him .
The plan be a failure.
She went there studying music.
turned out
for the purpose of
较高级词汇(Exercises 2)
I'm writing to you in the hope that I may
obtain an opportunity.
think high of
5. You can find my house easily.
6. Because the weather was good, our journey was
comfortable.
7. Suddenly I thought out a good idea.
You’ll finding my house.
A good idea to me.
the good weather, our journey was comfortable.
have no trouble
A good idea suddenly me.
Thanks to
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struck
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运用多种语法结构,句式灵活多变,可以使文章增色不少。
2. 丰富的语法结构
1. (由于不知道他的电话,他没法跟Mary联系)(用非谓语)
2. To his surprise, the little girl knows so many things.(使用名词性从句)
3. He came in and there was a baby in his arms. (用with结构)
is that the little girl knows so many things.
He came in , with a baby in his arms.
丰富的语法结构(Exercises 1)
4. I'm sure the activity will be benificial to improve students'
English.(插入语)
What surprises him
The activity, I'm sure, will be beneficial to improve
students' Engligh.
Not knowing his telephone number ,he can’t get in touch with Tom
5. 如果我是你,我会接受这些建议的。(虚拟语气)
6. He did not know what had happened until he had read the news
in the newspaper.(使用强调句型)
7. It will be a real feast and also it can help you understand
traditonal Chinese culture further. ( 使用倒装)
It was not until he had read the news in the newspaper that
he knew what had happened.
Not only will it be a real feast but aslo it can help you understand
traditional Chinese culture further.
丰富的语法结构(Exercises 2)
If I were you, I would take the advice.
The more the more
8. She walked out of the lab and many students followed her. (使
用过去分词)
9. As he spoke more, he felt more and more excited.(使用句型结
构)
10. Because the weather is fine, many people went to climb the
Western hill. (使用独立主格结构)
by many students, she walked out of the lab.
, a large number of people went to climb
the Western Hills.
he spoke, excited he felt.
Followed
The weather being fine
丰富的语法结构(Exercises 3)
一篇好的书面表达,还应该行文连贯流畅,具有
“逻辑美”。使用恰当连接词,能使文章上下衔接自
然、紧凑,使文章更为地道,更具“英语味”。记得
使用恰当的连接词,如:
soon, immediately, suddenly, in front of, next to, on one
hand, on the other hand, however, though, otherwise,
thanks to, as a result (of), so long as, on condition that,
even if/though, what’s more, besides, to make the matter
worse, I’m afraid, you know, As we all know…
3. 恰当的连接词
1.Last Sunday, two Young Pioneers were on their way to the
Children’s Palace when they saw a box fall off a passing truck.
Without delay, they shouted “stop” to the driver at the top of their
voice.
2.All the school-age children can study here. What’s more, they
enjoy free education in it.
3.This village is a small one which used to be very poor. However,
it has changed a lot since 1978 .
4.Yesterday, a policeman stopped a car-Honda at the corner of the
street, because it nearly knocked down a boy who was riding a
two-wheel bicycle on the sidewalk.
恰当的连接词(Exercises)
I was having beef noodles ______I suddenly found two flies
in them, _______ made me disgusted. _____________, I asked
the waiter to change for another dish, only to be ignored by
him. ________________, the way of treating customers was
rude and annoying. __________, I'd like you to investigate the
matter seriously and make a formal apology to the matter.
恰当的连接词(Exercises)
when
which What's worse
Without doubt
Therefore
恰当的连接词(Exercises)
I have a great passion for writing and I won first prize in
the English writing contest last year. _______, I've not only
been writing for our school newspaper for three years ____
I'm also skillful at using computer. By writing for your
magazine, I hope I can gain some work experience ____ will
be vital for my future career. _______, I hope I can be
independent by making some money in my spare time.
In addition
and
which
Meanwhile
飞让 文采
扬达表面书
语意要合情合理,过渡自然
语句要有简有繁,随“意”而安
语法要结构正确,无懈可击
语言要地道流畅,书写规范
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审题
书面表达
PartⅢ书面表达六步法
成文
2020深圳市普通高中高三年级线上统一测试
第二节 书面表达 (共25分)
假定你是李华,你收到外国朋友Peter的邮件,他想了解你校在新冠疫情(COVID-19
epidemic)期间线上教学的情况。请你给他回复邮件,内容包括:
1.课程与时间;
2.你的学习状态:
3.你的期待。
注意:
1.词数100左右:
2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
Dear Peter,
I'm so glad to hear from you and know what you are doing these days.——————
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一、审题
文体,人称,时态
1 文体:书信(告知信)
2 人称: 第一,二人称。
3 时态:一般现在时
现在进行时
现在完成时
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成文
二、抓要点 主要信息重点写
次要信息简略写
1.课程与时间;
2.你的学习状态:
3.你的期待。
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成文
三、列纲
1. 确定段落层次
2. 确定段落主题句
3. 确定写作使用的词汇和句型
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成文
Beginning: background / purpose
Body: online courses / time;
your study situation
Ending: your expectation / thanks
四、连句成文
1. 连句成文
2. 适当拓展
3. 过渡连贯
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成文
五、润色
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书面表达
成文
1. 开头结尾亮点化
2. 句式搭配多样化
1. I am writing to
the outbreak of COVID-19 epidemic.
2. Our online course in February, from Monday to
Friday each week, six courses a day and countless
homework.
3. us students to communicate with
teachers it provides a platform to exchange ideas.
4. it, I much progress.
5. all the subjects, our curriculum
all the students.
6. self-discipline makes a big difference to my
online study.
7. However, I am not I was in school.
8.
9. for all of us,
I still that we will overcome it and will
be back to school soon.
六、检查
1.注意时态、语态等是否正确
2.是否有破句(缺成分)
3.词数是否符合要求
4.拼写,大小写,标点符号 是否有错误
5. 检查无误,认真誊写,卷面工整。
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成文
Dear Peter,
I'm so glad to hear from you and know about what you are doing these
days. I'm writing to tell you how our schooling is now going on.
Actually, we are having e- learning at home, studying in the“ classroom in
the air” all the academic and non-academic subjects. The holiday schedule
runs from 8:00 am till 4:30 pm on work day, with more and longer breaks for
rest than usual. Personally , I’ve got used to online learning, which I think is
a creative form of schooling, and also our own way to fight the COVID-19
epidemic. We’ve come to realize how important computers and mobile
phones have become to us!
I really miss the days with my friends and teachers on campus. That’s why
I pray for the end of the epidemic every day, and I believe it’ll soon come.
Best wishes
Yours,
Li Hua
Dear Peter,
I'm so glad to hear from you and know about what
you are doing these days. I'm writing to tell you how
our schooling is now going on.
Actually, we are having e- learning at home, studying
in the“ classroom in the air” all the academic and non-
academic subjects. The holiday schedule runs from 8:00
am till 4:30 pm on work day, with more and longer
breaks for rest than usual. Personally , I’ve got used to
online learning, which I think is a creative form of
schooling, and also our own way to fight the COVID-19
epidemic. We’ve come to realize how important
computers and mobile pones have become to us!
I really miss the days with my friends and teachers on
campus. That’s why I pray for the end of the epidemic
every day, and I believe it’ll soon come. Best wishes
Yours,
Li Hua
Dear Peter,
I'm so glad to hear from you and know what you are doing these
days. I'm writing to reply to your concern in the previous letter about
online learning during COVID-19 epidemic.
As is scheduled, we follow the same routine as we usually do at school.
However, the way teachers teach differ individually. Science teachers
lecture a lot while language teachers encourage involvement. To tell the
truth, my brain didn't function well enough at first because of the
distractions, such as video games, online chatting and absence of mind.
Fortunately, I have adapted myself to the changes and gradually caught
up.
As for my expectations, I sincerely hope everyone will stay safe and
healthy. I can't wait to see my classmates and teachers when the new
semester starts.
Best wishes,
Yours,Li Hua
Dear Peter,
I'm so glad to hear from you and know what you are
doing these days. I'm writing to reply to your concern
in the previous letter about online learning during
COVID-19 epidemic.
As is scheduled, we follow the same routine as we
usually do at school. However, the way teachers teach
differ individually. Science teachers lecture a lot
while language teachers encourage involvement. To
tell the truth, my brain didn't function well enough at
first because of the distractions, such as video games,
online chatting and absence of mind. Fortunately, I
have adapted myself to the changes and gradually
caught up.
As for my expectations, I sincerely hope everyone
will stay safe and healthy. I can't wait to see my
classmates and teachers when the new semester starts.
Best wishes,
Yours,
Li Hua
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