2020年8月浙考交流联盟线上考试应用文讲评课件（共11张）

2020年8月 浙考交流联盟线上测试 英语科目 优秀考生专享内容优秀考生专享内容 感谢你对浙考一直以来的支持，这里是： 你在这次英语考试中表现得非常不错呢！ 下面是浙考交流为你私人定制的内容。 应用文写作 第一节 应用文写作(满分15分） 假如你是李华，昨天晚饭时你同学Kevin告诉你他打算报 考历史专业，但是你说了很打击他的话，让他倍感失落。 请用英语写一封道歉信给他，包括以下要点： 1.表示道歉； 2.改正认识； 3.希望和好 注意: 1.词数80左右; 2.可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。 2020年8月浙考交流 二、各档次给分范围和要求 ？ ？ 7 毫无逻辑 建议：背诵一些流畅的句子，不要自己现场乱造。 看得出考生有一定的基本功。 误区警示 Dear Kevin， I’m writing to apologize for what I said to you at dinner yesterday. I should not have told you that history was a useless major. Even worse, I spoke without thinking and didn't take your feelings into consideration. There's no arguing that what I said was improper, and I should have known how let down you would be to get such a discouraging response from a friend. I'm so sorry for my stupid words and hope that you can generously forgive me. Wish our friendship can be continued. Yours, Li Hua 【网络范文】 信息传递不到位，题干是 “你说了很打击他的话” ？ language不得体 衔接不到位 （97words ）10 头重脚轻，观感不好 12 an 没有并列关系 衔接 生硬 语言不得体：请求原谅不是感谢 考场范文 Dear Kevin， I’m writing to cordially apologize for what I said to you at dinner yesterday. It's my fault that I didn't take your feelings into consideration. Worse still, I even told that you are not suitable for history major and consequently, hurt your heart /put you in a bad mood. After doing adequate research about the very major, I feel obliged to change my mind and take back my stupid words. Once again, please accept my sincere apology.Wish our friendship can be continued. 【下海作文】 Yours, Li Hua （84words） 第五档 强调句强调句 衔接合理恰当衔接合理恰当 开门见山开门见山 1.我诚挚地向你道歉因为我没有遵守诺言按时赴约。 I am writing to express my sincere apology to you that I didn’t keep the promise as scheduled. I’m really sorry that I can’t go on the scheduled trip to Beijing with you this weekend. 2. 主要是因为那时候我正忙于参加一个重要的面试，这是我没有想到 的(这搅乱了我原本的计划)。 It is mainly because I was occupied with an important interview, which is quite out of my expectation（which messed up my plan） 例句 3. 再次道歉，真诚的希望能得到你的谅解。我们可以另外 再安排一个时间。 Once again, please accept my sincere apology. Anyhow, I hope that we can fix another time for our meeting. Thanks！