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Continuation Writing
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1 Reading
2 Plot planning
3 Micro-writing
4 Presentation
Reading
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I, four businessmen,
a young couple & two waiters
at Balthazar
one night
Read to find brief information
• What did the four businessmen do at Balthazar?
• The businessman hosting the other three
considered himself a wine expert. He took a
taste of the cheap wine in the first place, and
showing off, he burst into delight about its
purity. “Fantastic!" he claimed.
• How did they feel?
• Maybe delighted.
and the
• What did the young couple do at Balthazar?
• This couple insisted the wine be poured into a fancy
glass container before they drank . The young
couple, who ordered the $18 pinot noir, were then
unintentionally served the $2,000 Rothschild by the
second waiter. On taking their first drink of what
they believed was cheap wine, they jokingly
pretended to be drinking an expensive wine and
copied all the behaviors of a wine expert, shaking
the wine glasses, observing the liquid inside and
tasting it slowly, totally fascinated.
How did they feel?
• Enjoyable
• What did the two waiters do at Balthazar?
• The two waiters made an error and
phoned me.
• How did they feel?
• Horrified.
Para. 1: I rushed into my restaurant.
Why did I rush ?
Para. 2: After comforting the waiters, I walked directly
towards the businessmen with a $2,000Rothschild.
Q1:
Q1:
Q2:
Q3:
How did I and the waiters feel?
What might I see at Balthazar ?
How did I comfort the waiters ?
Why did I walked directly towards the businessmen
with a $2,000Rothschild? How did I deal with the dilemma?
What might I say to the businessmen and the young couple?
Can you guess the ending? What would the waiter
and I learn from this experience?
make it logical(合逻辑的)Plot planning
Something must be included in P1 and P2.
I rushed into my restaurant.
1.How did I and the waiters feel?
2.What might I see at Balthazar ?
3.How did I comfort the waiters ?
After comforting the waiters, I walked directly towards
the businessmen with a $2,000Rothschild.
1.Why did I walked directly towards the businessmen with a
$2,000Rothschild? How did I deal with the dilemma?
2.What might I say to the businessmen and the young couple?
3.Can you guess the ending? What would the waiter and I
learn from this experience?
• It’s time for you to assess your classmates’
continuation writing?
• Score (Your assessment)
• Reasons? Appreciate more sentences
Assessment
总体要求：
立德树人，服务选材，指导教学
具体表现为：
•1.主题鲜明，不跑题
•2.情节合理，不荒诞
•3.情感真挚，不低级
•4.续写完整，质量高
• 评分标准：
• 评分时，主要从内容、语言表达和篇章结构
三个方面考查，具体为：
• （1）续写内容的质量、续写的完整性以及与
原文情节情感的融洽度。
• （2）所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、恰当
性和多样性。
• （3）上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性。
• I rushed into my restaurant .On arriving my restaurant, I threw myself on a chair
out of breath. The two waiters, standing beside me silently, were looking at me
frightenedly. “What? What happened？Why did you call me in such an urgent voice
？”I asked. They replied nothing, just staring at those four businessmen and the
young couple who were addicted to the tasty wine. After a while, they said that they
had mistaken the most expensive wine for the cheapest wine and delivered the
wrong order to the businessman and the young couple. Hearing their words, I just
said some words to comfort them instead of scolding them .
• After comforting the waiters, I walked directly towards the businessmen with a
$2,000Rothschild. “Sir, so sorry that the waiters gave you the cheapest wine. I'm to
blame for the error.” After saying these words, I bowed to them deeply. The young
couple happened to hear my words and felt astonished .”That's nothing but a tiny
error. I don't mind it. Though what I drunk was the cheapest,I felt satisfied.The taste
of wine helped me get rid of the pressure of the work ,regardless of the price,” said
one of the businessmen. Then the businessman and the young couple continued
enjoying wine as nothing had happened.
• Assessment (score) Reasons?
• I rushed into my restaurant. However, the whole brasserie was already in
a mess. Fancy glasses were thrown onto the floor. Bottles became the
weapon of those businessmen. Waiters hid under the counter . “Shut up!” I
couldn't hold back my anger and shouted.But I soon calmed down and
realized that what really mattered was the solution to this messy situation.
First,I asked my waiters to go home ,take a good rest and forget about the
event that happened just now .
• After comforting the waiters, I walked directly towards the businessmen
with a $2,000Rothschild. While I was working straight to the direction,I
looked around cautiously and soon came up with an idea. I stared at one of
them who held a bottle in his hand,and the highly lifted it up as if to hit
someone. I shouted ,“ Don't do that any more. Rudeness is merely an
expression of fear. You could afford to buy the $2,000Rothschild.That has
confirmed that you have the ability to succeed and manage to do
everything.So why don't you watch out for your manner?” These
businessmen finally realized their mistakes and volunteered to pay for the
bill.
• Assessment (score) Reasons?
I rushed into my restaurant. I was very anxious. To my
surprise,all of the hosts were enjoying themselves.It seemed
that they didn't know what had happened. I looked for the
two waiters who made the fault. Soon they walked to me and
said,“boss, it's all my fault. we are willing to receive the
punishment.” I just said ,“everyone will make fault.”
After comforting the waiters, I walked directly towards
the businessmen with a $2,000Rothschild. I didn't want to
tell them the truth, so I said to the businessmen,“you're so
lucky you can get a a $2,000 Rothschild
freely”“Oh,really?Thank you.” He received the wine and
drank it.
Assessment (score) Reasons?
• Sample writing:
• I rushed into my restaurant. The two parties
were apparently enjoying their dinner time. The
young couple were having so much fun
pretending to be drinking an expensive wine,
while the businessmen were also in a good mood,
mistakenly assuming they were tasting the most
famous Bordeaux. Behind the counter stood the
two waiters, close to tears. They felt guilty,
wondering how they should smooth over their
fault. Walking up to them, I patted their shoulders
and said, “Take it easy, guys. It happens
sometimes. But do remember this lesson.”
• After comforting the waiters, I walked directly
towards the businessmen with a $2,000
Rothschild. I explained the whole thing and handed
over the bottle to the businessmen with a sincerely
apologetic smile. “I’m terribly sorry, sirs. I wish our
mistake hadn’t ruined your night.” They looked
astonished first, but then burst into laughter.
Afterwards, I turned to the young couple and
decided to tell the truth, but I hesitated，just
smiling, “Have a good evening!” The couple felt
amazed but good enough. Yes, when facing trouble,
I believe honesty is always the best solution, which
is the recipe for my successful management in the
past twenty years.
• Now it’s your turn to polish your
continuation writing?
Presentation4
• Can you give your classmates some tips
on continuation writing?
• The integrity ,accuracy , logic and
consistence.
Appreciate more sentences
Reflection
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