高考读后续写探究指导 课件23张

读后续写指导探究 目标： 对读后续写评分细则的解读 在构思续写情节时，建议重 点考虑的5个方面 实例演示 第七档： 22-25 (1)续写内容的质量、续写的完整性以及与原 文情境的融洽度。 (2)所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、恰当性 和多样性。 (3)上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性。 各档评分呈 现的是学生 的续写故事 在内容与融 洽度，词汇 与语法，衔 接与连贯性 等方面写作 能力的递减 第五档： 15-17 第四档： 11-14 第三档： 6-10 第二档： 1-5 阅卷时，评卷老师关注的主要有以下三个方面： 第六档： 18-21 第一档： 0 1. 明确续写内容的叙述意图/主题。 ü 以已给阅读材料的叙述意图和主题为中心。 2. 厘清已给短文的故事要素及人物情感变化 ü讲故事的黄金抛物线原则：首先设定情景，而后进入话题，而后引发 冲突，而后进入高潮，最终解决问题。 3. 研读段落开头语 ü呼应情节 ü挖掘故事新冲突、确定解决方案 4. 合理构思后续故事的发展。 读后续写，需要重点考虑5点 ⇒ 梳理冲突升级和 对应的解决方案 4.合理构思后续故事的发展。 ü 以表现社会主义核心价值观为准绳。 ü 2021高考命题要求和命题原则：优化情境设计，增强试题开放性、 灵活性，充分发挥高考命题的育人功能和积极导向作用。 5. 落实好衔接 ü句子与句子 ü2个段落之间 读后续写，需要重点考虑5点 交叉式 词汇的呼应、发展与过渡⇒ 交叉式 Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. So cute was it that I asked my dad if I could keep it as a pet. It must be funny to feed it and take it outside, playing with the sheep. To my delight, my dad agreed. However, the rabbit ran away in no time. We chased it immediately, but it ran so swiftly that soon it was out of sight. what’s worse, we realized that we had run out of the track and everything around us seemed strange. We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark. 叙述意图 /主题 情景设定 人物/人物关系 人物情感变化 冲突及解决方案 续写段落1的新冲突 续写段落2的新冲突 两个续写文段开头语的过渡 需读取的信息: 实例演示 阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。 A friend of mine whose name was John Smith had a bad memory, which made him famous. He was so forgetful that he sometimes forgot what he was talking about in the middle of a sentence. His wife had to constantly remind him about his meetings, his classes—even his meals! Once he forgot he had eaten breakfast twice, at home and at school. His wife liked to remind her neighbors, "If John didn't have his head tied on, he would forget that too!" Since Smith was a professor at a well-known university, his forgetfulness was often an embarrassment to him. It wasn't that he was not clever, as some critical people tended to say, but just very absent-minded. One hot summer day, Professor Smith decided to take his children to a seaside town about a three-hour train ride away. To make the trip more interesting for his young children, he kept the name of the town a secret. However, by the time they arrived at the station, Smith forgot the name of the town he was planning to visit. Luckily, a friend of his happened to be in the station. He offered to take care of the children while Smith hurried back home to find out where he was going. The professor's wife was surprised to see him again so soon. "Oh, my dear, I forgot the name of the town." "What? You forgot the name? Maybe one day you will forget my name! Now I'll write the name of that town on a piece of paper, and you put it in your pocket and please, please don't forget where you put it." Satisfied that she had solved the problem, she sent her husband off again. Ten minutes later she was astonished to see him outside the house for the third time. Paragraph 1: "What is the matter now?" asked his wife.________________________ Paragraph 2: Hearing the cry, out rushed their neighbors, trying to find out what had happened. ___________________________________________________ 实例演示 阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。 A friend of mine whose name was John Smith had a bad memory, which made him famous. He was so forgetful that he sometimes forgot what he was talking about in the middle of a sentence. His wife had to constantly remind him about his meetings, his classes—even his meals! Once he forgot he had eaten breakfast twice, at home and at school. His wife liked to remind her neighbors, "If John didn't have his head tied on, he would forget that too!" Since Smith was a professor at a well-known university, his forgetfulness was often an embarrassment to him. It wasn't that he was not clever, as some critical people tended to say, but just very absent-minded. One hot summer day, Professor Smith decided to take his children to a seaside town about a three-hour train ride away. To make the trip more interesting for his young children, he kept the name of the town a secret. However, by the time they arrived at the station, Smith forgot the name of the town he was planning to visit. Luckily, a friend of his happened to be in the station. He offered to take care of the children while Smith hurried back home to find out where he was going. The professor's wife was surprised to see him again so soon. "Oh, my dear, I forgot the name of the town." "What? You forgot the name? Maybe one day you will forget my name! Now I'll write the name of that town on a piece of paper, and you put it in your pocket and please, please don't forget where you put it." Satisfied that she had solved the problem, she sent her husband off again. Ten minutes later she was astonished to see him outside the house for the third time. Paragraph 1: "What is the matter now?" asked his wife.________________________ Paragraph 2: Hearing the cry, out rushed their neighbors, trying to find out what had happened. ___________________________________________________ 叙述意图 /主题 John Smith had a bad memory. / John Smith was extremely forgetful. 情景设定 One hot summer day, Professor Smith decided to take on a trip with his children to a seaside town. 人物 /人物关系 Mr. Smith, his wife, his children, his neighbors, his friend. 人物 情感变化 Ms. Smith: surprised to see Mr. Smith back home so soon ⇒ satisfied to solve his husband’s problem. ⇒ astonished to see Mr. Smith outside the house again. ⇒ angry? (提示：第二段开头语中的cry一词) 冲突 及解决方 案 Smith forgot the name of the town at the station. ⇒ His friend offered to take care of the children. His wife wrote the name of the town on a piece of paper for him. (solution) 信息梳理: 续写段落1的 新冲突 “What is the matter now?” asked his wife. (What’s wrong with Mr. Smith? Why did he come back again?) 续写段落2的 新冲突 Hearing the cry, out rushed their neighbors, trying to find out what had happened. (who cried? For what? How to solve it?) 两 个 续 写 文 段 开 头 语 的 过渡 第二段 “Hearing the cry…”cry一词暗示了矛盾的升 级或新矛盾出现，因此在构思第一段的故事发展时， 到段末要铺垫好“叫喊声”的出现。 信息梳理: 合理扩展后续故事情节： Mr. Smith的健忘症（忘了将孩子落在哪儿了）令冲突再次升级，并令 其妻子情绪失控 ⇒ 后通过帮忙照顾孩子的朋友的来电，知道了孩子所在 车站 ⇒ 最终安全接回孩子或最终他们的旅游得以圆满进行。 “What is the matter now?” asked his wife. “I am afraid that I have lost the piece of paper you gave and have no idea of where I am going on such a hot summer day,” replied the professor. However, Mrs. Smith quickly sensed something wrong because Mr. Smith hung his head low with his eyes blinking while talking. “Tell me the truth,” ordered his wife. “Er… I do remember where I put the paper, but I forget the station where I left our children.” murmured the professor, wringing his hands together. “What a bad memory!” shouted his wife. Hearing the cry, out rushed their neighbors, trying to find out what had happened. A fight between the couple was about to break out when the professor’s cell phone began to ring. His friend, whose patience had worn thin, phoned to complain. The professor apologized, jumped into his car and drove away, leaving his wife and neighbors confused outside the house. Being afraid that he would make matters worse again, Mrs. Smith called a taxi and followed him. Fortunately, the children were finally taken back home safe and sound. “What is the matter now?” asked his wife. “I am afraid that I have lost the piece of paper you gave and have no idea of where I am going on such a hot summer day,” replied the professor. However, Mrs. Smith quickly sensed something wrong because Mr. Smith hung his head low with his eyes blinking while talking. “Tell me the truth,” ordered his wife. “Er… I do remember where I put the paper, but I forget the station where I left our children.” murmured the professor, wringing his hands together. “What a bad memory!” shouted his wife. Hearing the cry, out rushed their neighbors, trying to find out what had happened. A fight between the couple was about to break out when the professor’s cell phone began to ring. His friend, whose patience had worn thin, phoned to complain. The professor apologized and promised to be back soon. To avoid another similar unexpected situation, Mrs. Smith decided to join in their trip. Fortunately, they reached the seaside town smoothly and had a good time together. During this past year, I've had three instances of car trouble. Each time these things happened; I was sick of the way most people hadn’t bothered to help. One of those times, I was on the side of the road for close to three hours with my big Jeep. I put signs in the windows, big signs that said NEED A JACK （千斤顶），and offered money. Nothing. Right as I was about to give up, a Mexican family in a small truck pulled over, and the father bounded out. He sized up the situation and called for his daughter, who spoke English. He conveyed through her that he had a jack but that it was too small for the Jeep, so we would need something to support it. Then he got a saw （锯子）from the truck and cut a section out of a big log on the side of the road. We rolled it over and put his jack on top, and we were in business. 广东省适应性考试/八省联考: I started taking the wheel off, and then, if you can believe it, I broke his tire iron. “No worries.” He handed it to his wife, and she was gone in a flash down the road to buy a new tire iron. She was back in 15 minutes. We finished the job, and I was a very happy man. The two of us were dirty and sweaty. His wife prepared a pot of water for us to wash our hands. I tried to put a $20 bill in the man's hand, but he wouldn't take it, so instead I went up to the truck and gave it to his wife as quietly as I could. I asked the little girl where they lived. Mexico, she said. They were in Oregon so Mommy and Daddy could work on a fruit farm for the next few weeks. Then they would go home. When I was about to say goodbye, the girl asked if I’d had lunch. After they left, I got into my Jeep and opened the paper bag. When I was about to say goodbye, the girl asked if I’d had lunch. Not until then did I realize it was well past one o’clock and I had not had anything yet. I shrugged(耸肩) awkwardly. She frowned. "Wait a minute, Sir.” Suddenly she turned around and dashed back to their truck. In no time, the girl returned breathlessly, with a paper bag held tightly in her hand. She handed it to me and before I was able to express my gratitude, she waved me goodbye and wished me good luck. After they left, I got into my Jeep and opened the paper bag. In sight came /Inside lay several pieces of bread and the 20-dollar bill. Grasping the paper bag, I was rooted to the spot, a warm current rising in my heart. How lucky it was for me to encounter the family! Although most people I met on the road were indifferent, there were still someone else who were so helpful and considerate. Looking in the direction they went off, I made up my mind to help others in need like the Mexican family from then on. It was the first time that I had not been sick of my car trouble but lucky for coming across the Mexican angels. 广东省适应性考试/八省联考: 1. 明确续写内容的叙述意图/主题。 2. 厘清已给短文的故事要素及人物情感变化 3.研读段落开头语 ü挖掘新冲突、解决方案 4. 合理构思后续故事的发展。 5. 落实好句子与句子之间、2个段落之间的词汇衔接 读后续写，需要重点考虑5点 Thank you for listening!