渐进写作法 ③
在高考试题的书面表达的“注意”中明确要求：◆ 可以适
当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
这里的“适当增加细节”并不是想怎么写就怎么写，是有
要求的。
01 必备技能
书面表达中，适当添加细节的方法有：
2. 在主体要点前添加一个承上启下的句子
3. 在要点句基础上，添加相关的原因、结果和目的等内容
4. 以要点句为中心，列举具体的实例进行补充说明
5. 主体要点写完后，结尾适当发挥，写出个人的感受、愿望和倡
议等。
1. 在写作目的前添加背景信息，是应用文写作的最常见开头
例1. 你的英国朋友Jim所在的学校要组织学生来中国旅行, 有
两条线路可以选择:“长江之行”或者“泰山之旅”。Jim来信
希望你能给些建议。请你给他回信, 内容包括:
1.你建议的线路; 2.你的理由; 3.你的祝愿。
I’m more than delighted to receive your letter asking for my
advice on the choice of your travel route.
（Of the two trips to the Yangtze River and Mount Tai, I
strongly recommend you to tour along the Yangtze River 目的)
这里的背景要点是什么？
1. Here is some relevant/related information about it.
2. My reasons are as follows.
3. I have some advantages for the post.
4. Detailed information is as follows.
例2. 上海博物馆拟举办一次名画展，现就展出场所〔博物馆还是社区图书
馆〕征集公众意见，假设你是王敏，给上海博物馆写一封信表达你的想法。
你的信必须满足以下要求：
1．简述你写信的目的及你对场所的选择；2．说明你的理由〔从便利性，
专业性等方面对这两个场所进行对比〕。
背景要点 和写信目的：
I've learned that an art exhibition is to be held and that you are
collecting suggestions on its location.I'm writing this letter to
share with you my opinions.
In my opinion, it is more advisable to hold the art exhibition in
Shanghai Museum than in community libraries.
你的选择？
上海博物馆拟举办一次名画展，现就展出场所〔博物馆还
是社区图书馆〕征集公众意见，假设你是王敏，给上海博物馆
写一封信表达你的想法。你的信必须满足以下要求：
1．简述你写信的目的及你对场所的选择；
2．说明你的理由〔从便利性，专业性等方面对这两个场
所进行对比〕。
主体要点是你的理由。 在例举理由前，可以加上：
例3 假定你是李华，暑假在伦敦学习，得知当地美术馆要剧版
中国画展。请写一封信申请做志愿者，内容包括:1.写信目的:
2.个人优势: 3.能做的事情。注意:1.词数100左右；2.
可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
本文主要点是：个人优势 和能做的事
结合背景信息，可定要点：
1）我擅长英语和汉语
2）我能让外国人和当地人更好地了解中国画。
要点1：I have a good command of English and Chinese
我为什么擅长英语和汉语?
having lived in China for years and having learned English
since a child
我擅长英语和汉语有什么好处？
which is of benefit for introducing Chinese paintings to
visitors
要点1：
Having lived in China for years and having learned
English since a child, I have a good command of English and
Chinese, which is of benefit for introducing Chinese paintings
to visitors.
要点2:
I can get foreigners and the locals to know more about it.
为什么?
I have a good knowledge of Chinese paintings
要点2：
I have a good knowledge of Chinese paintings. I can
get foreigners and the locals to know better about it
4. 以要点句为中心，列举具体的实例进行补充说明
有时题目所提示的要点比较笼统，如2. 活动内容，这时考生要尽可
能具体地写出活动的内容。要记住：只有一句话的要点都是苍白无力、
没有说服力的。
以工作为例：I will work ......
如何写？
在哪工作、做什么工作？
工作情况：喜不喜欢？工作干得怎样？
结果怎么样？
As a result, I will be promoted to the manager of a
department.
in a computer company as a program designer.
enjoy my work and I can do well in whatever I do.
Practice:
以”业余生活“为例，如何写？
In my free time, I will......
如何写？
In my free time, I will continue to take regular
exercise, such as swimming, running and various
ball games.
On my holidays, I will travel around the world
with my family.
5. 主体要点写完后，不要以”Looking forward to your
reply”来结尾，要写出上文相响应的结尾，如个人的感受、
愿望等，即要写“应景的结尾”。
邀请信：1）We would appreciate it if you could confirm your
participation at your early convenience.
2）I would appreciate it if you could give thought to my
invitation.
建议信：I sincerely hope my advice can be helpful to you and
that you can enjoy your new school life. (愿望)
咨询信：1) Any constructive advice on ... will be highly
appreciated.
2) Thank you and your prompt reply will be highly
appreciated.
申请信：1）I have the confidence that my enthusiasm and
devotion will surpass your expectation.
2）I’d appreciate it if you could take my application
into consideration. Looking forward to your reply.
倡议信：As students, it's our duty to protect our school
environment. (倡议)
告知信：Bear these tips in mind and you’ll find ...... easy and
comfortable.
求助信：I would be grateful if you could lend me a helping hand.
通 知：If you’re interested, please email your application to
studentcouncil @sohu.com no later than June 10, 2020.
道歉信：Once again, I’m sorry for any inconvenience caused.
Hope you can take my apology into account.
感谢信：No words are strong enough to convey how grateful I
am.
1. 我要花一些时间和父母在一起。 I'll spend some time
staying with my parents.
→ I'll spend some time staying with my parents, ____________
___________________________________
技能应用
them as well as doing some housework.
chatting with
2. 我看到了一些不良行为。 I found some bad behaviour.
→ I found some bad behaviour._______________________________
__________________________________________________
Some people scribbled on the wall;
others played on the lawn and threw rubbish everywhere.
3. 过去我有时去村西的小河里游泳。 I went swimming in
the river to the west of the village now and
then.
→ __________________, I went swimming in the river to the west
of the village now and then, ______________________________.
Weather permitting
in which the water was very clear
4. 旅行了一周后，他回到了家。 After a week's trip, he
returned home.
→ After a week's trip, he returned home, _________________.tired but happy
5. 我需要好好休息。 I need a good rest.
→ I need a good rest _____________________________________
_________________.
because I do feel tired after the hard work
of all these years
6. 演讲时要面带微笑。要讲慢些，讲清楚。 You should
wear a smile when you make a speech. Besides,
remember to speak slowly and clearly.→ You should wear a smile when you make a speech, ___________
_________________. Besides, remember to speak slowly and
clearly so that _____________________________________
___________________.
which will
make you relaxed
you can make yourself understood by the
audience and judges
衔接（过渡）性词语的使用是语言连贯性得以实现的最常
用手段。在句与句之间，段与段之间恰当地使用一些承上启下
的衔接（过渡）性词语是非常必要的。中学阶段应该掌握的衔
接（过渡）性词语可以归纳如下：
01 知识必备
1．表示起始关系的过渡性词语
firstly, first of all, to begin/start with, with the development of 。
2．表示并列关系的过渡性词语
and, or, as well as, not only... but also..., either... or...,
neither ... nor ..., not ... but ...等。
3．表示转折关系的过渡性词语
but, yet, however, nevertheless, otherwise, on the contrary, in
spite of
4．表示因果关系的过渡性词语 because, as, since, for, thanks
to, due to, as a result of, so, thus,
therefore, as a result/consequence。5．表示递进关系的过渡性词语
besides, in addition, additionally, what's more, furthermore,
moreover, what's worse, still less, to make matters worse,
worse still, on the one hand ... on the other hand..., for one
thing ... for another ...
6．表示列举事实的过渡性词语
such as, like, including, for example/instance, take... for
example, that is to say, as follows
7．表示观点的过渡性词语 in my opinion, in my view, from
my point of view, as far as I
am concerned, as for me, personally
8．表示总结的过渡性词语
in short, in brief, in conclusion, in a/one word, to sum up, all
in all, on the whole, in general
虽然衔接性词语很多，但考生只要记住几组最常见的表达就
可以应对高考。
1. 表示两者并列或递进关系：
some......, while others （并列）
for one thing..., for another...
on the one hand... on the other hand
2. 表示三者递进关系：
first of all/ first and foremost (首先)...
furthermore/moreover (其次)...
ultimately/ last but not least (最后)...
02 技能应用
1. ______________ (首先), thank you for helping me learn English.
2. She finally earned their respect, and became confident ________
(和) wellbehaved.
3．___________（然而）, the film market may witness a
slowdown in the near future.
First of all
as well as
However
4. ___________ (因此), it would be great if you could join my team
and show your talent.
5. ______________(另外), I'm eager to learn how to appreciate
western paintings, and it would be great if you could tell us
some tricks about how to paint.
6. I'll engage in various sports, ___________(例如) swimming,
running and ball games.
Therefore
In addition
like
7. ______________ (就我个人而言), I'd like to learn western
painting skills.
8. ______________ (总之), travelling is the best choice if you want
to recharge yourself and get ready for new challenges.
Personally
All in all
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