渐进写作 ②
一篇高考作文在阅卷时往往在 30 秒钟内就被判定优劣;
大众化的词汇、平庸的表达已使长时间工作的阅卷老师产生
了视觉疲劳。如果一篇作文中突然出现几个与众不同、让人
眼前一亮的词汇,老师的给分也绝不会吝啬!
→ This is a friendly game, so we should _____________ the principle
of friendship first.
① This is a friendly game, so we should remember the principle
of friendship first.
bear in mind
② Summer in these cities is hot and rainy, so take summer clothes
and an umbrella with you.
→ Summer in these cities is hot and rainy, so take summer clothes
___________ an umbrella with you.as well as
2.高级词汇优先
写作时恰当得体地使用别人可能想不到的词汇(高级词汇),会
给阅卷人耳目一新的感觉。
高级词汇常指高中及以上学到的书面的、专业的词汇,而不是口
头上的词汇。也指高年级学到的词(相对于低年级学到词)。
① I am Li Hua,a student studying in London, who is very
glad to be informed of the message that there will be a
Chinese painting exhibition in your local art gallery.
→ I am Li Hua,a student studying in London, who is _____
___________ to be informed of the message that there will
be a Chinese painting exhibition in your local art gallery.
more
than thrilled
② In order to provide the students with a wonderful match,
we need to have enough training.
→ _______________ provide the students with a _________
match, we need to have enough training.
In an attempt to fantastic
③ Obviously,blindly following others' advice will affect
our own judgment.
→ __________,blindly following others' advice will
________________ our own judgment.
Apparently
have an effect on
3.避免重复使用同一词语
写作时应尽量避免重复使用相同的词语,要用近义词语来
展示自己的水平。用词不同、表达方式迥异,也是高级用法。
① Some students think that it's necessary to ban using
cellphones in the campus,...... while other don't think so.
→ Some students hold the belief that it's necessary to ban using
cellphones in the campus,...... While other don't think so.
② First of all, you should arrive on time because it is good
manners to be on time in China.
→ First of all, you should arrive on time because it is good
manners to be punctual in China.
02 技能运用
1. We will try our best to develop the traditional friendship
between us.
2. Finally your child will leave home to lead her own life as
a fully independent adult.
→ We will ______________ to _________ the traditional
friendship between us.
→ ____________ your child will leave home to lead her own life as
a fully independent adult.
请用亮点词汇替换下列句子中的黑体部分。
spare no effort promote
Eventually
3.As high school students, we should be neatly dressed when at
school.
→ As high school students, we ______________ be neatly dressed
when at school.
4.The teacher directed the gifted students towards the more
difficult courses.
→ The teacher directed the gifted students towards the more
___________ courses
are supposed to
challenging
3.I sincerely hope that you will consider my suggestions.
→ I sincerely hope that you will _____________________________
my suggestions
4.Our class thought of the idea of how to take advantage of used
materials.
→ Our class _____________ the idea of how to take advantage of
used materials.
take.... into account; give thought to
came up with
5.We should try to improve ourselves through learning and prepare
for the future.
→ We should ___________ to improve ourselves through learning
and _________________ for the future.
6.I want to tell you something about my plan for the summer
vacation and I'd like you to help me.
→ I want to _____________ something about my plan for the
summer vacation and I'd like you to _______________.
take pains
make preparations
share with you
come to my aid
请用亮点词汇替换下面作文中的加黑部分并背诵。Dear Jason,
I'm very happy to hear from you and know about your
beautiful home city London.Now I'd like to tell you something
about my hometown Quanzhou.
more than
Quanzhou is a beautiful place for people to live in.Its economy
has been developing fast during the past ten years.New bridges and
roads have been built, highrise buildings standing in many parts of
the city. More and more schools and hospitals are useful for the
rapidly
set up
A increasing number of available
native people.It is developing into a modern and beautiful city.
But there are still some problems, such as heavy traffic in rush hours
and serious air pollution, which have a bad effect on people's daily
life.I think Quanzhou should develop healthily and scientifically so
that we could have a better hometown in the future.
charming
Nevertheless,
severe impact
As far as I' concerned
第五档(13-15分)作文的评分标准中规定“应用了较多的
语法结构和词汇”。所以使用丰富多样的句型,定会让文章出人
头地。
多样化句型包括简单句,复合句(含三大从句)、并列句、
非谓语、特殊句型等。从层次上来说,复合句、特殊句型要高
于简单句,但一篇短文中出现太多的复合句,则会让阅读者(评
卷者)产生疲劳感。因此,写作时不能过度使用复合句,要长短
结合。
并列句是用并列连词把两个或两个以上的简单句或
相似成分连接起来,使句子更紧凑。
但并列两个主语时,要特别注意谓语的数。
类型 连词
并列关系(递进关系) and, as well as,both...and...,not
only...but also...,neither...nor...
转折关系 but, yet, whereas
选择关系 or, otherwise, or else,either ...or ...,
not ...but ...
因果关系 for, so, therefore, thus
对比关系 while
一、并列句的类型及并列连词
1.not only ...but also... 不但……,而且……
not only ... but also 连接两个句子时,前面的句子要用部
分倒装。
二、并列句的常用句型
Not only ________________ (外国人喜欢) to visit the Great
Wall, but we Chinese are also anxious to see it.
do foreigners like
2.祈使句/名词词组+and/or+陈述句
_________________________ (如果你学会理解) you will keep
away from a world full of sadness and disappointment.
该句型前面的祈使句相当于一个条件状语从句;连词后面的
陈述句则常用一般将来时。推荐使用!
If you learn to understand,
Learn to understand, and
3.had done/be doing/be about to do ...when ...刚做完某事/
正做某事/正要做某事,这时……
One day, I was walking to my school _________ I found an old
lady lying on the street, looking very painful.
when
该句型常是一个非常英语化的表达,指某动作正要发生、
正在发生或刚刚发生,这时,另一个动作发生了。
用适当的并列连词填空。1.Some choose to avoid the problems
_____ others decide to deal
with them.2.First, I'm openminded and warmhearted, __ I'm
getting along
well with everyone.3.You can contact me ______ by phone or
by email if you want to
know more about our university.
技能运用
while
so
either
4.I worked hard at English and devoted all my spare time to
practicing it, _______ I failed to pass the midterm examination.
5.It's really very dangerous.One more step, ______ the baby will
fall into the well.
but
and
when
Not only
but also
6.I was walking along the river ________ I heard a boy crying for
help.
7._________ can students improve their writing skills in this way
________ they can strengthen their selfconfidence.
三大从句通常为定语从句、名词性从句和状语从句,
而名词性从句又分为主语从句、宾语从句、表语从句和
同位语从句。
写作中三大从句的运用就是语言掌握能力的体现。
建议一篇短文中三类从句要各写一个。
一、润色添彩的定语从句 定语从句能够比较清
楚地反映出考生对于语言较高的掌握能力,所以建议考
生一定要在写作中至少使用一个恰到好处的定语从句。
I'm a Chinese student, who is taking a summer course
in London now (暑期正在伦敦学习)。
I'm glad to learn that you want a student volunteer. I am
quite interested in it.
→ I'm glad to learn that you want a student volunteer,
_____________________________.
在写作中如果我们可以把两个简单句合并为一个含有定语
从句的复合句,就是从低级到高级表达的转换。
which I am quite interested in
During holiday seasons, I will live in the countryside.In
the countryside,the air is fresh and people are friendly.
→ During holiday seasons, I will live in the countryside,
________________________________________.where the air is fresh and people are friendly
二、丰富多样的名词性从句
名词性从句是写作中常见的高级表达方式。在写作中我
们如果能够把两个简单句合并为一个含有名词性从句的复合
句,对写作是一种质的升华。
常用的名词性从句句型有:
1) I'm glad to learn that...
2) I hold the belif that...
3) I’d like to share with you good news that...
4) What I want to stress/ impressed me most is that...
5) One reason for sth is / was that...
6) There is no doubt that... 毫无疑问......
7) It is obvious/clear that... 显然......
8) It occurred to me that... 我突然想起......
1) 我认为,我们应该去帮助他们克服目前的困难。
2) 我非常高兴地得知你们的美术馆将举办一个中国画画展。
I hold the opinion that we should go to help them (to)
overcome the present difficulty.
I'm glad to learn that your gallery will host a Chinese
painting exhibition.
3) He said a lot at the meeting.His words were very
attractive.
4)Our women volleyball team had won the championship.The
news encouraged us all greatly.
→ What he said at the meeting was very attractive.
→ The news that our women volleyball team had won the
championship encouraged us all greatly.
三、条理分明的状语从句
状语从句主要包括时间、地点、条件、原因、让步、比较、
方式、目的和结果等九类从句。
在英语写作中,状语从句是经常用到的句型,它的灵活
运用使作文更具吸引力。
三、常用状语从句
1. 当......的时候:when...
2. 一......就......: the instant/ moment + 句子
2. So adj. _________ when...
3. Hardly had +S + done when...
4. 假如,如果:if......
Supposing/Providing that....
5. 因为:because + 句子/
1) 最重要的是,通常老年人是第一个品尝桌上饭菜的人,
因为在中国老年人非常受尊重。
2) 当谈到最喜欢的季节时,我总是会立即想到春天。
_________________________________, spring will always
occur to me in no time.
Most importantly, the elderly are usually the first to taste the
food served on the table ______________________________
_________.
because they are well respected
in China
When it comes to the favorite season
使用从句完成下列句子。
1.我特别的爱好是读书看报,这已经成为我日常生活中不可
或缺的一部分。 My favorite hobby is reading books and
newspapers,
____________________________________________.
技能运用
which has become a necessary part of my daily life
As we all know
What impressed me most
2.我们都知道,当我们需要帮助时,我们的朋友会伸出援手,
帮我们渡过难关。 _______________,when we need help
our friends will lend us
a hand and help us get through difficult situations.3.使我印象
最深的是他们都经过了专业培训。 ______________________
was that they had had professional
training.
4.我想知道你能否给我提供一些如何交朋友的建议。I wonder
_______________________________________________.5.每当
有人需要帮助,我就会尽力去帮助他。
______________________________, I will spare no effort to help him.
if you can give me some advice on how to make friends
Whenever someone needs a hand
1. 两个具有某种逻辑关系的简单句,可以用非谓语动词连
接起来变成较高级表达。
2. 非谓语动词在句中可以充当定语、状语,所以大多数定语
从句和状语从句都可以改写成非谓语动词。
The boys wanted to finish the work earlier.
They were making the most of time.
→ The boys were making the most of time ____________________
the work earlier.
in an effort to finish
例2 I am writing to invite you to attend the Chinese papercutting
art exhibition.It will be held in the art gallery from 8:00 a.m. to
5: 00 p.m. next Sunday in our city center.
→ I am writing to invite you to attend the Chinese papercutting art
exhibition ________________________ from 8:00 a.m. to
5: 00 p.m. next Sunday in our city center.
to be held in the art gallery
用非谓语动词转换复合句一般是转换从句部分。要注意
的是:主、从句的人称须一致。
如果主从句主语不一致,则从句这样变:去掉连词,保
留主语,把原谓语变成-ing/-ed。
Since you have realized that your time is limited, you're
supposed to make full use of it to work hard for your dream.
→____________________________________, you're supposed to
make full use of it to work hard for your dream.
Having realized that your time is limited
If it is carried out continuously, it will benefit all of us
greatly and we are sure to make remarkable progress.
→______________________, it will benefit all of us greatly
and we are sure to make remarkable progress.
Carried out continuously
If weather permits, we will go out for a picnic this weekend.
→ _________________, we will go out for a piknic this weekend.Weather permitting
经典错句:
1. Hearing the terrible news, tears welled up in her eyes.
2. Faced with challenges, my confidence never fades down.
3. Receiving the rejection letter from my first-chosen
university, my heart sank into the darkness.
written by Tom
Feeling quite sorry for that
运用非谓语动词转换下列句子。1.All the people here like the
novel.It is written by Tom.→All the people here like the novel
_______________.2.I feel quite sorry for that.I begin to think
about what to do to help.→_____________________________, I
begin to think about what to do to help.
技能运用
Faced with difficulties
Having practiced playing basketball
3.When we are faced with difficulties, we need friends to give
us comfort and help.→________________________, we need
friends to give us comfort and help.4.After we had practiced
playing basketball for almost two months, we strongly desired to
be the winner.→____________________________________for
almost two months, we strongly desired to be the winner.
developing rapidly
5.As the society develops rapidly, it's necessary for us to have
a good knowledge of English and computer.→With the society
__________________, it's necessary for us to have a good
knowledge of English and computer.
特殊句式通常指强调结构、倒装句、it作形式主语、省
略句等。
特殊句式的使用能使文章大放异彩,强烈推荐使用。
一、重点突出的强调句型
强调句型可强调除谓语动词外的其他成分,如主语、宾语、
状语等。它的灵活运用不仅有助于增强表达效果,突出要强调
的重点,更能彰显考生对英语表达的能力。其基本结构为:
“It is/was+被强调部分+that/who+其他”。
强调句型通常用来强调主语、宾语、时间状语、地点状语,
不可以强调-ly状语!
在写作中,我们可以通过强调句型将句子提高到一个高的层次。
① The teacher's praise contributes to my success.
→ It is the teacher's praise that contributes to my success.
② They didn't realize the importance of environmental protection
until all the fish in the river died out.
→ It was not until all the fish in the river died out that they
realized the importance of environmental protection.
二、倒装句型 在写作中在写作中,我们可以通过倒装
让句子更高级。
倒装句应用比较广泛,涉及的句型也比较多,包括部分倒装
和全部倒装。
1.“only+状语”置于句首时,句子用部分倒装。
Only in this way we can students study happily and effectively.
can we students study
2.none, neither, nor, not, never, hardly, little, seldom等否
定词,以及由no构成的否定短语如at no time, by no means等
置于句首时,句子用部分倒装。
_________________________ (它不仅影响我们的生活), but
it also puts people's lives at risk.
Not only will it affect our life
3.as 表示“尽管……”时,所在的句子用部分倒装。
Child as he is_____________ (虽然他只是个孩子),he knows a lot about
astronomy.
4.在so/such ...that ...结构中,当so/such ...位于句首时,其后
的句子用全部倒装。
So excited was I_______________ (我太激动了) that I couldn't wait to try putting
them on.
5.here, there, now, then, out, in, up, down, on the wall, in
the room等表示地点、时间或方位的副词或介词短语置于句首,
且主语是名词而不是代词时,句子用全部倒装。
sit three students
In that picture, around the table with three books on it
_______________ (坐着三个学生).
三、避免头重脚轻的it句式
在英语中,为了避免头重脚轻,经常运用it作形式主语
或宾语,而把真正的主语或宾语后置,作真正主语或宾语的
常为不定式或从句。
灵活地运用 it 句型可提升文章的档次,使文章更高级。
① That you register to shower your talent is a good idea.
It is a good idea for you to register to show your talent?
② That a smartphone plays an important role in our dayily life is
true.
It is true that a smartphone plays an important role in our daily
life.
I think to learn with you the poems written in the
Tang Dynasty great fun.
I would appreciate it if you could agree to my request.
I think it great fun to learn with you the poems written in
the Tang Dynasty.
It is years of hard work that
Only through study can you find
用强调句型、倒装句或it句式完成下列句子。1.正是多年
艰苦的工作才让他获得了今天的成功。
__________________________ has made him successful
today.2.只有通过学习你才能发现这种语言的魅力。
_____________________________ the beauty of this language.
技巧应用
stood many students
It's my honour to stand
3.体育馆门前站着很多手拿鲜花的学生,他们在等待贵宾的到
来。 In front of the stadium ___________________ holding
flowers,
waiting for the arrival of the honored guests.4.我非常荣幸能
够站在这里谈一些关于友谊的感悟。
_____________________ here and say something about
friendship.