读后续写的具体内容
提供一段350词以内的语言材料，要求考
生依据该材料内容、所给段落开头语进行
续写（150词左右），将其发展成一篇与
给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的
短文。
评分参考
1. 与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；
2. 内容的丰富性；
3. 应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；
4. 故事发展的合理性和上下文的连贯性。
读后续写的步骤
Step 1
速读全文，
获取大意
Step
2
精读原文，
解读主题
Step 3
预测内容，
构思情节
Step 4
细节描写，
优化表达
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的
故事。（2020年新高考全国Ⅰ卷 ）
The Meredith family lived in a small community. As the economy was in decline,
some people in the town had lost their jobs. Many of their families were struggling
to make ends meet. People were trying to help each other meet the challenges.
Mrs. Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman. She spent a great deal
of time visiting the poor. She knew they had problems, and they needed all kinds of
help. When she had time, she would bring food and medicine to them.
One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day
before. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, who took care of him and could not
go out to work, and their little boy. The little boy—his name was Bernard—had
interested her very much.
“I wish you could see him,” she said to her own children, John, Harry, and
Clara.“He is such a help to his mother. He wants very much to earn some money,
but I don’t see what he can do.”
After their mother left the room, the children sat thinking about Bernard. “I
wish we could help him to earn money,” said Clara. “His family is suffering so
much.”
“So do I,” said Harry. “We really should do something to assist them.”
For some moments, John said nothing, but, suddenly, he sprang to his feet and
cried, “I have a great idea! I have a solution that we can all help accomplish (完成).”
The other children also jumped up all attention. When John had an idea, it was
sure to be a good one. I’ll tell you what we can do,” said John. “You know that
big box of corn Uncle John sent us? Well, we can make popcorn (爆米花), and put it
into paper bags, and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.”
Paragraph 1:
When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a
good one, too._______________________________________
_________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________
Paragraph 2:
With everything ready. Bernard started out on his new business.
_________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________
目
录
续写基本上是记叙文。记叙文大
多离不开六要素：who, when,
where, what, why, how即五个W
和一个H。快速阅读时找出六要素，
文章的写作线索自然水落石出。
目
录
目
录
我们把六要素联合起来，就可得知原文的主要
内容：John, Harry和Clara三个孩子生活在一
个小社区，当时经济萧条。当得知社区的另一
个小男孩Bernard因为父亲卧病在床，母亲需
要照顾父亲无法外出工作而需要帮助后，三个
孩子想出了一个绝妙的主意帮助他。
Beginning
Process
Climax
Ending
Para1:
Background
Continuation Para1
Continuation
Para2
Para2-4:Mrs.
Meredith was kind;
A boy in need
Para5-8:Children
wanted to help
A great idea was formed
Beginning
Process
Climax
Ending
1. Background: lived in a small community. As
the economy was in decline, ... People were
trying to help each other meet the challenges.
2. Mrs. Meredith was kind. A boy
Bernard was in need. Children
wanted to help.
3. A great idea was
formed.
目
录
首段介绍了故事发生的背景，The Meredith family
生活在一个小社区。因为经济萧条，很多人失业了，都
在为生计奔波。人们相互帮助度过难关。第2至第4段，
介绍了Mrs. Meredith是个很善良的人，经常以多种方
式帮助贫困的人们。一天她告诉她的三个孩子John,
Harry和Clara小区有一个需要帮助的小男孩Bernard。
第5至第8段，孩子们都想帮助Bernard。
故事情节
主题
Mrs. Meredith：
kind and
thoughtful
John, Harry, Clara
Bernard
planted the seed
of kindness
wished to
help him
love and
kindness
目
录
主题解读：从第二段可知，Mrs. Meredith是一位非常
善良乐于助人的女士，从她经常帮助贫困家庭可推断
出她用行动在她孩子们心中播撒下了爱心的种子。受
她的积极影响，孩子们非常愿意帮助Bernard，并且后
来的确想出了一个好办法，制作爆米花让Bernard出去
卖。由此不难看出，文章的主题是爱心与善良的传递。
主题
Step 3 预测内容，构思情节
所见 所闻 所做 所感
Raise questions and make predictions
五所
所想
两个段首语是重要的续写提示，控制
着情节的发展方向。根据五所思维，即
“所见，所闻，所做，所感，所想”，运
用问题链设置相关问题。对其分析设问，
能够将预测的故事情节以问题的形式呈现，
利于打开思路，整理信息和组织语言。
设置问题时尤其需关注第一段结尾匹
配第二段首句的问题。
目
录
Para1: When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s
idea, she thought it was a good one, too.
设置以下问题：
Para. 2 Para2: With everything ready. Bernard
started out on his new business.
Q.1 How was the business ?
Q.2 How other people react to the business ?
Q.3 How did Bernard feel?
目
录
我们可以在问题链的帮助下自问自答，
用问题引导自己构思内容。在构思情节时，
要充分考虑到各情节之间的逻辑关系。预
测故事发展情节：
第一段要承接“妈妈也认为是个好主意”，具
体到妈妈做了什么，孩子们做了什么来帮助Bernard。
另外，续写第二段首句写道：“一切准备就绪，
Bernard开始了他自己的新生意”。由此可知，第二
段的“一切准备就绪”，准备了什么也是第一段要写
的内容。我们可以设想成，准备购买家用的爆米花机，
并把计划告诉了Bernard一家。买好机子后，又着手
熟悉其操作。 逆推思维
目
录
第二段主要写一切准备好后，
Bernard开始了自己的生意后具体发生的
事情。联系原文首段末句“人们尽力互
帮互助以应对经济衰退的挑战”，可推
测出大家都竭力帮助Bernard，或多或少
都会购买他的爆米花，以支持他养家。
也可以想象到，Bernard卖出爆米花后的
感激之情。
Step 4 细节描写 优化表达
目
录
要想写出生动形象、内容具体
的续写部分，不仅要有丰富的词汇
量，还要注意细节的刻画，需适时
添加心理描写、动作描写和场景描
写等细节，才能让故事充满画面感。
Mrs. Meredith和孩子们的所思所
做，这关系到心理和动作的细节描
写。
目
录
深深地感动
deeply moved/be
overwhelmed with
gratitude
让某人开心的是 to one’s delight
惊讶 surprised/amazed
满意的 satisfied/content
欣喜 be excited with joy
心情好 in a good mood
使某人安心 set one’s heart at
rest
惊慌失措 be seized with panic
心理描写
动作描写
点头 nod one’s head
搜索网络 search the Internet
订购机器 order a machine
拜访 pay a visit to/visit
解释某事 explain sth.
操作机器 use/operate the machine
鼓励某人 encourage sb.
补充说 add/continue
大声叫唤 call out
这些相关的语料库词汇大家根据情况进
行加工再内化为自己的文字。在优化语言
前，分析原文的语言风格，使用了make
ends meet, meet the challenges, sprang to
his feet等高级词汇，同时运用了宾语从句、
定语从句、分词结构和部分倒装等高级表
达。我们在行文时，可创造性地模仿与使
用这些句式表达。既可以延续原文的风格，
又可以使表达更丰富多彩。
参考范文:
Paragraph 1:
When Mrs. Meredith heard of the idea,
she thought it was a good one, too. Mrs.
Meredith nodded with a smile, saying “Let’s
take action!”. Immediately she searched the
Internet and ordered a household popcorn
machine. After that, Mrs. Meredith together
with her three children paid another
visit to the family and told them about the
popcorn plan. Needless to say, they
参考范文:
were deeply touched, especially Bernard
who finally found a solution to make money
for his family. A few days later, the machine
was delivered to Mrs Meredith’s home. And it
wasn’t long before they got the hang of
using the machine to make popcorn.
Paragraph 2: With everything ready, Bernard
started out on his new business. Although it
was a hard time and things were tight for
everybody, Bernard’s business worked
out quite well. He carried the popcorn on
his small bike, going from door to door to
sell it. People were surprised to see such a
little，poorly-dressed boy selling popcorn at
their doors, but eventually almost all of them
would buy a bag or two to support him. It is
love that makes the world go round and
Bernard felt it deep in his little heart.
【点评】
第一、续写部分和原文及首句的融合度高。第一段续
写Mrs. Meredith立即付诸行动顺应首句她认为是
个好主意的想法。从网购家用爆米花机再到快递到
货后，他们没过多久就熟悉其使用，这种种准备工
作与第二段首句无缝衔接。
【点评】
第二、该文达到了语法和词汇的准确性和丰富性。
使用了大量高级词汇，如 paid another visit to,
needless to say, got the hang of, tight, worked out
等。定语从句，强调句型，非谓语动词的熟练使
用显示出作者语言使用的灵活性和扎实的基本功。
第三、注重了上下文的连贯性，有效地使用了语句间的
连 接 成 分 ， 所 续 写 短 文 结 构 紧 凑 。 使 用 了
immediately, after, a few days later, although,
but等词将上下文的逻辑体现了出来。范文围绕文章
的内容进行了合理的拓展，传播了正能量，宣扬了爱
与善良，使文章的主题得到了升华。
【点评】
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