2021高考英语考前冲刺专题复习：读后续写—熊口脱险

2021 高考英语考前冲刺专题复习：读后续写—2020 年 7 月浙江真 题：熊口脱险 2020 年 7 月浙江卷 One fall, my wife Elli and I had a single goal: to photograph polar bears. We were staying at a research camp outside “ the polar bear capital of the world ” — the town of Churchill in Manitoba, Canada. Taking pictures of polar bears is amazing but also dangerous. Polar bears — like all wild animals — should be photographed from a safe distance. When I’m face to face with a polar bear, I like it to be through a camera with a telephoto lens. But sometimes, that is easier said than done. This was one of those times. As Elli and I cooked dinner, a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby lake sniffed, and smelled our garlic bread. The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp, which was surrounded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the wire. He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts. Terrified, Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew. We yelled at the bear, hit pots hard, and fired blank shotgun shells into the air. Sometimes loud noises like these will scare bears off. Not this polar bear though — he just kept trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws (爪子). I radioed the camp manager for help. He told me a helicopter was on its way, but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived. Making the best of this close encounter ( 相 遇 ), I took some pictures of the bear. Elli and I feared the fence wouldn’t last through 30 more minutes of the bear’s punishment. The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray. The spray burns the bears’ eyes, but doesn’ t hurt them. So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and, through the fence, sprayed him in the face. With an angry roar (吼叫), the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes. Para 1: A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. ___________________ Para 2: At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. _____________________________ 写作指导： Para 1: A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. 场景一：熊又来了 根据 the bear headed back 推测熊王者归来，必定是异常凶猛： Before we had time to think, he returned to the fence, hammering on i t more violently. （突出时间的快：before...；pounce 扑过去 hammer 猛打） 场景二：我们慌， 同时跑起来 根据 ARE（action-response-emotion)原则，接下来写我们慌张，我们的对策是 什么？千万不要复杂，直接是 run，加一个把 bread 给熊吃，也算照应原文了： 看一看，情感：Seeing the fury in his eyes, I felt my leg shaking. 动一动：Just at my wit’s end, Elli threw pieces of garlic bread over the fence and exclaimed to me, “Run!” 这类读后续写里高频词是 grab, throw, cast, pull, push. 场景三：围栏倒 了，危险！ 环境描写：Silence behind. But soon there camea loud bang! 动一动：We turned around horribly just in time to see the fence crash ing down. 衔接：God! The bear was baring his sharp teeth excitedly. 完整的： Para 1: A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. Before we had time to think, he returned to the fence, hammering on it more violently. Seeing the fury in his eyes, I felt my leg shaking. Just at my wit’s end, Elli threw pieces of garlic bread over the fence and exclaimed to me, “Run!” Silence behind. But soon there came a loud bang! We turned around horribly just in time to see the fence crashing down. God! The bear was baring his sharp teeth excitedly. (82 words) Para 2: At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. 场景一：熊的反应和 我们的反应 看一看+情感：Staring at the big “monster” with fear, the bear wa s rooted to the ground for seconds. 过渡（情感）：This is the chance of a lifetime! 动一动：For an instant, we board the helicopter safe and sound. 场景二：接着写熊的 反应：eat the food 时间过渡：But an interesting thing happened. 动一动：The next two minutes saw the bear dashing to the food we l eft behind and wolfing it down. 场景三：我拍下照片 What a rare scene! I froze the picture as quickly as possible and it still sticks in my mind today. 本文看就是给熊拍照，首段就说明了，因此最后也是拍照。至于要不要升华 到动物保护之类的，我看就没有必要了吧。 完整的： Para 2: At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. Staring at the big “monster” with fear, the bear was rooted to the ground for seconds and sniffed awkwardly. This is the chance of a lifetime!For an instant, we boarded the helicopter safe and sound. But an interesting thing happened. The next two minutes saw the bear dashing to the food we left behind and wolfing it down. What a rare scene! I froze the pictureas quickly as possible and it still sticks in my mind today. 全文整合：(加粗为时间过渡，红色字为场景过渡) Para 1: A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. Before we had time to think, he returned to the fence, hammering on it more violently. Staring the fury in his eyes, I felt my leg shaking. Just at my wit’s end, Elli threw pieces of garlic bread over the fence and exclaimed to me, “Run!” Silence behind. But soon there came a loud bang! We turned around horribly just in time to see the fence crashing down. God! The bear was baring his sharp teeth excitedly. (77 words) Para 2: At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. Looking at the big “monster” with fear, the bear was rooted to the ground for seconds and sniffed awkwardly. This is the chance of a lifetime!For an instant, we boarded the helicopter safe and sound. But an interesting thing happened.The next two minutes saw the bear dashing to the food we left behind and wolfing it down. What a rare scene!I froze the pictureas quickly as possible and it still sticks in my mind today. （79 words） 说明： 写这篇文的时候，我应该和你一样，肚子里那么好词好句恨不得一下子倒出来，譬如写害怕时有太多的 好词好句，但是我最终还是选择最简单的 with fear, be rooted, my leg shaking，实际上这种情节描 写没有必要过于追求，应该把重点放在：情节、连贯和衔接上，否则喧宾夺主，本末倒置了。 第一：如何表示时间之快，我用了以下句子： 1. Before we had time to think, he returned to the fence, hammering on it more violently. 2. We turned around horribly just in time to see the fence crashing down. 3. For an instant, we boarded the helicopter safe and sound. 4. The next two minutes saw the bear dashing to the food we left behind and wolfing it down. 5. I froze the picture as quickly as possible. 光时间之快的句子就用了 65 个单词，几乎占了一半文。 第二：如何表示同时做，即：一边，一边 Seeing the fury in his eyes, I felt my leg shaking. Staring at the big “monster” with fear, the bear was rooted to the ground for seconds and sniffed awkwardly. 第三：如何表示意外的惊讶或者急中生智： Just at my wit ’ s end, Elli threw pieces of garlic bread over the fence and exclaimed to me, “Run!” But soon there came a loud bang! This is the chance of a lifetime! But then an interesting thing happened. God! The bear was baring his sharp teeth excitedly. What a rare scene! 请结合我上篇文章的脱困，你会发现很多词都可以直接套用，因为脱困类的话题无非就是： 危险—》无奈—》急中生智—》急速的动作—》感叹脱险 你也可以说这是故事情节模板，但是我们没法摆脱，因为真实生活中也就这样的发展线，一切都如同是 被设计好的程序一样，日复一日，直到人类终老。