高中英语作文--- Ways to Better Your Writing课件29张

Ways to Better Your Writing • Learning aims (⑴)To develop students’ ability of writing (⑵) To raise students’ sense of cooperation • Main points: Better a composition using correct words and expressions • Difficult Points: Correct the mistakes in a composition Part I.原题回放 假定你是李华，从互联网（（the Internet）上得知一个国际中学生 组织将在新加坡（Singapore）举办夏令营，欢迎各国学生参加。请 写一封电子邮件申请参加。内容主要包括： 1.自我介绍（包括英语能力）; 2.参加意图（介绍中国、了解其他国家）; 3.希望获准。 注意: 1.词数100左右; 2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯; 3.邮件开头和结尾已为你写好. 参考词汇 ： 夏令营 summer camp/camping 国际中学生组织 International Student Organization Dear Sir or Madam, Yours, Li Hua Step One 审题 1、体裁 __________ 2、人称 _____________ 3、时态 _______________ Step Two 要点与分段 第一段：写信目的,引出话题 第二段：1.自我介绍（包括英语能力）; 2.参加意图（介绍中国、了解其他国家） 第三段：表达愿望,希望获准 Step Three 连词成句，连句成篇 Step Four 仔细检查 应用文 第一人称为主 一般现在时为主 • 要点解析 1.从互联网（（the Internet）上得知一个国际中学 生组织将在新加坡（Singapore）举办夏令营。 I heard the news _____an International Student Organization will _____ (举办)a summer camp in Singapore. 【句式升华】：Surfing the Internet, I got the information______ a summer camp will __________________ (举办)in Singapore. that hold that be held/take place 2.自我介绍（包括英语能力）。 I’m good at English, __________(especial) my _______________(英语口语) is excellent，I speak fluent English. 【句式升华】： My spoken English is very good, so I______________________________________ ______________________(与…交流没有困 难)foreigners. especially spoken English have no difficulty/trouble/problems in communicating with 3.参加意图（介绍中国、了解其他国家）。 I ______________________________________(希 望介绍) China to other countries and understand their cultures. 【句式升华】： _______________________________________(希 望)to tell students from other countries about China, I wish to learn about their countries________ (也). hope/want/plan/intend/aim to introduce as well Hoping/Wanting/Planning/Intending/Aiming 4.表达愿望,希望获准。 I am _________________________(期待) your early reply. 【句式升华】： I ___________________(感激) if you could allow me to ____________________________(参加)the summer camping. expecting/looking forward to would appreciate it join in/take part in/participate in One possible version Dear Sir or Madam, I’m Li Hua, a middle school student from China. I read the announcement of the summer camp that you have posted on the Internet and I am interested in it. I know that you welcome students from different countries and I’d like to take part in it. I’ve been learning English for 10 years, and I speak fluent English. What’s more, I’ll be able to tell students from other countries about China and learn about their countries as well. I hope I will be accepted as a member of your summer camp. Looking forward to your reply! Yours, Li Hua Part II. Correct the following mistakes. 1.(1)I want to introduce China to students in other countries and let them understand the China. (2)I hope that I can spread my Chinese culture and knowledges to other countries. (3)I can talk with people who is from England. 小结:错误类型 冠词、名词、主谓一致错误 kn l dge are 2.I think it is a meaningful experience in my growing road, so please agree with us. 小结:错误类型 代词使用错误， 注意前后要一致 me 3. (1).I have been study English for 11 years and I can speak a little German. (2)In the past few days, I knew the information that the summer camp will be held in Singapore. 小结:错误类型 studying 时态错误 have kno n 4.(1)I would appreciate if I would be allowed to get the chance. (2)I hope you can agree with me to join in the summer camp. (3)I hope you to allow me to take part. (4)Looking forward your reply. (5)I want to knowing other countries’ customs, geography and so on. (6) I’m good at English, and my English spoken is the best in my class. 小结:错误类型 allow/permit 搭配错误 it can/will to kno spoken English 5.(1)I can speak English well and I have a health body. (3)There is beautiful scenery and varied of delicious foods in my country. (4)I am outgoing and humour. (5)I think I can learn more knowledge about American music by this active. (6)My ability of speaking English doesn’t very good. 小结:错误类型 词性混乱 （名词、形容词、副词） lthy varieties humorous ity isn’t • 总结常见错误类型： • 冠词、名词、主谓一致错误 • 代词错误 • 时态错误 • 搭配错误 • 词性混乱 • 五大基本句型： 1）主语+ 不及物动词 （S+Vi.） The sun rises in the east. 2）主语+及物动词+宾语 （S+Vt.+O） Who knows the answer? 3）主语+及物动词+间宾+直宾（S+Vt.+O+O） He brought you a dictionary. 4）主语+及物动词+宾语+宾补（S+Vt.+O+C） I found the book interesting. 5）主语+系动词+表语（S+Link-V+P） She became a lawyer. • 强调： 一个句子至少要有“主语+谓语” （除特殊 句式外，如祈使句，省略句等） Part III. Enjoy the wonderful sentences. 1.Hardly had I known it when I wrote to you to apply to join in it. (韩硕) 2. I would appreciate it if you could allow me to join in the summer camping.(李梦晓) 3. The reason why I want to take part in this summer camp it is that I want to introduce China which is my native country to everyone from the other countries. (金铉) The reason why I want to go there is that I want to learn the culture of other countries and take advantage of this chance to introduce Chinese culture to others. (龙健) 4. Not only am I good at English but also I’m outgoing and friendly.(彭俊甜) 5. Apart from it, I also want to know something about other countries. I will learn a huge amount of knowledge from it.(纪飞) 6. On the one hand, my native country which has a population of about 1.3 billion is booming.(孙吉尚) 7. I want to know some cultures about other countries, so that it can broaden my horizons. (韩硕) 8. In the meanwhile, I want to introduce China to foreigners and know something about other countries.(林浩) 英语作文的评分标准 一、优秀（22--25）：紧扣主题，覆盖所有要点，内 容充实；语法结构多样，词汇丰富，行文流畅，显 示出较强的语言运用能力，允许有个别语言错误， 但不影响意思表达。 二、良好（18--21）：紧扣主题，覆盖所有要点，内 容较充实，行文较流畅，语言有少量错误，但基本 不影响意思表达。 三、一般（15--17）：紧扣主题，基本覆盖所有要点， 语言错误已影响了部分意思的表达，但多数句子基 本正确；基本达到预期写作目的。 英语作文的评分标准 四、较差（11--14）：要点不全，内容不完整， 行文不够连贯；语言错误较多，半数句子 基本正确。 五、差（6--10）：内容混乱，或主要内容偏 离主题，尚能够写出少数与内容相关的可 读句。 六、极差（0--5）：只能写出与内容相关的词 语，没有有效信息；抄写其他文章，或只 是写出与作文无关的内容。 附：如果书写书面较差，将作文降一个档次。 小错：单词拼写，冠词，大小写，标点 符号错误。 大错：搭配错误，词语用错（介词，名 词，动词，形容词副词，主谓一 致，非谓语动词），句式结构。 大错和小错 Part IV. Practice 假定你是李华，你校英文报“外国文化”栏目拟刊 登美国节日风俗和中学生生活的短文。请给美国朋友彼 得写信约稿，要点如下： 　1.栏目介绍; 　2.稿件内容； 　3.稿件长度：约400词汇; 　4.交稿日期：6月28日前 注意： 　1.词数100左右； 　2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯； 　3.开头语已为你写好。 　　Dear Peter, 　　I'd like to ask you to write an article for our school's English newspaper. Step One 审题 1、体裁 __________ 2、人称 _____________ 3、时态 _______________ Step Two 要点与分段 第一段：写信目的,引出话题 第二段： 1.栏目介绍 　　2.稿件内容:美国节日风俗和中学生生活 　　3.稿件长度：约400词汇 　　4.交稿日期：6月28日前 第三段：表达愿望,希望获准 Step Three 连词成句，连句成篇 Step Four 仔细检查 应用文 第一人称为主 一般现在时为主 • 要点解析 1. 栏目介绍,你校英文报“外国文化”刊登美国节 日风俗和中学生生活的短文。 Our school newspaper “Foreign Cultures” will start a column about western life and culture in order to develop our interests, broaden our horizons and enrich our after school life. 2.介绍美国节日风俗和中学生生活。 You can introduce a western festival, such as the Christmas Day, the New Year or the Thanksgiving Day. Besides, You may talk about your life in your middle school. 3.稿件长度：约400词汇。 Your article should be at least 400 words. I think 400 words would be fine. 4.交稿日期：6月28日前。 The deadline is June 28th, so please deliver your article to me before the date. I hope you would be so kind as to send it to be before June 28th, so that it can be published in time. 5.表达愿望,希望获准。 I’m looking forward to your reply and your article. I would appreciate it if you could help me. One Possible Version Dear Peter, I‘d like to ask you to write an article for our school’s English newspaper. The “Foreign Cultures” section in our newspaper is very popular with us students. It carries articles written by foreign friends about the cultures of their home countries. Would you please write something about the culture in your part of the United States? And we would especially welcome articles about how Americans spend their holidays and festivals, and the life of American high school students. You can write anything relevant as long as it’s interesting and informative(增长见闻的). 400 words would be fine. Could we have your article before June 28? I’m looking forward to hearing from you. Yours, Li Hua