2021 年高考英语全国卷 1 的读后续写指导：给妈妈做早饭
总评：全国 I 卷的读后续写和去年山东卷的卖爆米花续写基本一样，都是关于帮助和爱，涉及到大
人和孩子之间。考生不可能离题了，况且标题都给了，情节线特别明显。考完后，学生也反映，有话可
写，能用上平时的相关语料。
有学生说，这篇和以前练习的某某篇很相似，写起来更有信心。可见，平时练习如果练到位了，确
实好很多。但话又说回来，读后续写涉及到的话题其实相当有局限的，如同本篇，平时只要稍微练习，
都有一半的概率碰到类似话题。
无论怎么说，功夫还在平时。同时，我深切感受到：续写题目的选择特别重要，高考不大偏向于选
择那种续写情节曲折的，而是情节非常简单但同时细节可以丰富的。所以，我觉得我一向提倡的极简原
则是非常符合高考要求和趋势的。
第二节（满分 25 分）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
A MOTHER'S DAY SURPRISE
The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for
Mother's Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They
planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There
was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.
The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the
kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil
while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jema found
the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jef turned on the second stove burner to heat up
the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot
and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other
slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the
porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the
gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jef to clean it up so they could continue to cook the
rest of the porridge. But Jeff's hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put
his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear！The piece of bread in the pan had
turned black as well.
注意：
1.续写词数应为 150 左右：
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答
分析：
一篇读后续写必然经过以下的步骤：
第一步：找线索（Read for clues），定主题
人物：twins: Jeff, Jenna; father and mother
想法：the surprise they were planning for Mother's Day, brought her breakfast in bed.
（续写对于想法的线索的照应：实现了想法）
情感：
The twins:
-->excitement, pleased and proud
-->Jenna panicked.
-->Jeff stayed calm
-->But Jeff's hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain.
本文的主题就是标题了：A MOTHER'S DAY SURPRISE。如果还要进一步升华，那就是体现了孩
子们对妈妈的爱。实际上这个升华也可以不用，因为孩子做饭给妈妈吃，本身就体现了 love，这是不
言自明的。
第二步：推理情节（read for plots）
根据极简原则，我们直接根据提示句推测出一个场景即可，越直接越能接近作者的写作目的。
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.
场景一：根据 father appeared 推测下一个场景：father 的反应（说什么？做什么）
场景二：根据 carried the breakfast 推测上一个场景：breakfast 已经做好
这两个场景是不难推导出来的，那么 father 做了什么，必然是帮助他们做饭。
所以接下来重点就是：father 到底怎么做？用极简就是：父亲帮我们收拾残局并且教我们做早
餐。
那么要不要写具体的做饭过程？不需要，说实话，你不会做这种饭啊，而且还涉及到很多做饭
做菜的词汇，更麻烦了。这个具体教学过程完全可以简化为，他们听了父亲的指导后，成功了。
读后续写中如何把繁琐的动作简化是一个很重要的技能。
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.
场景三：根据 woke ..up 推测下一个场景：妈妈的反应
场景四：the twins 的反应
主题结束
实际上去年山东卷卖爆米花和今年都一样的，第一段就把问题解决了，第二段只是写各自的感
受和动作，最后主题结束。
指导：
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.
“Don’t panic!” he handed each one a wet towel, helping them
clean the mess quickly.
Father 说一说，动一
动：安慰孩子，帮他们
After that, Jeff stammered out their plan, her ace flushing. Jeff 的反应：说一说，
感情描写
However, Father laughed, “Sounds great! I can teach you to
cook.”
Father 的回答
At this, Jenna and Jeff almost jumped to their feet, joy in eyes. Jenna 和 Jeff 的反应
Under his careful guidance, it didn’t take long before the French
toast and chicken porridge were ready.
串联孩子和父亲的场
景：学会了
Everything settled, Father left the kitchen, promising to keep
their secret.
衔接句
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.
Meeting their smiling eyes, Mother felt confused until they
presented the breakfast and said “Happy Mother’s Day”. 衔接句：妈妈的反应
Mother gave them a tight hug, “Unbelievable! You can cook! It’s
the biggest surprise I have received.” Her face lit up with happiness. 妈妈说一说
“They have known how to take care of others.” Father said in
response to her excitement, winking at Jenna and Jef. 爸爸说一说
They couldn’t help giggling. It was a secret only shared between
them.
主题结尾：孩子笑一
笑
完整的：
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.
“ Don ’ t panic! ” he handed each one a wet towel, helping them clean the mess
quickly.After that, Jeff stammered out their plan, his face flushing. However, Father laughed,
“Sounds great! I can teach you to cook.” At this, Jenna and Jef almost jumped to their feet,
joy in eyes. Under his careful guidance, it didn ’ t take long before the French toast and
chicken porridge were ready. Everything settled, Father left the kitchen, promising to keep
their secret.
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.
Meeting their smiling eyes, Mother felt confused until they presented the breakfast and
said “Happy Mother’s Day”. Mother gave them a tight hug, “Unbelievable! You can cook! It’
s the biggest surprise I have received.” Her face lit up with happiness. “They have known how
to take care of others.” Father said in response to her excitement,winking at Jenna and Jef.
They couldn’t help giggling. It was a secret only shared between them. （150 words)
提示：本文基本和原文作者一样，，请注意时间过渡和人物互动的写法。
参考 2021 高考英语读后续写出处及原文：
https://www.assignmentpoint.com/other/mothers-day-celebration-with-twin-child-an-o
pen-speech.html
Mother’sDay Celebration with Twin Child
The twins rubbed theirhands with glee as they thought of the surprise they were planning
for Mother’sDay. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast
inbed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watchedtheir
mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactlywhat to do.
The big day dawned atlast. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair crept down the stairs to the
kitchen.They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of waterand left
it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs intoa plate and added in some
milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices intothe egg mixture. Next, Jeff turned on the
second stove burner to heat up thefrying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff
started frying the bread.The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within minutes. Jenna
threw theburnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, sheturned
down the fire so it cooked nicely.
Then Jeff noticed thepot cover starting to move. The next minute, the porridge boiled
over and putout the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off thegas.
But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to wipe up the sticky stuffso they could continue
to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff’s handtouched the hot burner and he gave a yelp of
pain. Jenna made him put his handunder the tap. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh
dear! The piece ofbread in the pan had turned black as well.
As the twins lookedaround them in dismay, their father appeared in the doorway. One
look and heknew what they were up to. Seeing their crestfallen faces, he told them toclean up
the kitchen while he helped them make breakfast for Mother. The twinscheered up and did as
told. Within an hour, the kitchen was cleaned, and Fatherhad made some egg sandwiches and
cooked some oat porridge. Then he sneaked backto bed. The twins prepared the breakfast
tray, adding a card they had made, andthen carried the tray upstairs to their parents ’
bedroom.
The twins woke theirmother up by hugging her and yelling ‘Happy Mother’s Day, darling
Mummy!’ Mother hugged the twins. Her eyes widened at the sight of the breakfast tray.She
shook Father who was pretending to snore. He feigned astonishment when hesaw the
breakfast. Mother bit into a sandwich and said it was the best she had ever tasted. Jeff
immediately wanted to have a bite. Jenna caught her father ’ seye and they winked at each
other secretly.
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