第二部分
高频话题写作指导
七年级(下) Units 9-12
校园旅行
写作导图
从广西近五年“校园旅行”相关话题的
书面表达来看,其主要涉及的命题角度为:
①旅行前的相关情况,如:2011年崇左向将
来崇左旅游的美国网友Jim介绍相关情况;②
旅行时的注意事项,如:2014年贵港以
“How to be a good visitor?”为题呼吁大家文
明出游;
③旅行后的感受及收获,如:2014年桂林记
录和美国朋友Tom去北京旅游的经历;2011
年南宁谈论参加完夏令营的收获。同时,从
全国近五年的命题方向可以看出,除以上广
西设题角度,还有涉及“旅行方式(团体游
或个人游)的选择及描述”。以2014年桂林
为例:
Who, when, where
First day,…
Second day,…
…
Feeling (wonderful)
During the trip
Beginning
Ending
A trip to
Beijing
亮点句型速成
常用句型:I had some experiences. I
traveled in Beijing.
推荐句型: I had some experiences when
I traveled in Beijing.
常用句型:I could go travelling to a
tourist attraction. I enjoyed myself in the
summer holiday.
推荐句型: I could go travelling to a
tourist attraction to enjoy myself in the
summer holiday.
开头句:
1. I’m so excited about my trip to Hong Kong.
2. Every month, we go on a school trip to a
museum or a theater.
3. As for me,traveling is the way to relax.
4. I want to travel to the Great Wall one day.
中间句:
1. I’m very glad to be your guide.
2. You’d better wear your sports shoes.
结尾句:
1. I will meet many people and make friends
with them during my trip.
2. I hope you will have a good time here.
详见“28天话题词汇分类速记表”
话题(十六)旅游与交通
典例剖析(2014桂林)
你的美国朋友Tom非常喜欢中国文化,去年
暑假你和他一起从桂林出发去北京旅游了几天,
你们参观了一些著名景点,还品尝了一些有名的
小吃……请把你们的旅游经历写成一篇短文。
要求: 1. 文章字数在80-100词之间,要点齐全,
可以适当发挥。
2. 文章中不得出现真实的姓名、学校等信息。
the Palace Museum,
Tian’anmen Square
see Beijing
Opera
the Great Wall visit, take
photos
Lao She Teahouse back to Guilin
Beijing Roast Duck …
A Trip to Beijing
My American friend Tom and I
went to Beijing by plane last summer.
【审题指导】
细读所给的文字提示,可以提取以下信息:
1. 本题要求写一篇记叙文。记叙自己和汤姆一起
旅游的经历,写作时主要用第一人称,写汤姆时
用第三人称。
2. 记叙的是过去的事情,主要用一般过去时。
3. 要点要齐全,可适当发挥。
4. 词数在80-100词之间,不得出现真实姓名、校
名。
【范文点评】
A Trip to Beijing
My American friend Tom
and I went to Beijing by plane
last summer. ①On the first day,
we visited the Palace Museum
and Tian’anmen Square. The
next day, we climbed the Great
Wall. We took lots of photos.
①以时间顺
序描写旅行
经历。描写
时,用了On
the first day,
The next day,
Finally,使
文章条理清
晰。
②It was a fantastic experience,
but we felt tired. The third day
we relaxed. Then we had the
Beijing Roast Duck for lunch. I
think it is the most delicious food
in the world! Tom is interested in
Chinese culture, so we drank tea
and saw Beijing Opera in Lao
She Teahouse in the evening.
Finally, we did some shopping
and flew back to Guilin.
② 描 述 到 长 城
参 观 和 吃 烤 鸭
时 的 感 受 。
fantastic一词可
见 作 者 对 长 城
的 评 价 之 高 ;
t h e m o s t
delicious, in the
world 短语的使
用 可 见 作 者 对
于 北 京 烤 鸭 的
高度评价。
③The trip to Beijing
was short, but it was
wonderful. Tom said
that he would never
forget it.
③总结说明此次旅
行虽然短,但是很
精彩,wonderful
一词浓缩了作者对
这次北京之旅的肯
定。