2022年新高考英语读后续写真题解析06

读后续写真题2020.6山东卷（新高考卷）:爆米花救助穷人 1试题再现2试题分析3写作思路4范文赏析目录CONTENTS 2020试题再现历年高考英语读后续写真题分析01 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。1.TheMeredithfamilylivedinasmallcommunity．Astheeconomywasindecline，somepeopleinthetownhadlosttheirjobs．Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet．Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges．2.Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman．Shespentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor．Sheknewtheyhadproblems，andtheyneededallkindsofhelp．Whenshehadtime，shewouldbringfoodandmedicinetothem．3.Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore．Therewasamansickinbed，hiswife，whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork，andtheirlittleboy．Thelittleboy﹣hisnamewasBernard﹣hadinterestedherverymuch．4."Iwishyoucouldseehim，"shesaidtoherownchildren，John，Harry，andClara．"Heissuchahelptohismother．Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney，butIdon'tseewhathecando．"5.Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom，thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard．"Iwishwecouldhelphimtoearnmoney，"saidClara．"Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch．"6."SodoI，"saidHarry．"Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem．"7.Forsomemoments，Johnsaidnothing，but，suddenly，hesprangtohisfeetandcried，"Ihaveagreatidea!Ihaveasolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish（完成）．"8.Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention．WhenJohnhadanidea，itwassuretobeagoodone．"Itellyouwhatwecando，"saidJohn．"YouknowthatbigboxofcornUncleJohnsentus？Well，wecanmakepopcorn（爆米花），andputitintopaperbags，andBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit．"WhenMrs．MeredithheardofJohn'sidea，shethoughtitwasagoodone，too._____________________Witheverythingready，Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.__________________________________ 2020试题分析历年高考英语读后续写真题分析02 TheMeredithfamilylivedinasmallcommunity.Astheeconomywasindecline,somepeopleinthetownhadlosttheirjobs.Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet.Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges.Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman.Shespentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor.Sheknewtheyhadproblems,andtheyneededallkindsofhelp.Whenshehadtime,shewouldbringfoodandmedicinetothem.原文分析经济不景气。人物性格特征：乐于助人。 Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore.Therewasamansickinbed,hiswife,whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork,andtheirlittleboy.Thelittleboy-hisnamewasBernard-hadinterestedherverymuch.“Iwishyoucouldseehim,”shesaidtoherownchildren,John,Harry,andClara.“Heissuchahelptohismother.Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney,butIdon'tseewhathecando.”Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom,thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard.“Iwishwecouldhelphimtoearnmoney.”saidClara.“Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch.”原文分析故事的开端：介绍小男孩的困境。遇到问题：想帮助男孩但是不知道如何做。 “Sodo1,”saidHarry.“Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem.”Forsomemoments,Johnsaidnothing,but,suddenly,hesprangtohisfeetandcried,“Ihaveagreatidea!Ihaveasolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish（完成）.”Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention.WhenJohnhadanidea,itwassuretobeagoodone.“Itellyouwhatwecando,”saidJohn.“YouknowthatbigboxofcomUncleJohnsentus？Well,wecanmakepopcorn（爆米花）,andputitintopaperbags,andBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit.”原文分析John想到了解决问题的办法。具体帮助Bernard的办法：炸爆米花卖。 2020写作思路历年高考英语读后续写真题分析03 例：(howtoread)1.浅层信息理解when：__________________；where:______________________；who：__________________;what:_______________________；/Mrs.Meredith,Bernard,John,Harry,Clara2.深层信息理解(1)故事主要发展情节(2)文章风格人称：______________________;时态：_______________________;何种细节描写为主：心理□；动作□；语言□；表情□；环境□；外貌□(3)写作主题:______________________________________________;Behaviors（行为）Feelings（情感）Para.1&2Para.3&4Para.5&6&7&8kind;thoughtful第三人称过去式√√√/HelpBernardearnsomemoneyMrs.Meredithvisitedthepoorpeople;broughtfoodandmedicinetothem;Mrs.Meredithtoldherownchildren;Bernardwantedverymuchtoearnmoney;whattodo;/Wecanmakepopcorn（爆米花），andputitintopaperbags，andBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit.excitedPeopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges．Read 细读两段续写的开头语，理顺续写段落的逻辑关系；梳理语篇内容推进方向，合理创新故事情节。Para.1:WhenMrs．MeredithheardofJohn'sidea，shethoughtitwasagoodone，too.紧扣语境构思情节，分析：1．据第一段开头关键词可知，___________。Para.2:Witheverythingready，Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.2．据第二段开头关键词可知，____________。Think本段应该描写孩子们如何制作爆米花本段应该描写Bernard如何卖爆米花，结果如何 Write字迹工整篇幅充实：____________________________;语言丰富：___________________________________________;内容得体：____________________________________________;空白横线至多剩余一行；或者每一段落续写至少7句话无基本语法错误；衔接得当；有形容词和副词；有从句和非谓语情节向前发展；符合原文逻辑；体现作者写作目的 Paragraph1：WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too._______________________________________________________________________Paragraph2：Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness._______________________________________________________________________原文分析根据下面的推断，本段应该是孩子们实行John提出的办法。表明上一段落爆米花已经炸好了。本段应该是Bernard卖爆米花的过程以及结果。别忘了升华主旨。 Paragraph1Paragraph1：WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.Theywenttothesupermarkettobuymaterials.Theybegantomakepopcorn.Theymadealotofpopcorn.TheytookthepopcorntoBernard’s. Paragraph2Paragraph2：Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Hewentdoortodoortosellpopcorn.Hesoldallthepopcorn.Helearntomakepopcornbyhimself.Helearnthowtobeindependent. 句子润色1.所以，他们一起去了当地的超市。So,theywenttothelocalsupermarkettogether.So,theyheadedtothelocalsupermarket together.thelocalsupermarket动词的形象化 句子润色2.他们买了一袋玉米和一些特制的爆米花袋子。Theyboughtabagofcornand somespecialbagsforpopcorn.specialbagsforpopcorn 句子润色3.当他们到家时，他们做了很多爆米花，放在特制的袋子里。Whentheygothome,theymadealotofpopcornandputitinthespecialbags.Uponarrivinghome,they madealotofpopcorn andputitinthespecialbags.句式多变 句子润色4.带着爆米花，他们去了伯纳德的家。TheytookthepopcornandwenttoBernard’shome.Withthepopcorn,theywenttoBernard’shome.With复合结构替换 句子润色5.他们告诉伯纳德怎么卖爆米花。伯纳德和他的父母非常感激。TheytoldBernardhowtosellthepopcorn.Bernardandhisparents wereverygrateful. 句子润色6.梅雷迪斯一家也很乐意帮助这个家庭。AndtheMeredith family alsofeltveryhappy tohelpthisfamily.Behappytodo 句子润色7.他把爆米花带到每家每户，把所有的爆米花都卖了。He tookthepopcornaround tothehousesandsoldallhispopcorn.aroundtothehousessoldallhispopcorn 句子润色8.他挣了很多钱。然后，他想自立。Heearnedalotofmoney.Then,he wantedtobeself-dependent.earnedalotofmoneybeself-dependent UsefulExpressions say说,tell告诉,shout大声叫add补充说,continue继续说,explain解释说,encourage鼓励地说,scream尖叫,whisper耳语laugh笑着说v感激begratefultoappreciateadj兴奋的excited,thrilled开心的happy,joyful,delighted感激的grateful满足的satisfied/content抽象名词兴奋excitement,thrill开心happiness,joy,delight感恩gratitudeamixtureofexcitementandhappiness心理描写动作描写 Itturnedoutthat+调调句型Itturnedoutitwashiswisdomthatsavedthewoman’slife.Steppingoutnotonlyhelpedabrotherinneed,butalsogaveourkidsthesweettasteofhelpingothers.atrulyunforgettableexperienceremainfreshinones’memoryThebirdssang;thegrasswasgreen;thesunwaswarm;andHans’heartwasfulloflove.Theairwasrichwithhappiness.Assheheadedouttothecar,shebreathedinthepleasantairandadmiredthecrowd.Hewasgreetedwithenthusiasm.场景描写Ending 2020范文赏析历年高考英语读后续写真题分析04 续写赏析WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn’sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.So,theyheadedtothelocalsupermarkettogether.Theyboughtabagofcornandsomespecialbagsforpopcorn.Whentheygothome,theymadealotofpopcornandputitinthespecialbags.Withthepopcorn,theywenttoBernard’shome.TheytoldBernardhowtosellthepopcorn.Bernardandhisparentswereverygrateful.AndtheMeredithfamilyalsofeltveryhappytohelpthisfamily.注意with复合结构的使用。 续写赏析Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Hetookthepopcornaroundtothehousesandsoldallhispopcorn.Heearnedalotofmoney.Then,hewantedtobeself-dependent.Therefore,heaskedMrs.Meredithtoteachhimhowtomakepopcorn.Afterthat,notonlydidhesellpopcorn,buthealsoaddedcreamandsalttothepopcorntomakeittastebetter.Bernardgrewuptobearemarkableman.HedidnotforgetthehelpofMeredith’sfamily,andhealsodidwhathecouldtohelpthoseinneed.注意常用的倒装句的使用。 THANKYOU