读后续写（Continuationwriting）读后续写。阅读下面的短文，根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。Exercise41Thebuswasalreadyfifteenminuteslate."MaybeIjustwon'tgotoworktoday,"Marysaidtoherself.Butsheknewshedidn'tmeanit.Shecouldn'taffordtomisswork一withtwochildrentofeed.Sinceherdivorce,ittookeverypennyshemadejusttosurvive.That'swhysheandthechildrenhadmovedtothecountrywhererentswerecheaper.Marywaswatchingthebirdsflyingfreelywhenastrangeflyinglizardshiplandedrightinfrontofher.Itwasmakingalowhummingsound.Thensheheardaloudsound.Outcamealongramp.Maryhidherfaceinherhands,frightened.Nextsheheardahissingsound.Thenallwasquiet.Maryopenedhereyes.Shecouldn'tbelievewhatshesaw.Awomaninagleamingsilverbodysuitwasstandinginfrontofherwithasmallbox,smilingsoftly,"AreyouChon?"Maryheard.“What?”Maryasked."AreyouChon?"thequestioncameagain.Marystared.“IhavegiftsforChon,"thewomansaid.Sheopenedthebox.“Whatisit?"Maryasked.,“ItisgoldforChon.”“ButIamnotChon,"Marysaid."MynameisMary.Whoareyou?Andwhereareyoufrom?”Withoutsayinganything,thewomanclosedtheboxandwalkedbackuptheramp.Maryheardthelowhummingsoundagainastheshipdisappeared.Marystartedtorun,eagertotellsomeone—anyone—aboutwhathadhappened.Butwouldtheybelieveher?ThenagainawomanfromanotherbluelizardShipbroughtdiamondsforChon.MaryrepliedthatshewasMary.6
Quickly,thewomanwasgone.Marywasbesideherself.Anyoneshetoldherstorywouldthinkthatshewascrazy.Walkingtowardsherhouse,Maryagainheardthefamiliarsound.Whentheshiplanded,twowomenwentdowntherampandcameforward.Marywasnolongerafraid."Whoareyou?”askedthewomen.Marylookedattheboxestheywerecarrying.Shethoughtoftheothertwoboxes,filledwithgoldanddiamonds."MynameisChon,”Maryanswered.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。Paragraph1:ThetwowomencameclosertoMary,smilingsoftly,Paragraph2:Inthefollowingdays,Maryreceived“GiftsforChon"oneafteranother,butonedayshesawawomanfromthesamelizardshipsendingagiftforMary.6
一．试题详解1.核心内容主人公Mary生活艰辛、经济拮据，两次遇到离奇事情——一艘神奇飞船寻找Chon,接连给Chon送来金子和钻石。Mary如实回答，否认自己是Chon。两次否认之后，Mary经过惊讶、害怕、激动的内心斗争后平静下来，到第三次遇到飞船赠送礼物时，她改以肯定的回答，冒充是Chon。2.写作思路(1)明确故事人物关系(characters)：主人公Mary、飞船送礼物的两位女士及贵重礼物的赠送对象Chon。(2)理清故事主要事件(events)：Mary生活艰辛；飞船两次给Chon送礼；Mary冒充Chon接受礼物。(3)根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展(development)：原文营造了科幻的神秘气氛，情节简单，但布下重重悬念：谁是Chon?为什么送给Chon各种珍贵的礼物？送礼物的人又是谁，来自何方？当Mary冒充Chon时，故事戛然而止，这样的结尾既出人意料又折射人性，扣人心弦又意味深长。故事的总体发展应该是Mary假冒Chon成功，接连收到礼物后，她很可能忘记了自己的真实身份，当有一天真的给Mary送来礼物时，也有人冒名顶替了她。续写第一段：两个女士走近冒充Chon的Mary,将礼物递给她，Mary6
接过礼物后，内心应该很矛盾，可以写她当时的复杂心理活动等。续写第二段:Mary接连收到来自飞船的礼物，突然有一天是真正给Mary的礼物，可以写这次礼物不同以往，譬如幸福、快乐等一一正是Mary最想要的。可以讽刺地写她自己冒名顶替了别人，也有人冒名顶替了她，自己最想要的已无法得到了。(1)结合下划线词罗列写作要点(points)：结合下划线词和文本内容，展开尽可能丰富的想象，罗列出尽可能多的故事发展情节。例如，第一段可以通过以下提问来获取写作要点：WhatdidthetwowomengiveMary?HowdidMaryrespondtothegift?Withtheunexpectedfortune,whatfuturelifewouldMarylive?Whatwouldotherpeoplethinkaboutherwindfalls?第二段也可以通过提问获取续写要点:Afterreceivingmanygiftsoneafteranother,howdidMaryfeel?WhatwasthegiftforMaryabout?Couldshestillgetwhatshewanted?二．参考范文ThetwowomencameclosertoMary,smilingsoftly."GoldanddiamondsforChon,"TheysaidwhentheyhandedtheboxestoMary.Staringatthefortune,Marysuddenlybecamewordlessbecauseofjoyandsurprise.Beforeshecouldrespond,theydisappeared."I'mrichnow.Idon'tneedthattiringworkandstupidbusanymore...”Marysaidtoherself.However,herexcitementlastedonlyforawhilewhenasenseofworryfilledhermind.Whatwouldothersthinkaboutherwindfalls?Inthefollowingdays,Maryreceived“GiftsforChonone”oneafteranother,butonedayshesawawomanfromthesamelizardshipsendingagiftforMary.Tiredofsomuchfortune,Marydidn'tcareaboutthiskindofgifts.Ayoungladyhurriedoutside."Whoareyou?"thewomanasked."MynameisMary."Theladyanswered."'LoveforMary."Thewomanopenedthebox.Anangelslowlyflewoutfromit."Stopit!"theladyshouted,“IamnotMary!Stopgivingmethoseuselesshappinessorlove.Whydon'tyousendmesomegoldordiamonds?”Atthatmoment,howmuchMarywishedsheherselfwereMary!三、范文解析范文围绕文章的内容进行了合情合理的拓展。第一段写Mary接过装有黄金和钻石的盒子后，顿6
时激动无语，内心却极为矛盾，一是她从此可以过上富裕生活，但是又担心别人对她的意外财富大肆猜测，招惹诸多麻烦。第二段写Mary也有机会得到专门送给她的礼物，并且她已厌倦了财宝之类的礼物。谁知这回的礼物非同一般，是“幸福”和“爱",那些正是她最需要的。可惜有人冒充了Mary,她想当回Mary已不可能了。结尾出乎意料，耐人寻味。四、提炼归纳1.情节拓展合理巧妙续写续了原文的情节，让Mary不断遇到飞船并以Chon的身份无数次得到珍宝，这加重了她担忧与疲倦的内心冲突。最后富裕但并不快乐的她发现飞船不但给Chon礼物，也给Mary礼物——“幸福”和“爱"，而那些才是她最渴求的。可是，她再也无法得到，因为有人也冒名顶替了她。这样的构思妙在于单一重复的情节后面设置了出人意料的结局，讽刺意味浓郁，使主题意外深化，引发读者对生活的深思。科幻只是外衣，并不是为了展现神奇，而是揭示现实生活中人性应有的纯真。2.续写风格与原文和谐统一好的续写作品除了与所给短文保持情节的延续还要求风格的统一。续写部分语言朴实，多用短句，行文简洁，节奏明快,尤其是第二段的对话部分。范文注重刻画人物心理,情节离奇却蕴含朴素真实的生活场景和气息。6
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