读后续写（Continuationwriting）读后续写。阅读下面的短文，根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。Exercise35HewasinthefirstthirdgradeclassItaughtatSaintMary’sSchool.Allofmystudentsweredeartome,exceptMarkEklund.Heoftentalkedconstantly.Ihadtoremindhimagainandagainthattalkingwithoutpermissionwasnotacceptable.，OnemorningwhenMarktalkedoncetoooften,Imadeanewteacher'smistake.Ilookedathimandsaid,“Ifyousayonemoreword,Iamgoingtotapeyourmouthshut!Itwasn'ttensecondslaterwhenChuck,anotherstudent,blurtedout,“Markistalkingagain."SinceIhadstatedthepunishment,Ihadtoactonit.Itookoutarolloftapefrommydrawer,proceededtoMark'sdesk,toreofftwopiecesoftapeandmadeabigXoverhismouth.WhenIwalkedbacktoMark'sdeskafterclassandremovedthetape,hisfirstwordswere,“Thankyouforcorrectingme,Sister."OneFriday,Iaskedthestudentstolistthenamesoftheotherstudents,leavingaspacebetweeneachname.ThenItoldthemtowritedownthenicestthingtheycouldsayabouttheirclassmates.Astheylefttheroom,eachonehandedmethepaper.ThatSaturday,Iwrotedownthenameofeachstudentandlistedwhateveryoneelsehadsaidaboutthatindividual.OnMondayIgaveeachstudenthisorherlist.Beforelong,theentireclasswassmiling."Really?”Iheardthewhispers."Ineverknewthatmeantanythingtoanyone!""Ididn'tknowotherslikedmesomuch!"ThenMarksaid,“Thankyouforteachingme,Sister."Severalyearslater,afterIreturnedfromvacation,myparentsmetmeattheairport.Myfatherclearedhisthroatasheusuallydidbeforesayingsomethingimportant."TheEklundscalledlastnight,"hebegan."Really?"Isaid."Ihaven'theardfromtheminyears.IwonderhowMarkis."Dadrespondedquietly."MarkwaskilledinVietnam,"hesaid."Thefuneralistomorrow,andhisparentswouldlikeitifyoucouldattend."注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语；6
1.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；2.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。Paragraph1:Afterthefuneral,Mark’smotherandfatherfoundmeandwantedtoshowmesomething.Paragraph2:Mark'sclassmatesstartedtogatheraroundus.6
一．试题详解1.核心内容文本主要内容为：有一个上课爱讲话的学生Mark,作者曾用贴胶带这个方式惩罚过他。后来作者让全班同学写其他同学的优点，并整理好各自得到的评价发给大家，同学们反响很好。几年后的一天，作者却突然被邀参加Mark的葬礼。2.写作思路(1)明确故事人物关系(characters):故事中主要人物为作者(老师)、调皮的学生MarkEklund和其他的学生们。(2)理清故事主要事件(events)：作者面对班里一个调皮的学生Mark,用不太恰当的方式——贴胶带来处罚他，但他仍对老师心存感激；有一次作者在班级发起一项活动一一写下班里其他同学的优点，作者随后将每一位同学获得的评价整理到一张纸上并发给他们，引起了很好的反响,Mark不胜感激；学生毕业几年后的某一天,作者突然得知Mark在越南战争中牺牲，并被邀参加他的葬礼。(3)根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展(development):故事总体的发展应该是作者那一次给同学写评价的活动对学生们产生了积极深远的影响。续写第一段：葬礼后Mark父母找到6
作者，给她看一样东西。那很可能是他生前珍藏的写满了同学对他赞扬的那张纸，可以写那张纸所起的作用等。续写第二段:其他同学也围了过来，可以写他们纷纷分享了自己如何珍惜感谢这一份来自同学评价的纸张及其对他们的影响等。(4)结合下划线词罗列写作要点(points):结合下划线词和文本内容，展开尽可能丰富的想象，罗列出尽可能多的故事发展情节。例如，第一段可以通过问以下问题来获取写作思维:WhatwouldMark'sparentswanttoshowme?WhatinfluencedidithaveonMark?第二段可以通过提问来拓展情节:WhydidMark'sclassmatesgatheraround?Whatwouldtheysaytome?二、参考范文Afterthefuneral,Mark'smotherandfatherfoundmeandwantedtoshowmesomething.Openingabillfold,hisfathercarefullyremovedtwowornpiecesofnotebookpaperthathadobviouslybeentaped,foldedandrefoldedmanytimes.IknewthatthepiecesofpaperweretheonesonwhichIhadlistedallthenicestthingsthatMark?sclassmateshadsaidabouthim."Thankyousomuchfordoingthat,"Mark'smothersaid."Asyoucansee,Markbehavedbetterandbetteratschool.It’sallbecauseofyouandyourlist.”Mark'sclassmatesstartedtogatheraroundus.Charliesmiled,“Istillkeepthelistinthetopdrawerofmydeskathome."ThenVickitookoutherwalletandshowedherwornlisttothegroup.“Icarrythiswithmeatalltimes,"Vickisaid."Ithinkweallsavedourlists."That’swhenIfinallysatdownandcried.Sometimesthesmallestthingscouldmeanthemosttoothers.Complimentthepeopleyouloveandcareabout,beforeitistoolate.三、范文解析范文围绕文章的内容进行了合情合理的拓展。第一段写了Mark的父母给作者看了Mark珍藏的写满了同学对他赞扬的那张纸,告诉作者他是如何珍惜这张评价纸并感谢了作者给他带来的正面教育和影响。第二段写了其他学生看到此景都纷纷围过来，说岀自己是如何珍藏这张宝贵的评价纸，每个人都从那次活动中受益匪浅。这使得作者深刻感受到了作为老师，有时一次不经意的小活动、赞扬与肯定对学生来说意义深远。6
四、提炼归纳1.语言上传情达意为了凸显学生们对这张评价纸的珍惜，范文运用了丰富的词汇来渲染这份珍惜之情，增强了表达效果，譬如“befoldedandrefoldedmanytimes,topdrawer,atalltimes"等。2.内容上烘托主题范文第二段生动具体地描写了几个同学毕业后如何珍藏那张评价纸，表达了评价纸对学生们产生的深远影响与非凡意义。这个事件的描写突出了文章的主题:有时候，即便是最微不足道的事情，对他人也可能意义非凡。所以不要吝啬你对他人的赞美。质也随之脱颖而出，点明了故事的中心。6
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