读后续写(Continuationwriting)读后续写。阅读下面的短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。Exercise36WhenthegreatlibraryofAlexandriaburned,thestorygoes,onebookwassaved.Butitwasnotavaluablebook;andsoapoorman,whocouldreadalittle,boughtitforafewcoppers.Thebookwasn'tveryinteresting,butbetweenitspagestherewassomethingveryinterestingindeed.Itwasathinstripofvellum(牛皮纸)onwhichwaswrittenthesecretofthe“Touchstone"!Thetouchstonewasasmallpebblethatcouldturnanycommonmetalintopuregold.Thewritingexplainedthatthetouchstonewaslyingamongthousandsandthousandsofotherpebblesthatlookedexactlylikeit.Butthesecretwasthis:Therealstonewouldfeelwarm,whileordinarypebbleswerecold.Thepoormanwasverycheerfultoobtainthesecretofthetouchstone.Hejustthoughtthatitwasagoodchanceforhimtomakeafortune.Thus,insearchofthepreciousstone,thepoormansoldhisfewbelongings,boughtsomesimplesupplies,campedontheseashore,andbegantestingpebbles.Atfirst,hejustpickedupthepebblesandthrewthemdownbecausetheywerecold.Gradually,hefoundthatifhepickedupordinarypebblesandthrewthemdownagain,hemightpickupthesamepebblehundredsoftimesandfindnothing.Therefore,inordernottomakegreateffortsinvain,whenhefeltonethatwascold,hethrewitintothesea.Timeaftertime,hespentawholedaydoingthis,however,unfortunatelynoneofthemwasthetouchstonethathewaslookingfor.Yetnevergivingup,hewentonandonthisway.Pickupapebble.Cold一throwitintothesea.Pickupanother.Throwitintothesea.Thedayscontinuedoveralongperiodoftime,stretchingintoweeksandtheweeksintomonths.注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2.应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语;3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。6
Paragraph1:Oneday,however,aboutmid-afternoon,heParagraph2:Soitiswithopportunity.6
一.试题详解1.核心内容文本主要内容为:一个穷人偶然间发现了试金石的秘密,从而变卖家产,开始去寻找试金石。为了不重复捡到相同的石子,他将摸起来冰冷的普通鹅卵石扔到了海里。这样的工作日复一日,持续了很久很久。2.写作思路(1)明确故事人物关系(characters):故事中主要人物为一个穷人。(2)理清故事主要事件(events):一个穷人去寻找试金石;普通的鹅卵石摸起来是冰冷的,而真正的试金石摸起来是温暖的;他将普通的鹅卵石不断地扔到海里;他重复做这一件事情很久很久。(3)根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展(development):故事总体的发展应该是这个穷人在无数次尝试后找到了或是错过了真正的试金石,从而在相应的结局中获得了人生哲理。续写第一段:他捡起了一块摸起来是温暧的鹅卵石。通过该段首句中的however可预知这一推断是符合逻'6
辑的。接着可能是他就此找到了试金石;也可能是他把试金石也当作了普通鹅卵石扔到了大海里,因为他重复“扔”这个动作太多次,以至于形成了一种习惯。这也符前文的铺垫。续写第二段:机会也是如此。接着应是根据故事的结局而产生的人生感悟。(4)结合下划线词罗列写作要点(points):第一段可以通过问以下4个问题来获取写作要点:Didhefindthetouchstoneatlast?Ifso,howdidhefeelthen?Ifnot,whydidn'thefindthetouchstone?Andhowdidhefeelthen?第二段可以通过问以下3个问题来获取写作要点:Whatcanwelearnfromthestory?Whatdoesthestoryconvey?Whatattitudeshouldwehavetoopportunitiesaroundus?二、参考范文Oneday,however,aboutmid-afternoon,hepickedupapebble.Itwaswarm.Thepoormanthrewitintotheseabeforeherealizedwhathehaddone.Justatthatmoment,hewastotallystunned.Heseldomrealizedthatafteralongperiodoftime,hehadformedsuchastronghabitofthrowingeachpebbleintotheseathatwhentherealstonehewantedcamealong,hestillthrewitaway.Regretfulashewas,therewasneveranothergoodchanceforhimtoobtaintheprecioustouchstone.Soitiswithopportunity.Thereareplentyofopportunitiesforeveryoneinoursociety.Veryoften,however,theycomequietlyandgobywithoutbeingnoticed.Unlesswearevigilant,itJseasytofailtorecognizeanopportunitywhenitisinhandandit'sjustaseasytothrowitaway.Therefore,itisadvisablethatweshouldvalueandtreatopportunitieswithcare.三、范文解析范文围绕文章的内容进行了合情合理的拓展。前文铺垫了主人公每天先数次地将捡到的普通鹅6
卵石扔到海里,日复一日,相同的动作持续了很长一段时间。因此,第一段叙述了有一天他捡到了真正的试金石,然而出于惯性,他将试金石也扔向了大海。第二段,根据这一结局,我们能够从故事中得出“机会稍纵即逝"的人生哲理。四、提炼归纳1.合理拓展情节在该题中,我们通过7个问题来拓展整理自己的写作思路,这7个问题以故事中的主人公为表达的主体,问题之间有一定的逻辑联系,符合故事发展的合理结局。2.有效运用连接手段范文中我们用了before,既体现了时间关系,又表现了意外之情;“soitiswith”则体现了两个主题之间进行转换的逻辑关系;用however表达转折关系;用therefore突出因果关系。这些连接词的使用可以使文本更加紧凑连贯。6
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