专题03户外冒险类一、真题链接（2016年10月浙江卷）OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,“I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”andwalkedaway.Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.“Tom!”shecried.“Help!”Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________真题解析2.1整体把握：主题语境人与自我--生活与学习--个人、家庭、社区及学校生活语篇话题本篇读后续写为记叙文，文章大意为夫妻二人去露营，因为吵架女人独自离开，却在森林中迷路，历经周折最后被营救并且与丈夫重聚。情节梳理故事要素when：OneweekendinJulywhere：intheforestwho：Acouple:JaneandTomwhat：JaneandTomwentcampingbutquarreled,andJaneleftaloneandwaslostintheforest.情节走向通过第一段首句“Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.”可预测，续写思路为：黑夜降临--Jane害怕--回忆--后悔--入睡通过第二段首句“ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.”可预测，续写思路为：寻求帮助--飞机飞过--示意飞机--被飞机发现并营救--夫妻重聚2.2逐句写作：第一段：1.一片漆黑立刻笼罩了整个森林。Immediately,anabsolutedarknessruledtheforest.2.简，精疲力竭，害怕，躺在一块石头旁边，想念她遥远的家人。Jane,exhaustedandscared,laydownnearastone,missingherfamily atadistance.3.所有美好的回忆涌上心头，她忍不住哭了起来：“如果不是我和汤姆吵架，走开，爬到高处，我就不会被困在这个可怕的地方，面对死亡的危险。”Allthefantasticmemorycrowdedinandshecouldn’thelpcrying,“Hadn’tIquarreledwith Tom, walked awayand climbed tothehighplace,Iwouldn’tbetrappedinthisawfulplace,confrontedwiththedangerofdying.”4.她因无休止的焦虑而后悔，然后眼睛里噙着晶莹的泪水。
Sheregrettedwithendlessanxiety,andthenbecameasleepwithshiningtearsinhereyes.第二段：5.尽管她很虚弱，她还是挣扎着站起来，继续寻求帮助。Weakasshewas,shestruggledtoherfeet,continuingsearchingforassistance.6.令她非常高兴的是，一架直升飞机一次又一次地从头顶飞过。Tohergreatjoy,a helicopter wasflyingoverheadagainandagain.7.她又急又兴奋，用自己的黄色上衣向直升机示意，不遗余力地大叫，以吸引别人的注意。Eagerandexcited,sheflaggedher yellowblouse andsparednoefforttoyellsoastoattractothers’attention.8.幸运的是，她最终被发现并被带上了直升机。Fortunately,shewaseventuallynoticedandbroughtintothehelicopter.9.在那里，她看到了她的丈夫，一个男人盯着她，脸上带着欣慰的表情。There,shesawherhusband,amanstaringather,wearinganexpressionofrelief.10．她尽可能紧紧地抱住他，激动得说不出话来。Astightlyaspossible,shehuggedhimandwastoothrilledtosayanything.11.此外，他们同意不再吵架，决定过上最充实的生活。Besides,theyagreednevertoquarrelagain,determiningtolivethelifetothefullest. 2.3范文赏析Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain. Immediately,anabsolutedarknessruledtheforest. Jane,exhaustedandscared,laydownnearastone,missingherfamily atadistance.Allthefantasticmemorycrowdedinandshecouldn’thelpcrying,“Hadn’tIquarreledwith Tom, walked awayand climbed tothehighplace,Iwouldn’tbetrappedinthisawfulplace,confrontedwiththedangerofdying.”Sheregrettedwithendlessanxiety,andthenbecameasleepwithshiningtearsinhereyes.ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Weakasshewas,shestruggledtoherfeet,continuingsearchingforassistance. Tohergreatjoy,a helicopter wasflyingoverheadagainandagain.Eagerandexcited,sheflaggedher yellowblouse andsparednoefforttoyellsoastoattractothers’attention.Fortunately,shewaseventuallynoticedandbroughtintothehelicopter.There,shesawherhusband,amanstaringather,wearinganexpressionofrelief.Astightlyaspossible,shehuggedhimandwastoothrilledtosayanything.Besides,theyagreednevertoquarrelagain,determiningtolivethelifetothefullest.
一、素材积累3.1情绪类素材积累害怕/恐惧害怕地inpanic恐惧地interror充满恐惧befulloffear/bestruckwithhorror感到害怕fearcreepsoversb.脸色变白faceturnspale3.2动作类素材积累全身颤抖tremblefromheadtotoe因为害怕而哽咽chokewithhorror心跳得厉害heartbeatviolently深呼吸takeadeepbreath挥舞手臂waveone’sarms一跃而起springtoone’sfeet摇摇晃晃站起来staggertoone’sfeet加快脚步quickenone’ssteps拖着疲劳的双腿dragone’slegs他的心像小鹿乱撞。Hisheartwasbeatingwildlylikeadeer.恐惧慢慢地蔓延到她身上。Fearslowlycreepsuponher.他心中涌起一阵恐惧。Afloodoffearwelledupinhim.她脸色苍白地站在那里，舌头打结。Herfaceturnedpaleandstoodheretongue-tied.她浑身颤抖，觉得如坐针毡。Sheshookallover,feelinglikesittingonpinsandneedles.四、模拟演练练习（一）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节，使之构成一个完整的故事。“Ineverwantedtocomeonthisstupidhikingtripanyway!”Jeff’svoiceechoedacrossthenarrowcanyon(峡谷).Nothingwasasprettyasithadseemedwhentheyfirsthikedthiswaytotheircampsiteyesterdaymorning.Before,therockshadbeenaninterestingchallenge.Now,theywereobstaclesthatwerethreateningtheirlives.Steepcliffshadearlierbeennaturalcuriosities,butnowtheywerenature’sweapons,beatingandrubbingJeffandhisfatherwhopushedthroughasquicklyastheycould.
Hisfatherstoppedforathirdtime,paleandoutofbreath,andturnedtolookatthe12-year-oldboy.“Thisishardonyou,son,Iknow.Butyou’vegottocomethroughwithcourageandcalmness.”“ButI’mscared!Idon’tevenwanttohavecourage!”hecomplained,turninghisheadtheotherway,andwipedhiseyesacrosshisarm.“Ifnotcourage,fine.”hisfatherrepliedstrictly.“Thenhaveenoughloveforyoursistertothinkthisthrough!”Hegentlyplacedhishandontheboy’sshoulderandcontinued,moresoftlythistime.“I’mjustholdingyouback.You’reyoung,butyou’restrongandfast.Doyourememberthewaybackfromheretotheroad,ifyouhadtogoalone?”Jeffflashedbacktothepainfulsceneofhissisterattheircampsitethismorning.She’dbeenbittenbyasnake,beforelongshecouldbarelymove,andthepainseemedtobegettingworse.Sheneededmedicalattentionrightaway,soleavingheratthecampsiteandseekinghelpwastheironlychoice.“Jeff?Jeff,couldyoudoit?Couldyouclimbupthecanyonandmakeitwithoutme?”Jefflookedpasthisfather’sencouragingeyestotheendofthecanyon,severalmilesaway.Henoddedslowlyasthepathandtheplanbegantotakeholdinhismind.“Whatwasthenameofthatlittletownwestoppedin,Dad?”“Flint.Weparkedatthesideofthemainroadafewmilesoutoftown.”Jeffthoughtaboutthisandthennodded.Paragraph1:Hewavedgoodbyetohisfatherandmovedon.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Finally,hemadeittothemainroad.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________练习（二）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节，使之构成一个完整的故事。
“IfmumfindsoutthatI'mgoingtothebeach,I'llbeinbigtrouble.”Isaidtomyselfsoftlyinalowvoice.Iwentdownstairsslowlyandtriedtowalkcasuallyintothekitchen.AsIwaswalkingtowardsthebackdoor,mumaskedwithoutlookingupfromherdish-washing,“Whereareyougoing?”Iansweredbackwithouthesitation,“Iamgoingtothegardentoplay.”AfterIgotoutofthekitchen,Ibreathedasignofrelief.Myplanhadworkedoutfinesofar.Iclimbedthefenceandjumpedontothemuddyfieldnexttomyhouseandstartedrunningtowardsthebusstopattopspeed.AfterhalfanhourIwasatthebeachscanningthecrowdformyfriends,JimmyandBobby.Twoyoungmenwereracinginthecanoes(独木舟).Afterawhile,Isawthemnearacoconuttree.Irantowardsthemandgotintomyswimmingtrunk(游泳裤).Foraboutanhour,weplayedvolleyballhappily.Suddenly,Bobbyhittheballtoohardandtheballfellintothesea.JustasBobbywasgoingtopickuptheball,thetidecameinandcarriedtheballfurtherandfurtherawayfromtheshore.IwantedtoshowoffmyswimmingskillssoIdeclaredtohelpgettheballforhim.Idivedintothewaterandstartedswimmingatasteadypace.Afterswimmingforabouttenminutes,IbecametiredbutwhenIsawthattheballwasonlyafewfeetawayfromme,Iputinanextraburstofspeed.However,justasIwasgoingtogettheball,averystrongcurrentswepttheballfurtherawayfromme.Atthatmoment,astringofweed(海草)tangled(缠绕)upwithmyfeetandIcouldnotswimproperly.Istruggledtokeepafloatbutitwasnouse.“IfIhadlistenedtomyparents,thiswouldneverhavehappened,”Ithoughtsilently.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1:Finally,afterstrugglingforaminuteortwo,Istillgotpulledunderwater.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:WhenIwokeup,Iwasinanemptyroomlyingonabed.
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________练习（三）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Bradywasarecentlyretiredsearchandrescuedog.HewasnothappyandmissedhisownerAlbecauseAlhadgoneoutonarescuemissionwithouthim.Al’snephewStevetookBradyalongwhenheandhisfriendZachwentonaovernighthike.ButsuddenlySteveandZachsmelledsomethingburningandtheyrealizedthatlightninghadsetthewoodsonfire.Wind-blownflamehadleapedfromthetopofonetreetoanother.Thelongdrysummerhadturnedtheforestintoatinderboxandthethunderstormwasn’thelpingmuch.Ithadmorewindandlightningthanrain.ZachpulledSteve’sarm.“Let’sgo!Wecanmakeitbacktotheriverwecrossedtoday.”StevepulledBrady’sleashandtheirheadsdownagainstthestrongfire-wind,theyhurrieddownthepaththeyhadfollowedearlier.Theairwasfullofsmoke，andpinebranchesbrokefromburningtreeswithacrispsound.Stevekepthiseyesontheroute.Alltheyhadtodowastomakeitdowntotheriver…Bradybarkedasharpwarning.Aheadofthemlayadensecurtainofsmokeacrossthepath.They’dnevermakeitthroughthat.Theywouldhavetofindanotherescaperoute.Thedogwaspullingathisleashtryingtodrawthemawayfromthesmoke.ThiswaswhatBradywastrainedtodo,andyetStevewasuneasy.Itseemedtohimtheyweremovingawayfromtheriver.Bradyliftedhisheadandsmelledthesmokywind.Suddenly,thedogranawayanddisappeared.Theboysyelledandshoutedforhim，buthedidn’tcomeback.Theyhadnochoicebuttoleavehimbehind.Heartsick,SteveandZachwentupaslope.Hecouldn’tblameBradyforpanickingandescaping.Hehimselfwantedtoruneventhoughhedidn’thaveacluewhichway.Theyhadn’tgonefarwhentherewasafamiliarbark,andBradycamerunningtowardhim.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1:“Where’veyoubeen?”Stevecried.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Paragraph2:Bradyledthembackdowntheslopeandintothetrees.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________范文赏析练习（一）Paragragh1:Hewavedgoodbyetohisfatherandmovedon.Withgreatcaution,heclimbedoversharprocks,crawledthroughdeadbranchesandavoidedthedangerouscreatures,makinghiswayup.Atonepoint,hestoppedjusttocatchhisbreathwhensuddenly,hestumbledoverarockandfell.Asharppainwentacrosshisleg.“No,Ican’sstop,”hethought,strugglingtohisfeet.Withblooddrippingdownhisleg,helimpedon.Risingstonebystone,hewascloserandclosertotheedge.Paragraph2:Finally,hemadeittothemainroad.Muchtohisdisappointment,notasinglepersonwasinsight.Hewasjustatalosswhattodowhenheheardthedeafeningnoiseofavehicle.“Atruck!”heexclaimedwithexcitement.Gatheringallhisenergy,heyelled,wavingbothhisarms.Thetruckpulledover.Anxiously,Jeffexplainedwhathappened.Thedriverinstantlycalledthelocalrescueteamforhelp.Eventually,Jeff,togetherwithtwomedicalworkers,hurriedbacktothecampsitejustintimetosavehissister.练习（二）Finally,afterstrugglingforaminuteortwo,Istillgotpulledunderwater.ItoldmyselfIshouldnevergiveup.ThenIpulledtheweedagainwithgreatefforts.Theweedfinallybroke.Iswambacktothesurfacetotakeadeepbreath.Isawtwoyoungmeninthecanoes,racingeachother.Iwasexhaustedandshoutedforhelp.Thetwomensawmeandracedtowardsme.Bythetimetheyreachedme,Ihadbeenalreadyunconscious.WhenIwokeup,Iwasinanemptyroomlyingonabed.ItwasnotuntiladoctorcameintotheroomthatIrealizedthatIwasinthehospital.JimmyandBobbytoldmethetwoyoungmenbroughtmetotheshoreandsentmetothehospital.Afterafewminutes,myparentswithhalfangryandhalfworriedfaceswalkedin.MyparentsscoldedmeforrunningoutofthehousesecretlybutwerealsogladthatIwasnotseriouslyinjured.Iwillneverforgetthatterrifyingexperience.NeitherwillIeverwanttoshowoffagain.练习（三）“Where’veyoubeen?”Stevecried.Bradystoppeddirectlyinfrontofhimandstartedpushinghimbacktoward
theslopethey’djustclimbed.WhenStevestilldidn’tgetit,Bradygrabbedtheboy’sjeansandpulledharder.Themessagewasclear,butStevehesitated.OfcourseherememberedwhathisunclehadsaidaboutBradysavinghislife,butthathadbeenalongtimeago.Washestillsharpenoughtogetthemthroughthis?Bradypulledagain,urgently.“OK,bigguy,”Stevedecided.Bradyledthembackdowntheslopeandintothetrees.Severaltimesthebigdogstoppedtogethisescaperoute.Oftenhechangeddirection.Howlongthey’dwalkedStevehadnoidea.HejustheldontoBrady’sleashwithonehandandkeptputtingonefootinfrontoftheother.Hewasalmostnumbwhenheheardthewonderfulsoundofrushingwater.Theriver!Withayelltheboysranunsteadilyforwarduntiltheyjumpedincool,runningwater.“Brady,youdidit!”
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