2022年新高考英语读后续写真题解析07 2020年7月浙江卷（遇熊脱险）

读后续写真题2020年7月浙江卷：遇熊脱险 1试题再现2试题分析3写作思路4范文赏析目录CONTENTS 2020试题再现历年高考英语读后续写真题分析01 Onefall,mywifeElliandIhadasinglegoal:tophotographpolarbears.Wewerestayingataresearchcampoutside“thepolarbearcapitaloftheworld”—thetownofChurchillinManitoba,Canada.Takingpicturesofpolarbearsisamazingbutalsodangerous.Polarbears—likeallwildanimals—shouldbephotographedfromasafedistance.WhenI’mfacetofacewithapolarbear,Ilikeittobethroughacamerawithatelephotolens.Butsometimes,thatiseasiersaidthandone.Thiswasoneofthosetimes.AsElliandIcookeddinner,ayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylakesniffed,andsmelledourgarlicbread.Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcamp,whichwassurroundedbyahighwirefence.Hepulledandbitthewire.Hestoodonhisbacklegsandpushedatthewoodenfenceposts.Terrified,ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Weyelledatthebear,hitpotshard,andfiredblankshotgunshellsintotheair.Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewillscarebearsoff.Notthispolarbearthough—hejustkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepaws(爪子).Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp.Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitsway,butitwouldbe30minutesbeforeitarrived.Makingthebestofthiscloseencounter(相遇),Itooksomepicturesofthebear.ElliandIfearedthefencewouldn’tlastthrough30moreminutesofthebear’spunishment.ThecampmanagersuggestedIusepepperspray.Thesprayburnsthebears’eyes,butdoesn’thurtthem.SoIapproachedouruninvitedguestslowlyand,throughthefence,sprayedhimintheface.Withanangryroar(吼叫),thebearrantothelaketowashhiseyes.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1：Afewminuteslater,thebearcameback.____________________________________________________________________Paragraph2：Attheverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.___________________________________________________________________阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 原文出处2009年国家地理杂志FACETOFACEWITHPOLARBEARSOnefall,mywifeElliandIhadasinglegoal:tophotographpolarbears.Wewerestayingataresearchcampoutside"thepolarbearcapitaloftheworld"---thetownofChurchillinManitoba,Canada.Takingpicturesofpolarbearsisamazingbutalsodangerous.Polarbears-likeallwildanimals---shouldbephotographedfromasafedistance.WhenI'mfacetofacewithapolarbear,Ilikeittobethroughacamerawithatelephotolens.Butsometimes,thatiseasiersaidthandone.Thiswasoneofthosetimes.AsElliandIcookeddinner,ayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylakesniffed,andsmelledourspaghettiandgarlicbread.Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcamp,whichwassurroundedbyahigh,wirefence.Heclawed,bit,andshovedthewiremesh.Hestoodonhishindlegsandpushedatthewoodenfenceposts.Terrified,ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Weyelledatthebear,bangedpots,andfiredblankshotgunshellsintotheair.Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewillscarebearsoff.Notthispolarbear-hejustgrowledandwentbacktotryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepaws.Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp.Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitsway,butitwouldbe30minutesbeforeitarrived.Makingthebestofthiscloseencounter,Isnappedsomepicturesofthebear.ElliandIfearedthefencewouldn'tlastthrough30moreminutesofthebear'spunishment.Thecampmanagersuggestedlusepepperspray.Thesprayburnsthebears'eyes,butdoesn'thurtthem.SoIcreptuptoouruninvitedguestand,throughthefence,sprayedhimintheface.Withanangryroar,thebearranbacktothelaketowashhiseyes. 2020试题分析历年高考英语读后续写真题分析02 回答下面几个问题，检测一下你是否读懂了原材料。Q2:WhatwerethewriterandEllidoingwhenthebearcame?Q1:What’stherelationshipbetweenthewriterandElli?Q3:Whydidthebearcome?Q4:WhatdidthewriterandEllidoseeingthebear?Q5:Howwasthebearwhenitrantothelake?Veryangry.Husbandandwife.Theywerecookingdinner.Becauseofthesmelloffood.Theytriedallthedefenseactionstheyknew,radioedthecampforhelp,andtooksomepicturesofthebear. 研读以下句子，想想它们给我们提供了哪些续写线索？(Para1)Onefall,mywifeElliandIhadasinglegoal:tophotographpolarbears.(Para3)…ayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylakesniffed,andsmelledourgarlicbread.(Para6)Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitsway...(Para7)Thesprayburnsthebears’eyes,butdoesn’thurtthem.Theywereheretotakephotographsofpolarbears.Thewriterandhiswifewerebakingbread.Ahelicopterwastocome.Thebeardidn’tgethurt. 阅读完材料，试着完成下面的故事山吧！Thebearcamebackangryandtheyhadtotrynewideas.1.OpeningThecouplewenttoatowninCanadatotakephotosofpolarbears.Abearcameunexpectedlywhilethecouplewascookingdinner.Frightened,thecoupletriedallthemeansofdefensetheyknewbutnoneofthemworked.Thehelicopterarrivedtotheirrescue.2.Build-up3.Climax4.Resolution5.Ending Onefall,mywifeElliandIhadasinglegoal：tophotographpolarbears.Wewerestayingataresearchcampoutside“thepolarbearcapitaloftheworld”—thetownofChurchillinManitoba,Canada.Takingpicturesofpolarbearsisamazingbutalsodangerous.Polarbears—likeallwildanimals—shouldbephotographedfromasafedistance.WhenI’mfacetofacewithapolarbear,Ilikeittobethroughacamerawithatelephotolens.Butsometimes,thatiseasiersaidthandone.Thiswasoneofthosetimes.原文分析我们有一个梦想：给北极熊拍照。给北极熊拍照很刺激也很危险，预示着侯文可能遇到危险。 AsElliandIcookeddinner,ayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylakesniffed,andsmelledourgarlicbread.Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcamp,whichwassurroundedbyahighwirefence.Hepulledandbitthewire.Hestoodonhisbacklegsandpushedatthewoodenfenceposts.Terrified,ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Weyelledatthebear,hitpotshard,andfiredblankshotgunshellsintotheair.Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewillscarebearsoff.Notthispolarbearthough—hejustkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepaws（爪子）.原文分析故事的开端：饥饿的北极熊被我们的食物吸引想要过来吃食物。看到北极熊面对面，我们害怕，想方设法赶走他们。 Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp.Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitsway,butitwouldbe30minutesbeforeitarrived.Makingthebestofthiscloseencounter（相遇）,Itooksomepicturesofthebear.ElliandIfearedthefencewouldn’tlastthrough30moreminutesofthebear’spunishment.ThecampmanagersuggestedIusepepperspray.Thesprayburnsthebears’eyes,butdoesn’thurtthem.SoIapproachedouruninvitedguestslowlyand,throughthefence,sprayedhimintheface.Withanangryroar（吼叫）,thebearrantothelaketowashhiseyes.原文分析趁机拍照驱赶北极熊的方法。最后北极熊被赶走了。 2020写作思路历年高考英语读后续写真题分析03 研读两段给出句，想想它们给我们提供了哪些续写线索？Para.1:Afewminuteslater,thebearcameback.Para.2:Attheverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.AccordingtoPara.2,thecouplemusthavetriedhardtokeepthemselvessafefromthebear;ifthiswasthecase,whatdidtheydo?Whatwashappeningwhenthehelicopterarrived?Didthehelicoptercometotheirrescue?Whatmighthappennext? Paragraph1：Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp._______________________________________________________________________Paragraph2：Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived._______________________________________________________________________原文分析接下来可通过场景渲染，描写当时令人颤栗惊恐的画面。如果想要进行续写两段的合理衔接，第一段的结尾可描写成“Afterthoroughlyscrutinizingthearea,thebeartrottedforwardafewsteps.”这样可以营造出危急的场景。“我们”看到直升机的到来，感到绝处逢生的喜悦，可以以人物心理描写作为第二段的开头，重点描写喜极而泣的状态，例如“MyheartleapedwithjoyasIknewwewerelikelytobesaved.” AnalysisofthebeginningsentencesPara1:Afewminuteslater,thebearcameback.Para2:Attheverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.Attheverymoment3.atensesituationbetweenus1.ouractionand______feelingsofseeingthehelicopter1.ourresponseand______feelingsafterseeingthebear2.thebear'saction2.howweescaped3.ourfinalthoughtoftheexperiencescaredexcited Afewminuteslater,thebearcameback._________________________________________________________________________________（这只毛茸茸的动物对栅栏发起攻击，栅栏立刻就豁开了一个口子。V-ing作状语）Obviously,thepeppersprayonlymadehimevenmorefurious.Ifearedthegiantwouldteardownthefenceatanyminute._______________________________________________________（虽然我很想用相机给不断逼近的熊拍照，但我还是毫不犹豫地抓起面包向远处扔去。as倒装）However,innotevenaminutedidthehungryanimalfinishthebreadandcomebackagain,makingElliescreamandshakeallthetime.Attheverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.Ithoveredoverthecamp,makingadeafeningnoiseallaroundus.___________________________________________________________（当我们升入空中时，我们看见这只顽固的熊已经向我们营地跑了回去。see…doing）WhenElliandI,safeandsound,gothomeanddevelopedourpictures,wenoticedthebearhadabrokentooth._______________________________________________________________（和人一样，北极熊也有病痛和情绪，也会感到害怕。并列谓语）ElliandIlearnedourlesson:Bewareofabearwithatoothache.根据括号中的提示，补出范文缺失的部分，并关注哪些语言回答了“首句精研”的问题。 Paragraph1Paragraph1：Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.Thebear’sroaringsoundfrightenedus.Wetookthechancetotakephotosofthebear.Thebeartrottedforwardafewsteps Paragraph2Paragraph2：Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.Iwassohappytoseesomeonecometorescueus.Weusedpepperspraytokeepawaywiththebear.Wethrowfoodtothebear.Wewererescued. 句子润色1.吼叫声和尖叫声打破寂静，尖锐刺耳，久久未消。Roarsandscreamspiercedthesilencewithneedle-likeshrillness.piercedthesilenceneedle-likeshrillness 句子润色2.这些噪音把埃利和我吓得脸色发白。The noisesturned Elli andIpalewithhorror.palewithhorror 句子润色3.我担心那个大东西会毁掉我们的整个栅栏。Ifearedthatthegiantwoulddestroyourwhole fence.destroyourwholefence 句子润色4.他不停地吼叫，打破了寂静。Heroaredrepeatedly,andthenoiseshatteredthesilence.Heroaredrepeatedly,shatteringwhatwasleftofthesilence.roaredrepeatedlyshatter句式升级 句子润色5.埃利抓住这个机会给熊拍了几张照片。Elliseizedthisopportunitytotakesomepictures ofthebear.seizedthisopportunitytakesomepicturesofthebear 句子润色6.动物的声音在我们周围回荡。Theanimal’snoisesechoedallaroundus.echo 2020范文赏析历年高考英语读后续写真题分析04 Afewminuteslater,thebearcameback.Thefurrycreaturelaunchedanattackonthefence,instantlyleavinganarrowopeningonit.Obviously,thepeppersprayonlymadehimevenmorefurious.Ifearedthegiantwouldteardownthefenceatanyminute.MuchasIwantedtophotographtheapproachingbearwithmycamera,I,withouthesitation,grabbedthebreadandthrewitfaraway.However,innotevenaminutedidthehungryanimalfinishthebreadandcomebackagain,makingElliscreamandshakeallthetime.Attheverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.Ithoveredoverthecamp,makingadeafeningnoiseallaroundus.Aswewereliftedintotheair,wesawthestubbornbearalreadyheadingbacktoourcamp.WhenElliandI,safeandsound,gothomeanddevelopedourpictures,wenoticedthebearhadabrokentooth.Likehumans,polarbearsfeelpain,haveemotions,andcanbeafraid.ElliandIlearnedourlesson:Bewareofabearwithatoothache. Thefurrycreaturelaunchedanattackonthefence,instantlyleavinganarrowopeningonit.Obviously,thepeppersprayonlymadehimevenmorefurious.Ifearedthegiantwouldteardownthefenceatanyminute.MuchasIwantedtophotographtheapproachingbearwithmycamera,I,withouthesitation,grabbedthebreadandthrewitfaraway.However,innotevenaminutedidthehungryanimalfinishthebreadandcomebackagain,makingElliscreamandshakeallthetime.Afewminuteslater,thebearcameback.Ithoveredoverthecamp,makingadeafeningnoiseallaroundus.Aswewereliftedintotheair,wesawthestubbornbearalreadyheadingbacktoourcamp.WhenElliandI,safeandsound,gothomeanddevelopedourpictures,wenoticedthebearhadabrokentooth.Likehumans,polarbearsfeelpain,haveemotions,andcanbeafraid.ElliandIlearnedourlesson:Bewareofabearwithatoothache.2018年6月浙江卷读后续写——逻辑连贯重复、指代等Attheverymoment,thehelicopterarrived. Afewminuteslater,thebearcameback.Thefurrycreaturelaunchedanattackonthefence,instantlyleavinganarrowopeningonit.Obviously,thepeppersprayonlymadehimevenmorefurious.Ifearedthegiantwouldteardownthefenceatanyminute.MuchasIwantedtophotographtheapproachingbearwithmycamera,I,withouthesitation,grabbedthebreadandthrewitfaraway.However,innotevenaminutedidthehungryanimalfinishthebreadandcomebackagain,makingElliscreamandshakeallthetime.2020年7月浙江卷读后续写——精彩语言动词短语V-ing作状语宾语从句as倒装句倒装句V-ing作状语 Attheverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.Ithoveredoverthecamp,makingadeafeningnoiseallaroundus.Aswewereliftedintotheair,wesawthestubbornbearalreadyheadingbacktoourcamp.WhenElliandI,safeandsound,gothomeanddevelopedourpictures,wenoticedthebearhadabrokentooth.Likehumans,polarbearsfeelpain,haveemotions,andcanbeafraid.ElliandIlearnedourlesson:Bewareofabearwithatoothache.2020年7月浙江卷读后续写——精彩语言V-ing作状语see…doing排比、平行形容词作状语 检测一下你对范文的亮点语块掌握了吗？对……发动进攻随时回到……拆毁在……上空盘旋安然无恙冲洗我们的照片当心……launchanattackonatanyminuteheadbacktoteardownhoveroversafeandsounddevelopourpicturesbewareof 阅读下面的补充语料，积累一些续写素材吧！1.Irritatedbythespray,thebeargreeteduswithahowlofrage.2.Seeingtheapproachingbear,Ithrewoutthebreadwithouthesitation.3.Elliethrewabagoverthefence,whichlandedinabushfaraway.4.Tryaswemight,wecouldnotgetridofthebear.5.Withthebearrunningaway,Isighedwithrelief.6.…tooscaredtomove.7.Extremelypleasedandrelieved,wewaved…8.Theanimaltookafewhesitantstepsbackandeventuallydisappeared…9.Thepictures,takenwithdifficultyandhangingonmywall,remindmeoftherareencounterandnarrowescape.10.Theclose-upswetookweredefinitelyworththedangerweexperienced. 续写赏析Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.Roarsandscreamspiercedthesilencewithneedle-likeshrillness.The noisesturned Elli andIpalewithhorror.Ifearedthatthegiantwoulddestroyourwhole fence.Heroaredrepeatedly,shatteringwhatwasleftofthesilence.Elliseizedthisopportunitytotakesomepictures ofthebear.Theanimal’snoisesechoedallaroundus.Webetrayedourfeelingsbyhuddlingtogether,shiveringwithfear.Afterthoroughlyscrutinizingthearea,thebeartrottedforwardafewsteps.注意环境描写和动作描写。 续写赏析Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.MyheartleapedwithjoyasIknewwewerelikelytobesaved.Elliusedpepper sprayagaintobuyusenoughtime.Butthistimethebearbecamemorealert.Heregardeduswiththemercilessnecessityofhunger,sowethrowallthefoodwehave.Hethenturnedawayandstarteddevouring.Aswewereclimbingtheropeladder,Elliprayedlikethousandtimestoshowthankfulnessofbeing safe andsound.注意动作描写。 THANKYOU