2022年新高考英语读后续写真题解析01 2021年06月浙江卷（“我”的工资）

读后续写真题2021年6月浙江卷:“我”的工资 1试题再现2试题分析3写作思路4范文赏析目录CONTENTS 2021试题再现历年高考英语读后续写真题分析01 Mydad,George,onlyhadaneighthgradeeducation.Aquietman,hedidn’tunderstandmyworldofschoolactivities.Fromage14,heworked.Andhisdad,Albert,tookthemoneymydadearnedandusedittopayfamilyexpenses.Ididn’treallyunderstandhisworldeither:Hewasalivestock(牲畜)trucker,andIthoughtthatIwouldsurpass(超过)anythinghehadaccomplishedbythetimeIwalkedacrossthestageathighschoolgraduation.Summersinthemid-’70swerespentathomeshootingbaskets,hittingabaseball,orthrowingafootball,preparingformyfutureasaquarterback(四分卫)onafootballteam.Inpoorweather,Ireadaboutsportsorpracticedmytrombone(长号).ThesummerbeforemyeighthgradeIwasoneofagroupofboysthataneighboringfarmerhiredtoworkinhisfield.Heexplainedourbasictask,thetractor(拖拉机)firedupandwewereoff,ridingdownthefieldlookingforweedstospray(喷洒)withchemicals.Afterashortway,thefarmerstoppedandpointedataweedwhichwemissed.Thenwebeganagain.Thishappenedoverandover,butwesoonlearnedtoidentifydifferentgrasseslikecockleburs,lamb’s-quarters,foxtails,andthekingofweeds,theprettypurplethistle.Itwastiringwork,butIlookedforwardtothepay,eventhoughIwasn’tsurehowmuchitwouldamountto.阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。试题再现 Athome,mydadsaid,“Ajob’sabigsteptogrowingup.I’mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold.”Mydad’swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasIwished.Mylaborslastedabouttwoweeks,andthefarmersaidtheremightbemorework,butIwasn’tinterested.IdecideditwasnotfairthatIhadtocontributemymoney.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Thepaydayarrivedatlast._____________________________________________________________________Iunderstoodimmediatelywhatmyparentswereworriedabout.__________________________________________阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。试题再现 2021试题分析历年高考英语读后续写真题分析02 材料分析：这篇读后续写以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者高中毕业后，参加农场工作，辛辛苦苦挣到的钱，不情愿贡献给家庭，后来在看到父亲的辛劳之后，理解了父母担心的是自己太过自私而不知奉献，终于想通，并自豪地将自己劳动所得交给父亲的故事。故事容易读懂，开放性却很强，可以发挥的余地很大。 HowtoreadMydad,George,onlyhadaneighthgradeeducation.Aquietman,hedidn’tunderstandmyworldofschoolactivities.Fromage14,heworked.Andhisdad,Albert,tookthemoneymydadearnedandusedittopayfamilyexpenses.Ididn’treallyunderstandhisworldeither:Hewasalivestocktrucker,andIthoughtthatIwouldsurpass(超过)anythinghehadaccomplishedbythetimeIwalkedacrossthestageathighschoolgraduation.Summersinthemid-70swerespentathomeshootingbaskets,hittingabaseball,orthrowingafootball,preparingformyfutureasaquarterbackonafootballteam.Inpoorweather,Ireadaboutsportsorpracticedmytrombone(长号).Who:Mydad,I,aneighboringfarmerWhat:workinthefarmfieldhowtousemoneyIearned HowtoreadThesummerbeforemyeighthgradeIwasoneofagroupofboysthataneighboringfarmerhiredtoworkinhisfield.Heexplainedourbasictask,thetractorfiredupandwewereoff,ridingdownthefieldlookingforweedstospraywithchemicals.Afterashortway,thefarmerstoppedandpointedataweedwhichwemissed.Thenwebeganagain.Thishappenedoverandover,butwesoonlearnedtoidentifydifferentgrasseslikecockleburs,lamb’s-quarters,foxtails,andthekingofweeds,theprettypurplethistle.Itwastiringwork,butIlookedforwardtothepay,eventhoughIwasn'tsurehowmuchitwouldamountto.Athome,mydadsaid,“Ajob’sabigsteptogrowingup.I’mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold.”Mydad’swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasIwished.Mylaborslastedabouttwoweeks,andthefarmersaidtheremightbemorework,butIwasn’tinterested.IdecideditwasnotfairthatIhadtocontributemymoney.When:thesummerbeforemyeighthgradeWhere:aneighboringfarmer'sfieldathome Readfortheplotcluemydadwithlittleeducationdidn'tunderstandeachothermydreamtobeaquarterbackworkonthefarminsummermoneyIearneddosomethingforthehouseholdunfairnottousemyownmoney Readfortheemotionclue:confidentdelighteduninterested TwocluesinthestoryTheplotlineTheemotionlineThesurfacelevelThedeeplevel He_______________myworldofschoolactivities.MyDadMydadisa_____manandheonlyhadan_____gradeeducation.Hestartedtoworkfromage____andhismoneywasspenttopay_______________.Hethoughtthatajob’sabigstepto__________.HewasgladthatIcouldearnmoneyand_________tothehousehold.根据短文内容填空。quieteighth14familydidn’tunderstandexpensesgrowingupcontribute 阅读完材料，试着完成下面的故事山吧！Thepaydayarrivedatlast.HowwouldIcopewithmydepressioncausedbymydad’swords?1.OpeningMydadandIdidn’tunderstandeachother.Ispentmysummervacationbeforetheeighthgradeworkinginmyneighbor'sfieldandlookedforwardtothepay.MyfatherpraisedmesinceIcouldworkforthefamily.Hearingthat,Ifeltunfairnotbeingabletousemyownmoneyandlosttheinterestinmorework.Iunderstoodimmediatelywhatmyparentswereworriedabout.WouldIunderstandmydadfinally?2.Build-up3.Climax4.Resolution5.Ending 2021写作思路历年高考英语读后续写真题分析03 研读两段的给出句，想想它们给我们提供了哪些续写线索？Para1:Thepaydayarrivedatlast.“IdecideditwasnotfairthatIhadtocontributemymoney”mentionedinthetextsuggests“Iwasupset”.Wouldthisfeelingcontinueasthepaydayarrived?WhathappenedinPara.1tomakeme“understandimmediatelywhatmyparentswereworriedabout”inPara.2?Para2:Iunderstoodimmediatelywhatmyparentswereworriedabout.Whatwasmyreactionafterlearningaboutmyparents’worries?“Iunderstoodmydad,contributedmymoneywillingly,learnedaboutshoulderingresponsibilities”allseemgoodmoralsIgotatlast.Howcantheendingbedesignedtoachievesomeorallofthem? 由第一段首句内容Thepaydayarrivedatlast.（工资终于到了。）及时间线索词Thepayday可知，第一段可描写作者的工资到手后，高兴地计划自己用这笔钱，不愿意交给父亲，因此此时应该表达开心→失落→不想把钱交给父亲的场景。设问如下：①Whichwordsorphrasesshouldbefocusedoninthegivensentence?(pay，arrived)②HowdidIfeelwhenIgotpaymentfrommywork?③HowdidIplanthemoneyatfirst?④Whatdidhisfathersay?二、分析续写段首，确定续写方向 根据第二段首句Iunderstandimmediatelywhatmyparentswereworriedabout.（我立刻明白了父母的担心。）及时间线索词immediately可知，本段一定是描写我发现父亲的辛劳→突然明白了父母的焦虑→把钱给父母→自豪的场景。设问如下：⑤Whichwordsorphrasesshouldbefocusedoninthegivensentence?(understand，worriedabout)⑥WhatdidIseeandunderstand?⑦WhatdidIrealizeanddecidetodo?⑧What’stheendofthestory?二、分析续写段首，确定续写方向 Howtowrite[coherent]para1andpara2{逻辑要连贯}Plotandemotionwithappropriatelanguage Howtowrite①由第一段首句内容“拿到工资”。可知，第一段可描写作者的工资到手后，高兴地计划自己用这笔钱，不愿意交给父亲。②由第二段首句内容“父亲让我自己支配工资。”可知，作者惊讶之余，续写内容本着正能量的方向发展，应该为家庭有所付出。pay Howtowrite续写线索：高兴——不情愿——理解——为家庭付出 Howtowrite词汇激活①计划：programme/plan②.奉献：give/devote③发现：see/find Howtowrite情绪类①.不情愿的：unwilling/reluctant②.自豪地：proudly/withpride③.高兴的:bedelightedtodo... 润色句式：段首：Ondoing...,HisfacelitupIsuddenlyrealizedthat... 润色句式：结尾升华：不情愿为家庭付出明白父母的难处愿意付出Itookoutmyownmoneywithprideandwasdelightedtohandittomydad.Hegavemeatighthugwithtearsstreamingdownhischeeks. ②挖掘文章人物的情感Mydad,George,onlyhadaneighthgradeeducation.Aquietman,hedidn’tunderstandmyworldofschoolactivities.…Ididn’treallyunderstandhisworldeither:Hewasalivestocktrucker,andIthoughtthatIwouldsurpass（超过）anythinghehadaccomplished…伏笔指将上文看似无关紧要的人物或事件作为在续写下文时可能出现的人物或事件的预先提示或暗示，目的达到“前有伏笔，后有照应”的效果。读懂开头这两句可知父子两人彼此不理解，这是读后续写的伏笔，表达故事发展从负面情感到积极情感的变化过程（最后两人彼此理解了） …Fromage14.heworked.Andhisdad,Albert,tookthemoneymydadearnedandusedittopayfamilyexpenses.…②挖掘文章人物的情感铺垫指故事高潮的前奏，如环境描写、对话描述等，推动主要人物主要内容的展示，帮助制造悬念和矛盾冲突。这也是读后续写的铺垫，表达作者父亲很小开始工作，而且爷爷拿走作者爸爸所以赚的钱，铺垫了续写的两方面内容：一是作者一家生活很辛苦，二是作者家庭传统，赚钱上交帮助家庭开支 ②挖掘文章人物的情感Summersinthemid-70swerespentathomeshootingbaskets,hittingabaseball,orthrowingafootball,preparingformyfutureasaquarterbackonafootballteam.Inpoorweather,Ireadaboutsportsorpracticedmytrombone（长号）.这也是读后续写的伏笔，本段通过恰当使用一连串的节奏动词，生动具体地描述了主人公对体育的酷爱，展示了极强的画面感，我们据此可以设想作者赚钱后一定会得意洋洋地去计划如何去花钱的故事 ②挖掘文章人物的情感ThesummerbeforemyeighthgradeIwasoneofagroupofboys….Thenwebeganagain.Thishappenedoverandover,…Itwastiringwork,butIlookedforwardtothepay,eventhoughIwasn’tsurehowmuchitwouldamountto.通过beganagain及happenedoverandover，加上情绪的形容词tiring来体现作者不肯出苦耐劳，但为了达成愿望的不得不辛苦的矛盾心理 ②挖掘文章人物的情感Athome,mydadsaid,“Ajob’sabigsteptogrowingup.I’mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold.”Mydad’swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasIwished.为后文作者最终把赚的钱资助家用，最终“长大”埋下了伏笔 ②挖掘文章人物的情感Mylaborslastedabouttwoweeks,andthefarmersaidtheremightbemorework,butIwasn’tinterested.IdecideditwasnotfairthatIhadtocontributemymoney.这里使用精准化动词decided，contribute渲染作者因为要把赚钱交给爸爸，感觉工作起来没有动力，衬托了作者极不情愿交钱给爸爸的心理活动描写，也为后续解决冲突埋下了伏笔 2021范文赏析历年高考英语读后续写真题分析04 Thepaydayarrivedatlast._________________________________________(虽然我口袋里一共有100美元，我还是带着沉重的心情回家了。让步状语从句和with结构).______________________________________________(我多希望用这些钱买一双自己想要很久的新运动鞋。感叹句和省略that的定语从句).Notmuchwassaidoverdinner.However,beforeIwenttobedthatnight,_______________________(然而，晚上睡觉前，我无意中听到从父母房间传来的谈话。时间状语从句和非谓语动词作后置定语).“Samcandowithoutapersonalfootballcoach.Ourbudgetisreallytightthismonth,”saidmymom.“Don’tworry.Ijustneedtodosomeextradriving.Aprofessionalcanhelphimmakegreatprogressinfootball.Youknowtheboy’sfuturedream,”saidmydad.Iunderstoodimmediatelywhatmyparentswereworriedabout._________________(一直误会爸爸的人是我。强调句),nottheotherwayaround.Thenextmorning,IhandedDadmyhard-earnedcash.Itonlyseemedfair.Buthejusttooksomeofit.“That’lldofornowandthanksforhelpingwiththefamilyexpenses,son.Youarereallygrowingup,”hesaid.Afterthetalk,Iwentstraightbacktothefarmerandtooktheextrawork.根据括号中的提示，补出范文缺失的部分，并关注哪些语言回答了“首句精研”的问题。 阅读以下参考范文，核对一下你是否补出范文缺失的部分。Thepaydayarrivedatlast.ThoughIhadatotalof$100inmypocket,Istillwenthomewithaheavyheart.HowIwishedIcouldusethemoneytobuyapairofnewsportsshoesI’dwantedforages.Notmuchwassaidoverdinner.However,beforeIwenttobedthatnight,Ioverheardaconversationcomingfrommyparents’bedroom.“Samcandowithoutapersonalfootballcoach.Ourbudgetisreallytightthismonth,”saidmymom.“Don’tworry.Ijustneedtodosomeextradriving.Aprofessionalcanhelphimmakegreatprogressinfootball.Youknowtheboy’sfuturedream,”saidmydad.Iunderstoodimmediatelywhatmyparentswereworriedabout.Itwasmewhohadmisunderstoodmydadallthetime,nottheotherwayaround.Thenextmorning,IhandedDadmyhard-earnedcash.Itonlyseemedfair.Buthejusttooksomeofit.“That’lldofornowandthanksforhelpingwiththefamilyexpenses,son.Youarereallygrowingup,”hesaid.Afterthetalk,Iwentstraightbacktothefarmerandtooktheextrawork. 2021年6月浙江卷读后续写——逻辑连贯(coherent)ThoughIhadatotalof$100inmypocket,Istillwenthomewithaheavyheart.HowIwishedIcouldusethemoneytobuyapairofnewsportsshoesI’dwantedforages.Notmuchwassaidoverdinner.However,beforeIwenttobedthatnight,Ioverheardaconversationcomingfrommyparents’bedroom.“Samcandowithoutapersonalfootballcoach.Ourbudgetisreallytightthismonth,”saidmymom.“Don’tworry.Ijustneedtodosomeextradriving.Aprofessionalcanhelphimmakegreatprogressinfootball.Youknowtheboy’sfuturedream,”saidmydad.重复、指代、同义替换等(cohesive)WhatdidIfeelwhenIgotthepay?Whatmademeunderstandmyparents’worries?Thepaydayarrivedatlast. Itwasmewhohadmisunderstoodmydadallthetime,nottheotherwayaround.Thenextmorning,IhandedDadmyhard-earnedcash.Itonlyseemedfair.Buthejusttooksomeofit.“That’lldofornowandthanksforhelpingwiththefamilyexpenses,son.Youarereallygrowingup,”hesaid.Afterthetalk,Iwentstraightbacktothefarmerandtooktheextrawork.WhatdidIreactafterknowingmyparents’worries?Iunderstoodimmediatelywhatmyparentswereworriedabout.2021年6月浙江卷读后续写——逻辑连贯(coherent)重复、指代、同义替换等(cohesive) Thepaydayarrivedatlast.ThoughIhadatotalof$100inmypocket,Istillwenthomewithaheavyheart.HowIwishedIcouldusethemoneytobuyapairofnewsportsshoesI’dwantedforages.Notmuchwassaidoverdinner.However,beforeIwenttobedthatnight,Ioverheardaconversationcomingfrommyparents’bedroom.“Samcandowithoutapersonalfootballcoach.Ourbudgetisreallytightthismonth,”saidmymom.“Don’tworry.Ijustneedtodosomeextradriving.Aprofessionalcanhelphimmakegreatprogressinfootball.Youknowtheboy’sfuturedream,”saidmydad.2021年6月浙江卷读后续写——精彩语言让步状语从句with结构省略that的定语从句被动语态现在分词作后置定语形容词搭配时间状语从句感叹句 Iunderstoodimmediatelywhatmyparentswereworriedabout.Itwasmewhohadmisunderstoodmydadallthetime,nottheotherwayaround.Thenextmorning,IhandedDadmyhard-earnedcash.Itonlyseemedfair.Buthejusttooksomeofit.“That’lldofornowandthanksforhelpingwiththefamilyexpenses,son.Youarereallygrowingup,”hesaid.Afterthetalk,Iwentstraightbacktothefarmerandtooktheextrawork.强调句固定搭配合成形容词时间状语从句生动的副词2021年6月浙江卷读后续写——精彩语言 检测一下你对范文的亮点语块掌握了吗？总计心情沉重没有……也行取得巨大进步一直，始终目前最后想要某物很久了倒过来辛苦挣得的钱家庭支出径直走向atotalofdowithoutaheavyheartmakegreatprogressallthetimefornowatlastwantsth.foragestheotherwayaroundhard-earnedcashfamilyexpensesgostraightto高级语块 赏析范文的亮点语句。ThoughIhadatotalof$100inmypocket,Istillwenthomewithaheavyheart.HowIwishedIcouldusethemoneytobuyapairofnewsportsshoesI’dwantedforages.Notmuchwassaidoverdinner.(Para.1)本部分从作者的心理活动和外部情景两方面描写了作者的愤懑情绪。这种直接描写和间接描写穿插使用的方式值得借鉴。亮点评述 THANKYOU