2022年新高考英语读后续写真题解析11 2016年10月浙江卷（吵架出走迷路）

读后续写真题2016年10月浙江卷:吵架出走迷路 1试题再现2试题分析3写作思路4范文赏析目录CONTENTS 2016试题再现历年高考英语读后续写真题分析01 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。(2016年10月浙江高考试题)OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,“I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”andwalkedaway.Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturned示例 around,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.“Tom!”shecried.“Help!”Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecould hearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain. 注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1：Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.____________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2：ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.__________________________________________________________ 2021试题分析历年高考英语读后续写真题分析02 OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,“I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”andwalkedaway.Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.原文分析夫妻吵架，可能跟寻找野营地点意见不一致有关。Jane吵架出走，迷路了。 “Tom!”shecried.“Help!”Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.原文分析情绪描写心里描写 Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.原文分析Jane的自救Jane想寻找回去的办法。 Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.原文分析直升机出现Jane想到有可能吸引直升机的办法。 2021写作思路历年高考英语读后续写真题分析03 句子润色1.一片漆黑立刻笼罩了整个森林。Immediately,anabsolutedarknessruledtheforest.ruledtheforest 句子润色2.简，精疲力竭，害怕，躺在一块石头旁边，想念她遥远的家人。Jane,exhaustedandscared,laydownnearastone,missingherfamilyatadistance.exhaustedandscared注意非谓语动词的用法 句子润色3.所有美好的回忆涌上心头，她忍不住哭了起来：“如果不是我和汤姆吵架，走开，爬到高处，我就不会被困在这个可怕的地方，面对死亡的危险。”Allthefantasticmemorycrowdedinandshecouldn’thelpcrying,“ifIhadn’tquarreledwithTom,walkedawayandclimbedtothehighplace,Iwouldn’tbetrappedinthisawfulplace,confrontedwiththedangerofdying.”Allthefantasticmemorycrowdedinandshecouldn’thelpcrying,“Hadn’tIquarreledwithTom,walkedawayandclimbedtothehighplace,Iwouldn’tbetrappedinthisawfulplace,confrontedwiththedangerofdying.”memorycrowdedinconfrontedwiththedangerofdying虚拟语气的倒装 句子润色4.她后悔万分，醒着，眼睛里噙着晶莹的泪水。Sheregrettedwithendlessanxiety,andthenbecameasleepwithshiningtearsinhereyes.regrettedwithendlessanxietywithshiningtearsinhereyes 句子润色5.尽管她很虚弱，她还是挣扎着站起来，继续寻求帮助。Althoughshewasweak,shecontinuedtosearchforassistance.Weakasshewas,shestruggledtoherfeet,continuingsearchingforassistance.struggledtoherfeetsearchforassistance句式升级 句子润色6.令她非常高兴的是，一架直升飞机一次又一次地从头顶飞过。Tohergreatjoy,ahelicopterwasflyingoverheadagainandagain.TohergreatjoyFlyoverhead 课前检测：1.On_________(see)me,hegavesuchastartofsurprisethathedroppedallthethingsinhishand.2.Hewassosurprised____hestoodthere____hismouthopen.3.Maybe_______(ashame)ofwhathehaddone,hewasabouttoturnaway_____Iseizedhisarmquickly.4.Istared____himforseveralsecondsandbrokethesilence,_________(say)“Roy,trustme.Iamwillingtohelpyou.”5._______________(regret)whathehaddone,hecouldn’tholdbackhistears,bentdownandburstout________(cry)withhisheadburiedinhishands.seeingthatwithashamedwhenatsayingHavingregrettedcrying 6._________(feel)asenseofrelief,Roycan’twait__________(apologize)toourteacherforhisbehavior.7.Infrontoftheoffice,hehesitated____________(knock)atthedoor.8.__________(encourage)byme,heeventuallymadeit.9.Roypulledoutthemoneyandhandedittotheteacher,____________(apologize)forhisbehavior.10.Onceyouroutgoingpersonalityleftadeepimpression_____us.11.Youareblessed_____suchagoodfriend.12._________(step)outoftheoffice,wefeltasenseofreliefwiththesun___________(shine)downoverus.FeelingtoapologizetoknockEncouragedapologizingonwithSteppingshining Read步骤？ThinkWrite1)5W1H2)organization3)language关键词开头语Predicttheplotproperly1)Actions动作2)Feelings情感3)Surroundings环境Getthemainidea 读线索5W1HcontentwhowhenwherewhatWhyJanewaslosttheyquarreledJane,TomoneweekendinJulyintheforestmainidea?OnweekendinJuly,JanewaslostintheforestbecauseshehadquarreledwithTom. Inwhatorderisthematerialdeveloped?OneweekendinJuly,……Asnightwasbeginningtofall,……Janeroseatthebreakoftheday,……But……anditwasgettingdarkagain.ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Time读结构 Withnopathtofollow,Jane……with复合结构……,sheturnedaround,hopingto……分词作状语Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthat……Janerose……,hungryandthirsty.形容词作状语Ifonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephone……固定句式Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.倒装读语言 BeginningClimaxEndingquarrelangrysawhelicopterswasrescued?processlostconfused，tired 构思Para.1:But no more helicopters came and it was dark.续写部分:简当时的感受？简是如何过夜的？简睡着了吗？Para.2:It was daybreak when Jane woke up.续写部分：简获救了吗？谁救了简？怎么救的？她当时的感受？ Paragraph1：Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain._______________________________________________________________________Paragraph2：ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup._______________________________________________________________________原文分析根据下面的推断，本段应该是Jane肚子在森林里度过，根据前文，本段侧重于Jane的内心描写。表明上一段Jane在森林里又独自度过了一天。本段应该是Jane如何被救，根据前文，可能直升机又来了。 Paragraph1Paragraph1：Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Janelaydownnearastone.Sheremindedherhusband’sgooddeed.ShemissedTom.SheregratedtoquarrelwithTom. Paragraph2Paragraph2：ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.helicopterwasflyingoverheadagain.sheflaggedheryellowblouse.shewaseventuallynoticed.Itwasherhusband,theyagreednevertoquarrelagain. A:actions动作的丰富性F:feelings情感表达的多样性S:surroundings恰当运用环境描写Write 2016范文赏析历年高考英语读后续写真题分析04 续写赏析Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Immediately,anabsolutedarknessruledtheforest.Jane,exhaustedandscared,laydownnearastone,missingherfamilyatadistance.Allthefantasticmemorycrowdedinandshecouldn’thelpcrying,“Hadn’tIquarreledwithTom,walkedawayandclimbedtothehighplace,Iwouldn’tbetrappedinthisawfulplace,confrontedwiththedangerofdying.”Sheregrettedwithendlessanxiety,andthenbecameasleepwithshiningtearsinhereyes.注意连接词以及短语的使用。 续写赏析ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Weakasshewas,shestruggledtoherfeet,continuingsearchingforassistance.Tohergreatjoy,ahelicopterwasflyingoverheadagainandagain.Eagerandexcited,sheflaggedheryellowblouseandsparednoefforttoyellsoastoattractothers’attention.Fortunately,shewaseventuallynoticedandbroughtintothehelicopter.注意倒装句的亮点句型的使用。 续写赏析There,shesawherhusband,amanstaringather,wearinganexpressionofrelief.Astightlyaspossible,shehuggedhimandwastoothrilledtosayanything.Besides,theyagreednevertoquarrelagain,determiningtolivethelifetothefullest.注意结尾的升华表达。 THANKYOU