高考英语读后续写亲情类(故事构造“三板斧”)
第一板斧:冲突构造(误会、犯错等)只有冲突才能体会亲情的弥足珍贵。冲突原因大致有:疏于陪伴、理念不合(代沟)、误会等。
1、生气1.我妈妈瞪着我,这是在我有一个重组家庭之前她从未做过的事。“你可以捡起来的。”她说。“那才对。”(本可以,虚拟语气)Mymotherglancedatme.SomethingsheneverdidbeforeIhadastepfamily.“Youcouldhavepickeditup.”shesaid.“Thatwouldhavebeenthekindthingtodo.”2.他生气地握紧拳头,但是弟弟却激动地挥着手。Hefoldedhisfistangrily,buthisyoungerbrotherwavedhishandsexcitedly.3.Jackson试着说什么,但Carter太生气了,他一个字也听不进去。(对比,夸张)Jacksonkeptsayingsomething,butsoangrywasCarterthathecouldn’tevenhearaword.
2、后悔1.我意识到我裙子上的蝴蝶结打得很不好。我本应该请妈妈帮忙的。IrealizedhowpoorlyItiedthestringonmyskirtwhichwasoverleggings.Ishouldhaveaskedmomforhelp.
3、内疚1.一想到我对他所做的一切,遗憾和内疚就像没休止的潮水一样向我袭来。ThinkingaboutwhatIhaddonetohim,regretandguiltoverwhelmedmelikeendlesstides.2.每当我想到亨利湿了的书,我的脸都会变红了。WheneverIthoughtofHenry’swetbook,myfaceturnedred.
4、烦恼WatchingShirley’ssmilefadingaway,Peterfrowned.看着雪莉的微笑渐渐消失,彼得皱起了眉头。(汕头市高三第一学期质量监测)
5、伤心当她望过她三岁妹妹的桌子时,Amanda感觉她的心情像天空一样灰暗。(比喻)Amandafeltasgrayastheskyoutsidewhenshelookedacrossthetableatherthree-year-oldsister.
6、犯错1.Tocoverhisterribleaction(为了掩盖他糟糕的行为,不定式作状语),theterrifiedboygluedthepiecestogetherhastilyandputthevasebacktoitsplace.2.Fearingpunishment(害怕惩罚,现在分词作状语),thesuddenlyinspiredboysaidthataneighbour’scatjumpedinfromthewindowandhecouldn’tdriveitawaynomatterhowhardhetried.3.Glancingatthechocolateswithhesitation,(犹豫地看着着巧克力,非谓语),theboytimidlyraisedhisheadbeforehismother.
第二板斧:冲突化解(解释、道歉、弥补、回忆等)
1、道歉1.“对不起,”他说到,轻轻的摸摸Jackson的头。(2021.4湖丽衢三地联考)“I’msosorry.”hesaid,gentlypettingJackson’shead.2.他放下手,小心翼翼的看了Carter一眼,然后低下了头。(动作链)(2021.4湖丽衢三地联考)Heputdownhishand,glancedcautiouslyatCarterandloweredhishead.3.Tohersurprise,shesmiledatmeandexpressedherapologyforignoringmyloneliness(为她忽略我的孤独道歉)aswellasmydifficultywithEnglishcommunication.(2021年沈阳市一模)的微笑渐渐消失,彼得皱起了眉头。(汕头市高三第一学期质量监测)
2、原谅1.他妈妈把手指放在他嘴唇让他停止说话,在他额头上吻了一下,然后走出了书房。(动作链)(2021广一模)Hismothersilencedhimbygentlyputtingherfingeronhislips,gaveasoftkissonhisforeheadandwalkedoutofthestudy.
3、开心1.“我想给你一个惊喜!”他指向一个包装精美的盒子,眼里闪烁着光芒。(with结构)“Iwantedtosurpriseyou!”hepointedataneatlywrappedboxwithhiseyesgleaming.2.看到他的家人围坐着,和谐地待在一起,卡特感觉到一种幸福感。(doing非谓语)(2021.4湖丽衢三地联考)Seeinghisfamiliessittingtogetherandstayingtogetherharmoniously,Caterfeltasurgeofhappiness.3.欢快的歌唱飘荡在房间里,两姐妹沉浸在音乐的美中。(独立主格)(2020.11温州一模)Cheerfulsingingfloatingintheroom,thetwosistersimmersedthemselvesinthebeautyofthemusic.
4、感激1.ButforHenry’shelp,Iwouldn’thavefinishedmyperformancesmoothly.如果没有亨利的帮助,我就不会顺利地完成我的演出了(2021年南通市二模)。2.Ilookedather,tearsofloveandgratitudewelling(well)upinmyeyes.(独立主格结构)我看着她,爱和感激的泪水在我的眼中涌起。(2021年沈阳市一模)3.Afterwards,itwasmyturntogiveasmalllecture,inwhichIexpressedmysinceregratitudetomymomandfriends,bowing(bow)tothemseveraltimes.(定语从句,非谓语)之后,轮到我做一个小型讲座,在会上我向妈妈和朋友表达了真诚的感谢,多次向他们鞠躬
5、回忆1.在这时,毫无预料地,Carter突然想起Billy躺在地上哭的回忆,一直在他脑海回旋,提醒着他一些事情。(无灵主语句;doing非谓语;and连接两个同时进行的动作)(2021.4湖丽衢三地联考)Atthatmoment,unexpectedly,thememoryofthesightofBillycryingonthegroundoccurredtoCarter,hoveringinhismindandremindinghimsomething.2.看着Jackson,Carter忍不住想象他的弟弟花整天小心涂好那辆车的情景。(2021.4湖丽衢三地联考)LookingatJackson,Cartercouldn’thelpimagininghislittlebrotherspendingthewholedaycarefullypaintingthecar.3.“我只希望我知道如何帮助她,”阿曼达自言自语,想起李惊恐的眼睛(2020.11温州一模)“IjustwishIknewhowtohelpher,”Amandasaidtoherself,thinkingofLi’sfrightenedeyes(想到Li害怕的双眼).
第三板斧:亲情升华(诚实、珍惜等)
1.Fromthenon,thethreechocolatesrangthealarminhishearteverytimeheintendedtolie,remindinghimtobehonest提醒他要诚实(非谓语).(2021广一模)2.Inoddedfirmly,knowingaflowerofkindnessandfriendshipbegantoblossom(善良和友谊之花开放)inbothofourhearts.(2021年南通市二模)
3.ThisexperiencetransformedmyattitudetowardsHenryandourrelationshiphasalsobeenharmonious(我们的关系变得和谐)sincethen.(2021年南通市二模)4.正是亨利的善良让我感受到了我们家庭的温暖。我会用心珍惜它的。(2021年南通市二模)ItwasHenry’skindnessthatmademefeelthewarmthfromourfamily.Iwilltreasureitwithallmyheart.
亲情类场景描写(七大关系)
一、母子关系
1.Doyoumeanthateveflowerhasitsownbeautyaskedmymotherthoughtfully.Inoddedwithouthesitation,asifasecondwastedcoulddeprivethedandelionsoftheilife."Thesametoyou,"sheadded,hervoicesoft""Noteveryonecanbearose,anditisalsoanhonortobeadandelion."Knowingthatmymotherhadrealizedmypain,ItookoffthemaskthatIhadwornforthewholelunchtimeandpouredoutmyuneaseheartilyShelistenedtomepatientlyandpattedmeonthebacktenderly.Suddenlyshestopped,asiftosaysomething.“你的意思是那朵夜花有它自己的美丽吗?”妈妈沉思地问。我毫不犹豫地点点头,仿佛一秒钟的浪费就能剥夺蒲公英的生命。“你也一样,”她又说,“不是每个人都能成为一朵玫瑰,成为蒲公英也是一种荣誉。”我知道妈妈已经意识到了我的痛苦,我摘下了我整个午餐时间戴的面具,尽情地倾诉我的不安。她耐心地听着我的话,温柔地拍了拍我的背。突然,她停了下来,好像在说什么。
"Butyouwillbeabeautifulnarrator."Momsaid.SheremindedmeofhowfluentlyIcoulddelivermypartathome.ItwasatthattimethatIunderstoodthatmaybeIwasmoresuitableforarolebackstagelikeanarrator.Fromthenon,Ipracticedmylinesheartandsoulwithmymotheratlunchtimeforweeks.AndtheperformanceapproachedultimatelyStandingbackstage,nervousnesscamefloodinginme.Whatencouragedmetoovercomeitwastheinspirationfromthebeautifulyellowdandelions.Theperformancethatnightwaseventuallyabigsuccess.Hearingthethunderousapplause,Itookprideinmyroleandfirmlybelievedthatevenadandelionhaditsownbeauty.“但你将会成为一个美丽的叙述者。”妈妈说。她让我想起了我在家里可以多么流利地扮演我的角色。正是在那个时候,我明白也许我更适合像叙述者这样的角色。从那时起,我在午餐时间和母亲一起练习了好几周。演出最终站在后台,紧张情绪涌上心头。鼓励我克服它的是灵感来自于美丽的黄色蒲公英。当晚的演出最终大获成功。听到雷鸣般的掌声,我为自己的角色感到自豪,坚信甚至蒲公英也有自己的美。
二、父子关系
Theman,seeingthattheboyalreadyhadmoneystartedtogetangryagain."Howcanyoubesoselfish?Whydoyouwantmoremoneysinceyoualreadyhavethesebills?"thefathercouldhardlyholdhisangerbackandinquiredwithtwoeyebrowsknittedintoone.Withheld-backtearsinhiseyes,thelittleboyslowlyandcarefullycountedouthismoney,andthenlookedupathisfather,replying,"BecauseIdidn'thaveenoughbefore,butnowIdo."withbigblueeyes]shiningwithtears.那个男人,看到那个男孩已经有钱了,又开始生气了。“你怎么这么自私?既然你已经有了这些账单,你为什么还要更多的钱?”父亲几乎不能忍住他的愤怒,用两个眉毛编织成一个。小男孩含着泪水,慢慢地小心地数出他的钱,然后抬头看着他的父亲,回答说:“因为我以前没有足够的钱,但现在我有了。”带着蓝色的大眼睛]眼泪闪闪发光。
Notknowingwhathissonmeant,thefatherjuststoodthere,waitingforhisboy'sexplanation.Wipingawayhistearsandaninnocentsmileappearingonhisface,theboyrequestedinarelievedvoice,"Daddy,Ihave$20now.CanIbuyanhourfromyou?Pleasecomehomeearlytomorrow.Iwanttohavedinnerwithyou."Hearingtheboy'ssmallbutsincererequest,thefathercouldn'tholdbackhistears.Realizinghewastoobusywithhisbusinesstosparesometimewithhisbelovedones,hegatheredhissonintohisarmsandapologizedagainandagain,"Sorry.,andIpromiseI'Ilbebackearlytomorrow."他不知道儿子的意思,父亲就站在那里等着儿子的解释。男孩擦去眼泪,脸上露出天真的微笑,用松了一口气的声音问道:“爸爸,我现在有$20了。我能从你那里买到一个小时吗?请明天早点回家。我想和你共吃晚饭。”听到男孩小而真诚的请求,父亲忍不住流住了眼泪。意识到自己忙了,没有时间和心爱的人在一起,他把儿子抱在怀里,一遍又一遍地道歉:“抱歉。我保证明天早点回来。”
三、父女关系
Tomysurprise,Mollygavethebagtomeonceagainseveraldayslater.Thesamebagandsamestuffinside.Ifeltforgiven,andtrustedandloved.Andalittlemorecomfortablewearingthetitleoffather.Overseveralmonths,thebagwiththenoteinwentwithmefromtimetotime.IntimeMollyturnedherattentiontootherthings.Shefoundothertreasures,lostinnewgames,andgrewup.Iwasleftholdingthebag.Shegaveittomeonemorningandneveraskedforitsreturn.AndsoIhaveitstill.令我吃惊的是,几天后莫莉又把这个包给了我。同样的袋子和同样的东西。我感到被宽恕,被信任和被爱。穿上父亲的头衔会更舒服一点。几个月多了,那个带着纸条的包不时地跟着我走。不久,莫莉把注意力转向了其他事情。她还发现了其他在新游戏中丢失的宝藏,然后长大了。我一直拿着袋子。一天早上,她把它给了我,但从来没有要求让它回来。所以我还在那里。
四、姐妹关系
Alilookedupandsawtheotherboysrushingahead.Refusingtogiveupatthispoint,hejumpedtohisfeetandranasfastashecould.Hedashedacrossthefinishlineandwonthefourthprize.Thinkinghewouldlethersisterdown,Alicouldn'thelpsobbing.JustthenhesuddenlyheardtheannouncementfromthebroadcastthathewonthethirdprizeastherunnerwhocollidedwithAliwasdisqualifiedforbreakingtherule.Holdingtheshoesclosetohischestduringtheawardceremony,Alifeltoverjoyedandrelievedasheeventuallywontheshoesforhissister.阿里抬起头,看到其他男孩冲在前面。在这一点上,他拒绝放弃,他跳起来,跑得尽可能快。他冲过终点线,获得了四等奖。以为他会让她妹妹失望,阿里忍不住抽泣起来。就在这时,他突然听到广播中宣布,他赢得了三等奖,因为与阿里相撞的跑步者因违反规则而被取消资格。在颁奖典礼上,阿里把鞋子紧贴在胸前,感到欣喜若狂,松了一口气,因为他最终为他的妹妹赢得了鞋子。
五、兄弟之间
Therewasnofenceatall.Itwasabridge!Abridgestretchedfromonesideofthecreektotheother!Johnwasabouttocomplainabouteverything,whenhefoundtheneighbor,hisyoungbrother,wascomingacrossthebridge,hishandsoutstretched."YouarequiteafellowtobuildthisbridgeafterallIhavesaidanddone,"saidJohn'sbrother.Thetwobrothersmetinthemiddle,takingeachother'shandandhuggingeachother.根本没有栅栏。是一座桥!一座桥从小溪的一边延伸到另一边!约翰正要抱怨一切,当他发现邻居,他的弟弟,正在过桥,他的手伸出。约翰的哥哥说:“我说了这么多,你真是个造桥的好朋友。两兄弟在中间相遇,牵着对方的手,互相拥抱。
六、祖孙之间
Theenvelopewasfromgrandma.Shehadknownhowsickshewas.IntheenvelopewasenoughmoneytopayfortherestofmycollegeyearandarequestthatItakepianolessonsinhermemory.Movedtotears,Ideterminedtolearnpianolessonsbyheartandmymemoryofgrandmamotivatedmetopracticedayandnight.Idon'tthinkthepianopiecewasevenplayedwithmorefeelingthanitwasmysecondyearincollege.Now,yearslater,whenIwalkbyapiano,IsmileandthinkofGrandma.Sheisplayingthepianosmilinglyinheaven,Iamsure.那个信封是从奶奶那里寄来的。她已经知道自己病得有多厉害了。信封里有足够的钱来支付我大学剩下的时间,并要求我为她上钢琴课。我哭了,决心用心学钢琴,对奶奶的记忆激励我日夜练习。我甚至不认为这首钢琴曲比我上大学的第二年更有感情。几年后,当我走过钢琴时,我微笑着想起了奶奶。我相信,她是在天堂微笑着弹钢琴的。
七、夫妻之间
TearsofhappinesspoureddownSusan'scheeks.Withtearsofhappinessinhereyes,shestoodmotionlesslyfacingtheoppositesideofthestreet,asifgazingatsomeone.Althoughshecouldn'tphysicallyseehim,shedefinitelyfeltMark'spresence.Susanthoughtshewasactuallylucky,forhehadgivenheragiftmorepowerfulthansight,agiftoflovethatcanbringlightwherethereisdarkness.JustasMarkgrewalittleworried,hesawhiswifebreakintoaradiantsmileandblowakisstohisdirection.Finallyshefoundbackherself,blindbutattractiveandconfidentassheusedtobe.幸福的泪水顺着苏珊的脸颊流下来。她眼里含着幸福的泪水,一动不动地站在街道对面,仿佛在凝视着某人。虽然她看不到他的身体,但她绝对感觉到马克的存在。苏珊认为她实际上是幸运的,因为他给了她一份比视力更强大的礼物,一份爱的礼物,可以在黑暗中带来光明。就在马克有点担心的时候,他看到他的妻子露出灿烂的微笑,朝他的方向吹了一个吻。最后,她发现自己回来了,她失明了,但像以前一样有吸引力和自信。