2022年新高考英语读后续写真题解析04 2021年3月八省联考（好心的墨西哥家庭）

读后续写真题2021年1月八省联考好心的墨西哥家庭 1试题再现2试题分析3写作思路4范文赏析目录CONTENTS 2021试题再现历年高考英语读后续写真题分析01 Duringthispastyear,I’vehadthreeinstancesofcartrouble.Eachtimethesethingshappened,Iwassickofthewaymostpeoplehadn’tbotheredtohelp.Oneofthosetimes,IwasonthesideoftheroadforclosetothreehourswithmybigJeep.Iputsignsinthewindows,bigsignsthatsaidNEEDAJACK(千斤顶),andofferedmoney.Nothing.RightasIwasabouttogiveup,aMexicanfamilyinasmalltruckpulledover,andthefatherboundedout.Hesizedupthesituationandcalledforhisdaughter,whospokeEnglish.HeconveyedthroughherthathehadajackbutthatitwastoosmallfortheJeep,sowewouldneedsomethingtosupportit.Thenhegotasaw(锯子)fromthetruckandcutasectionoutofabiglogonthesideoftheroad.Werolleditoverandputhisjackontop,andwewereinbusiness.Istartedtakingthewheeloff,andthen,ifyoucanbelieveit,Ibrokehistireiron.Noworries:Hehandedittohiswife,andshewasgoneinaflashdowntheroadtobuyanewtireiron.Shewasbackin15minutes.Wefinishedthejob,andIwasaveryhappyman.Thetwoofusweredirtyandsweaty.Hiswifepreparedapotofwaterforustowashourhands.Itriedtoputa$20billintheman’shand,buthewouldn’ttakeit,soinsteadIwentuptothetruckandgaveittohiswifeasquietlyasIcould.Iaskedthelittlegirlwheretheylived.Mexico,shesaid.TheywereinOregonsoMommyandDaddycouldworkonafruitfarmforthenextfewweeks.Thentheywouldgohome.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。WhenIwasabouttosaygoodbye,thegirlaskedifI’dhadlunch.__________________________Aftertheyleft,IgotintomyJeepandopenedthepaperbag.______________________________阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 2021试题分析历年高考英语读后续写真题分析02 回答以下问题，检测一下你是否读懂了原材料。1.Whoarethemaincharacters?I:apersonwhowassickofcartroubleAMexicanfamily:theparentswhocouldnotspeakEnglish,thedaughterwhocouldspeaklimitedEnglish2.Whatistheplot?Mycarbrokedownattheroadside.→AMexicanfamilyofferedtheirhelp.→Ipaid$20asagestureofgratitude.3.Howdidmyfeelingschange?Iusedtofeeldisappointedinothers’indifference.→IcaughttheglimpseofhopeatthearrivaloftheMexicanfamily.→Ibecamehappyandgratefulaftermycarwasfinallyfixed. StorywhenwherewhowhathowwhyDuringthispastyearonthesideoftheroadIAMexicanfamily(father,mother,adaughter)AMexicanfamilyhelpedmefixmycarandrefusedmy20dollars.Tohelpmeout.一、准确理解材料，理清人物事件1.浅层信息理解首先要审题：⑴体裁：_______；⑵人称：_______________；⑶主体时态：_______________。记叙文第一、三人称一般过去时 2.深层信息理解①理清故事的发展线索（How）段落及时间线索Behaviors（行为）Topic（段意）Para1（duringthispastyear）cartrouble，hadn’tbotheredto，putsigns，hadn’tbotheredto，putsigns，offered，pulledover，boundedoutStuckontheroadduetocartrouble,IcameacrossaMexicanfamily,whostoppedtohelpme. 段落及时间线索Behaviors（行为）Topic（段意）Para2&3（whenthefamilycametohelp）sizedup,calledfor，smallfortheJeep，support，gotasaw，cut，puthisjack，buyanewtireiron，finishedThefatherhelpedmefixmycar.Para4（afterfixingthecar）weredirtyandsweaty，prepared，puta$20billin，gaveittohiswife，workonafruitfarmDespitethefather’srefusal,Iinsistedonpayingthisfamily20dollars. Duringthispastyear,I'vehadthreeinstancesofcartrouble.Eachtimethesethingshappened,Iwassickofthewaymostpeoplehadn'tbotheredtohelp.Oneofthosetimes,IwasonthesideoftheroadforclosetothreehourswithmybigJeep.Iputsignsinthewindows,bigsignsthatsaidNEEDAJACK（千斤顶）,andofferedmoney.Nothing.RightasIwasabouttogiveup,aMexicanfamilyinasmalltruckpulledover,andthefatherboundedout.wasfedupwithpeople’scoldness/indifferencedisappointedhopeful②挖掘文章人物的情感 Hesizedupthesituationandcalledforhisdaughter,whospokeEnglish.HeconveyedthroughherthathehadajackbutthatitwastoosmallfortheJeep,sowewouldneedsomethingtosupportit.Thenhegotasaw（锯子）fromthetruckandcutasectionoutofabiglogonthesideoftheroad.Werolleditoverandputhisjackontop,andwewereinbusiness.Istartedtakingthewheeloff,andthen,ifyoucanbelieveit,Ibrokehistireiron(撬车胎棒).Noworries:Hehandedittohiswife,andshewasgoneinaflashdowntheroadtobuyanewtireiron.Shewasbackin15minutes.Wefinishedthejob,andIwasaveryhappyman.consideratehappy②挖掘文章人物的情感 Thetwoofusweredirtyandsweaty.Hiswifepreparedapotofwaterforustowashourhands.Itriedtoputa$20billintheman'shand,buthewouldn'ttakeit,soinsteadIwentuptothetruckandgaveittohiswifeasquietlyasIcould.Iaskedthelittlegirlwheretheylived.Mexico,shesaid.TheywereinOregonsoMommyandDaddycouldworkonafruitfarmforthenextfewweeks.Thentheywouldgohome.grateful②挖掘文章人物的情感 整合本篇的情节和情感线索：去年作者汽车出现了三次故障，大多数人都懒得帮忙，作者对此感到很厌烦。有一次，他的汽车又出故障了。他在路边求助了接近3个小时，没有人停下来帮忙。但是就在打算放弃的时候，一个过路的墨西哥家庭停下来，提供了帮助。 阅读完材料，试着完成下面的故事山吧！Atthetimeofparting,thedaughteraskedifIhadlunch.1.OpeningMycarbrokedownattheroadsideforalmostthreehours.AMexicanfamilypulledoverandofferedtheirhelp.Igavea$20billtothefatherasagestureofthank-youbutwasrejected.Islippedthemoneytothemother.Aftertheyleft,Iopenedthepaperbagandwasdeeplytouched.2.Build-up3.Climax4.Resolution5.Ending 2021写作思路历年高考英语读后续写真题分析03 Para.1:WhenIwasabouttosaygoodbye,thegirlaskedifI’dhadlunch.研读两段给出句，想想它们给我们提供了哪些续写线索？Q1:Whoarethemaincharactersinthisparagraph?(Iandthegirl)Q2:HowdidIrespondtothegirl’squestion?WhatfeelingsdidIhavewhenhearingthegirl’squestion?Surprised?Delighted?Embarrassed?Q3:Whogavethepaperbag(mentionedinPara.2)tome?Q4:WhatdidIdobeforetheyleft(mentionedinPara.2)?→在续写第一段时，要兼顾第二段给出句提示的信息，进行相应描述，以确保段与段之间的衔接性。→在描写“我”的对话、动作和心理活动时，须合情合理，与上文描述的人物性格以及语境保持一致。建议平时多积累描写各类情绪的亮点词块以及句式。 Para.2:Aftertheyleft,IgotintomyJeepandopenedthepaperbag.研读两段给出句，想想它们给我们提供了哪些续写线索？Q5:Whatwascontainedinthepaperbag?Food?The$20bill?Anote?→留意原文中出现的细节，例如可以放入那张20美元钞票，更能体现出这家人的善良，有助于升华主题。Q6:WhatdidIdoafterseeingthecontentsofthepaperbag?Q7:HowdidIfeel?Moved?Grateful?Guilty?Q8:Whatimpactdidthisexperiencehaveonme?WillIchangemyattitudetowardstheworld?How?→在续写结尾段时，建议回看首段，形成首尾呼应。例如本文开篇提及Iwassickofthewaymostpeoplehadn’tbotheredtohelp，但经过这件事后，“我”变了，我决定要像墨西哥一家人一样，传递善举，更凸显并升华了“善良”这一主题，余韵十足。 借助文本资源，创设续写情节根据六要素和自己的想象，借助文本资源，创设续写两段故事的情节。[开端]问我是否吃过午饭。[故事发展]吃午餐——我拿钱买水果——母亲送纸袋。[高潮]感谢——回家。[结局]发现东西——感悟。 2021范文赏析历年高考英语读后续写真题分析04 根据括号中的提示，补出范文缺失的部分，并关注哪些语言回答了“首句精研”的问题。WhenIwasabouttosaygoodbye,thegirlaskedifI’dhadlunch.___________________(直到那时，我才听见我的肚子咕咕叫。notuntil引导的倒装句式)Shakingmyheadawkwardly,Isaid,“Icangetlunchsomewhereonmywayback,”____________________(不想再给这家热心人造成麻烦。动词-ing作状语)“Waitaminute,sir,”thegirlstammeredinbrokenEnglish,____________________(察觉到了我的尴尬。动词-ing作状语)Inafewseconds,thegirlturnedup,withapaperbagheldtightlyinherhand.“Hereyouare,”shehandedittome.Ithankedthefamily,___________________________________(之后我们互相道别，相互致以最美好的祝愿。使用with)Aftertheyleft,IgotintomyJeepandopenedthepaperbag.InsideweresomeMexicanfamily-madefoodandthe$20bill.IsatinmycareatingthebestfoodI’deverhad,andIjuststartedtocry.WhileIwaswaitingforhelpbeforeImetthefamily,Ihatedthisworld.____________________(这是第一次我没有讨厌车出了故障，使用Itwasthefirsttime句型)andfeltluckytohaveseenabeautifulheart.___________________________________(从此之后，不论何时遇到需要帮助的人，我都会像墨西哥一家人一样，不遗余力地提供帮助。使用whenever+动词-ing) WhenIwasabouttosaygoodbye,thegirlaskedifI’dhadlunch.NotuntilthendidIhearmystomachrumbling.Shakingmyheadawkwardly,Isaid,“Icangetlunchsomewhereonmywayback,”notwantingtobotherthewarmed-heartedfamilyanymore.“Waitaminute,sir,”thegirlstammeredinbrokenEnglish,sensingmyembarrassment.Inafewseconds,thegirlturnedup,withapaperbagheldtightlyinherhand.“Hereyouare,”shehandedittome.Ithankedthefamily,andthenwewavedgoodbyewithbestwishesforeachother.Aftertheyleft,IgotintomyJeepandopenedthepaperbag.InsideweresomeMexicanfamily-madefoodandthe$20bill.IsatinmycareatingthebestfoodI’deverhad,andIjuststartedtocry.WhileIwaswaitingforhelpbeforeImetthefamily,Ihatedthisworld.ItwasthefirsttimeIhadnotbeensickofmycartroubleandfeltluckytohaveseenabeautifulheart.Fromthenon,whenevermeetingpeopleinneed,IhavesparednoefforttohelpthemlikethatMexicanfamily.阅读以下参考范文，检测一下你是否补出范文缺失的内容。版本一 范文赏析——语言亮点WhenIwasabouttosaygoodbye,thegirlaskedifI’dhadlunch.NotuntilthendidIhearmystomachrumbling.Shakingmyheadawkwardly,Isaid,“Icangetlunchsomewhereonmywayback,”notwantingtobotherthewarmed-heartedfamilyanymore.“Waitaminute,sir,”thegirlstammeredinbrokenEnglish,sensingmyembarrassment.Inafewseconds,thegirlturnedup,withapaperbagheldtightlyinherhand.“Hereyouare,”shehandedittome.Ithankedthefamily,andthenwewavedgoodbyewithbestwishesforeachother.Aftertheyleft,IgotintomyJeepandopenedthepaperbag.InsideweresomeMexicanfamily-madefoodandthe$20bill.IsatinmycareatingthebestfoodI’deverhad,andIjuststartedtocry.WhileIwaswaitingforhelpbeforeImetthefamily,Ihatedthisworld.ItwasthefirsttimeIhadnotbeensickofmycartroubleandfeltluckytohaveseenabeautifulheart.Fromthenon,whenevermeetingpeopleinneed,IhavesparednoefforttohelpthemlikethatMexicanfamily.倒装句最高级强调倒装句使用连词加强语气固定句式以对话的形式推动情节发展，让文章更生动活泼，增加语境的真实性 WhenIwasabouttosaygoodbye,thegirlaskedifI’dhadlunch.NotuntilthendidIhearmystomachrumbling.Shakingmyheadawkwardly,Isaid,“Icangetlunchsomewhereonmywayback,”notwantingtobotherthewarmed-heartedfamilyanymore.“Waitaminute,sir,”thegirlstammeredinbrokenEnglish,sensingmyembarrassment.Inafewseconds,thegirlturnedup,with①apaperbagheldtightlyinherhand.“Hereyouare,”shehandedittome.Ithankedthefamily,andthen②wewavedgoodbyewithbestwishesforeachother.Aftertheyleft,IgotintomyJeepandopenedthepaperbag.InsideweresomeMexicanfamily-madefoodandthe$20bill.IsatinmycareatingthebestfoodI’deverhad,andIjuststartedtocry.WhileIwaswaitingforhelpbeforeImetthefamily,Ihatedthisworld.ItwasthefirsttimeIhadnotbeensickofmycartroubleandfeltluckytohaveseenabeautifulheart.Fromthenon,whenevermeetingpeopleinneed,IhavesparednoefforttohelpthemlikethatMexicanfamily.范文赏析——逻辑连贯、自然过渡段落连贯性：①②与下段首句相呼应，第一段必须提及paperbag以及离别，才能保持段落与段落之间的连贯性。 WhenIwasabouttosaygoodbye,thegirlaskedifI’dhadlunch.NotuntilthendidIhearmystomachrumbling.Shakingmyheadawkwardly,Isaid,“Icangetlunchsomewhereonmywayback,”notwantingtobotherthewarmed-heartedfamilyanymore.“Waitaminute,sir,”thegirlstammeredinbrokenEnglish,sensingmyembarrassment.Inafewseconds,thegirlturnedup,withapaperbagheldtightlyinherhand.“Hereyouare,”shehandedittome.Ithankedthefamily,andthenwewavedgoodbyewithbestwishesforeachother.Aftertheyleft,IgotintomyJeepandopenedthepaperbag.InsideweresomeMexicanfamily-madefoodandthe$20bill.IsatinmycareatingthebestfoodI’deverhad,andIjuststartedtocry.WhileIwaswaitingforhelpbeforeImetthefamily,Ihatedthisworld.ItwasthefirsttimeIhadnotbeensickofmycartroubleandfeltluckytohaveseenabeautifulheart.Fromthenon,whenevermeetingpeopleinneed,IhavesparednoefforttohelpthemlikethatMexicanfamily.范文赏析——逻辑连贯、自然过渡句子连贯性：通过使用状语（with介词短语、动词-ing）以及连接词/短语（and,then,while,fromthenon）等，让句子结构更紧凑，信息更丰富。 WhenIwasabouttosaygoodbye,thegirlaskedifI’dhadlunch.NotuntilthendidIhearmystomachrumbling.Shakingmyheadawkwardly,Isaid,“Icangetlunchsomewhereonmywayback,”notwantingtobotherthewarmed-heartedfamilyanymore.“Waitaminute,sir,”thegirlstammeredinbrokenEnglish,sensingmyembarrassment.Inafewseconds,thegirlturnedup,withapaperbagheldtightlyinherhand.“Hereyouare,”shehandedittome.Ithankedthefamily,andthenwewavedgoodbyewithbestwishesforeachother.Aftertheyleft,IgotintomyJeepandopenedthepaperbag.InsideweresomeMexicanfamily-madefoodandthe$20bill.IsatinmycareatingthebestfoodI’deverhad,andIjuststartedtocry.WhileIwaswaitingforhelpbeforeImetthefamily,Ihatedthisworld.ItwasthefirsttimeIhadnotbeensickofmycartroubleandfeltluckytohaveseenabeautifulheart.Fromthenon,whenevermeetingpeopleinneed,IhavesparednoefforttohelpthemlikethatMexicanfamily.结合原文、合理推测、升华主题首尾呼应凸显主题范文赏析——首尾呼应、升华主题此处与上文的人物特征描写保持一致，墨西哥女孩会说一些简单的英语。 厌倦……besickof费心去做某事bothertodosth.迅速评估周围的环境sizeupthesituation通过……传达conveythroughsb./sth.听到我的肚子咕咕叫hearmystomachrumbling不遗余力做某事sparenoefforttodosth.瞬间消失，一闪而过begoneinaflash检测一下你对范文的亮点语块掌握了吗？ 阅读下面的补充语料，积累一些续写素材吧！Para. 1I nodded my headin embarrassment.A flush of embarrassmentcame to my cheeks.Smiling awkwardly,I admitted feeling a little bit hungry.Thinking I hadtroubled the family too much, I politely declined …Thegirlreturnedwithapaperbagandhandedittome.“Hereyouare,”thegirlsaid,handingapaperbagtome.Iexpressedmygratitudeagainandagain…Iwatchedthetruckdisappearintothedistance. 阅读下面的补充语料，积累一些续写素材吧！Para.2NotuntilIpickedthehamburgerupdidIspotthe$20bill…HardlyhadIswalloweditwhen…SittinginmyJeep,greatlymovedandspeechless,Itookabiteof…IwasmovedtotearswhenIwaschewingthefood.Itriedtoholdbackthetearsinmyeyes.Ifelttearsblurringmyvision.Thisfamily,undoubtedlypoorerthan…tookacoupleofhoursoutoftheirdaytohelpastranger…Fromthatdayon,everytimeImeetsomeonewhoneedshelp,Ialwaysreachouttothem.…hopingtopassonthekindnesstheMexicanfamilyofferedme.Iwouldgiveothersahelpinghandifnecessary. 版本二 WhenIwasabouttosaygoodbye,thegirlaskedifI'dhadlunch.Herwordsremindedmeofmyemptystomach.I'mashamedtosaywedidn't.①Shequicklybroughtmesomesolidfoodandthenledustothebackoftheirtruckwithloadsoffruitsinit.②ItsuddenlyoccurredtomethatIcouldbuyasmuchfruitaspossibletoexpressmythanksinsteadofgivingmoney.SoIaskedthelittlegirlifIcouldbuysomefruit.Shenoddedwithsmilebutthemanandhiswifeimmediatelypassedmealargebottleoffreshfruitjuicy.③ItwasjustatthismomentthatIcannothelpshowingmyappreciationfortheirgenerosityandkindness.④WhenIwasabouttoleave,thegirl’smotherwarmlysentmeapaperbag.NeverhadIseensokindafamilybefore.Ishowedmygreatthanksagainfromthebottomofmyheartandwewavedgoodbyetoeachother. Aftertheyleft,IgotintomyJeepandopenedthepaperbag.⑤Tomysurprise,insidewasthe$20billIgavetothemotherjustnow.⑥Atthesametime,therewasanotewrittenbyagirl,whichread“Wehaveonlydonesomethingweshould.Thanksforhavingagooddaywithyoutoday,mydearfriend.”⑦Withtearsinmyeyes,Istartedacar,thinkingthatIwouldneverforgetsuchanaidanddeterminedtoofferahandtowhoeverneededhelpinthefuture. 【点评】本文按照一定的时间顺序进行动作描写，文章层次清楚，上下文连贯。①用and并列两个分句，使用with复合结构。②使用句型Itsuddenlyoccurredtomethat和短语asmuchfruitas及insteadof，突出动作节奏感。③应用强调句突出感情线描写。④用时间状语从句推动以时间顺序的故事发展。⑤巧用倒装句激发故事高潮。⑥Atthesametime连贯上下句，使用过去分词writtenbyagirl和which引导从句作定语描写场景，适当借用直接引语体现故事真实感。⑦精准用独立主格结构作状语，分词thinking，determined渲染故事主题。 THANKYOU