名校协作体 2020-09-02
应用文（求助信） & 读后续写Ask-for-help
letter
Write Ask-for-help Letters for
4Ask-for-help
letter
Structure
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Beginni
ng
Main
Body
Closing
/Ending
自我介绍（收信人非熟人）
交代求助的背景及写信的目的；
表达希望得到对方的帮助并致谢。
详细描述求助的具体内容
告知联系方式（必要时）；
在学习或日常生活中碰到困难时，向他人寻求帮助。信件需写明
请求帮助的理由，求助的具体内容。信文语言表达要准确，措辞
要得体。Ask-for-help
letter
Format
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在学习或日常生活中碰到困难时，向他人寻求帮助。信件需写明请求帮助的
理由，求助的具体内容。信文语言表达要准确，措辞要得体。
Beginning ----purpose
Why are you writing the letter?
Body ----describing the details of assistance or guidance that you
seek
----describing about the difficulties you are faced with.
What do you ask him/her to do to help you out?
Ending ----Expectation for assistance and expression of your
appreciation.
Yours faithfully
***Writing
preparations 9
开头：自我介绍（收信人非熟人），交代求助的背景及写信的目的。
1. I am Li Hua, a …
2. I’m writing to ask you to do me a favor.
3. On behalf of..., I’d like to request your unreserved help.
4. I am sorry/regretful to tell you I’m having trouble with sth/doing sth.
5. I’m glad to tell you that I’m planning a journey to…, but I have
difficulty…
6. I’m writing to seek your generous help/ unselfish assistance/patient
guidance during...
Para.1 Purpose of writing the letterWriting
preparations 10
正文：详细描述求助的具体内容，告知联系方式（必要时）。
1. Try as I may, I still find it hard to... .
2. It worries me that +句子（主语从句）
3. What troubles me most is sth. （主语从句）
4. What worries me most was that+句子（表语从句）
5. 句子，which upsets me a lot.（非限制性定语从句）
6. I’d like to participate in …. However, I find it difficult to …
7. I long to … but I don't know how, which makes me upset.
Para.2 Body ArrangementsWriting
preparations
正文：详细描述求助的具体内容，告知联系方式（必要时）。
8. Please let me know if…
9. I’m lacking in…, adding to my difficulty in doing…
10. I can be reached at anytime by cellphone at 86754321.
11. You may email or phone me at lihua@136.com or12345678.
12. It’s such a big headache/so big a headache for me to ... that...
13. For lack of..., I have great difficulty/ find myself stumped by(被难倒)...
14. (Doing) sth. is a challenge for me, leading to... /resulting in.../ making
it impossible for me to...
Para.2 Body Arrangements
11Writing
preparations
Natural transitionsTo begin with, In addition , Therefore, In
short , once, as well, to be honest,
what’s more, however, meanwhile…
Suitable
Details?
The content must be true and concrete,
the language be accurate，the attitude and
tone be genuine. (态度诚恳，描述准确具体)
Speak in moderation,
and in narrative (用语
适度，叙事精炼)
Express your gratitude
in an enthusiastic way
12Writing
preparations
结尾：表达希望得到对方的帮助并致谢。
I would appreciate it if you could give me a hand.
Your help/assistance would be greatly appreciated.
I would be extremely grateful if you do me the favor.
I would appreciate it if you are kind and generous to do this for me.
I would be more than pleased if you could give me some suggestions.
I would appreciate it more than I can say if you would like to consider my
request.
I would be grateful if you could do me the favor. Looking forward to your early
reply.
Should you be kind enough to give me any help, I would be grateful to you.
Para.3 Ending
13Writing
Model
Dear __________(写信对象),
My name is __________， I’m writing to ask whether
you could do me a favour.
I have had much difficulty/trouble in ___________(交代
自己面临的困难). Besides, I’m very upset that
___________（提出令自己苦恼的问题）. What’s more, I
don’t know ___________（进一步说明自己的困境） I’m
wondering if you could be so kind as to _________ so
that ____________（再次请求对方的帮助）.
I’d appreciate it if you could lend me a hand. I’m
looking forward to your early reply.
Yours Sincerely / Faithfully/ Truly,
________________20Writing
Appreciation
Model Appreciation:
应用文写作:
假定你是李华,你校将举办英文电影影评大赛,你有意参加。请你给外
教Mr.Smith写一封电子邮件,希望得到他的指导。
内容包括:
1.比赛介绍; 2.希望得到哪些指导; 3.期待回复。
注意:
1.词数80左右;
2.可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
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要点解读：
1.体裁：求助信 时态
2.段落组织
Para1. 写信目的（求助）；
Para2.比赛介绍+具体需要指导的方面
（影评写作的正确方法，推荐有关书
目，影评的写作格式等）
Para3. 期盼回复Writing
Appreciation
Model Appreciation:
Dear Mr.Smith,
Facing a tough problem of how to make a film review, I
am writing to ask you for a favour.
Next month, our school is going to have an English film
review competition, where competitors are supposed to
comment on a certain English film.I intend to participate in it,
but I have no clear knowledge of how to make a film review,
like what aspects should be involved. I was wondering if you
could give me a brief explanation and recommend me some
relevant books and articles.
Your early reply will be highly appreciated.
Yours,
Li Hua 31读后续写: 阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
There Are No Vans
To me, what Thanksgiving really means is giving good thanks, not eating turkey.By the time I was 18 I had created my
Thanksgiving ritual (惯例).I would go out shopping and buy enough food for one or two families.Then I would dress like a delivery boy,
go to the poorest neighborhood and just knock on a door, and would always include a note saying “All that I ask in return is that you
take good enough care of yourself so that someday you can do the same thing for someone else.” I have received more from this
annual ritual than I have from any amount of money I’ve ever earned, especially one such experience in New York City.
Several years ago I was in New York City with my newly married wife during Thanksgiving.She was sad because we were not with
our family.Normally she would be home decorating the house for Christmas, but we were stuck here in a hotel room.I said, “Honey,
look, why don’t we decorate some lives today instead of some trees?” When I told her what I always do on Thanksgiving, she got
excited.I said, “Let’s go someplace where we can really appreciate who we are, what we are able to do and what we can really
give.Let’s go to the poor neighborhood Harlem and feed some people there in need. We’ll go buy enough food for six or seven
families for 30 days.We’ve got enough.Let’s go do it!”
We started by getting a van (货车), but there seemed no vans in all of New York City.The rent-a-car places were all out of vans.
My wife was disappointed, and I said, “Look, the bottom line is that if we want something, we can make it happen! All we have to do
is take action.There are plenty of vans here in New York City.Look down at the street. Do you see all those vans? Let’s go get one!”
My wife agreed and we took action.
注意:
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3.续写部分分为两段,每段开头语已为你写好;
4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1:
We tried stopping vans as they were driving down the street.
Paragraph 2:
Eventually a van drove up and the driver said yes. 31续写思路：
1. 读懂文本 --主要讲述作者在几年前的感恩节被困纽约，和新婚妻子一
起协定一起做善事，前往美国的贫困区哈勒姆捐赠食物，但恰逢节
日，整个纽约城出租的货车已经全部被租出去了，于是夫妻两人只
能另想它法寻求一辆货车载物的故事。
第一段：倒叙， I have received more from this annual ritual than I have
from any amount of money I‘ve ever earned, especially one such
experience in New York City.
第二段：事情的起因，作者和新婚妻子在感恩节受困纽约。
第三段：引出问题，因为是感恩节的缘故，所以全程货车紧缺，寻找
货车就成了他们行善事途中的最大障碍了。2. 确定主题（theme）和情节（plot）
Theme：kindness--行善事存善心。作者眼中的感恩节“giving good
thanks, not eating turkey”，“one such experience”？
Plot：关注文本第三段结尾--夫妻二人决定take action（ to fine a van），
para2段首句-- Eventually a van drove up and the driver said yes. Para1 段
首句--We tried stopping vans as they were driving down the street. “夫妻
二人尝试多次拦车，无果。”需要运用到一些拦车的动作，发出请求和
遭到拒绝的句子，从情绪的角度第一段夫妻的焦急、期待，被拒绝后的
灰心丧气，没有放弃的不屈不挠para2. 成功逮到一辆车，前往哈勒姆区
做善事。拦到车后的欣喜，在做善事时候的激动，帮助完别人后收获的
满足和快乐。当然如果有点明主题思想的句子会更好，比如本卷完型的
最后一句you can surely make a difference with a little bit kindness.
3. 确实时间地点，下划线的词有Thanksgiving, buy, knock, food,
experience, Harlem, in need, van, disappointed, wife.
4. 写作目的:share one special experience during Thanksgiving. “ kindness”
Harlem是美国纽约的一个黑人居住区，里面聚集着大量贫民，生活和治安条件非常差。A possible version:
Para1：We tried stopping vans as they were driving
down the street. I learned something about New York
drivers that day: They don’t stop; they speed up. Then we
tried waiting by the light. We’d go over, knock on the
window and the driver would roll it down, looking at us in
alarm, and I’d ask if he would drive us to Harlem so we
could help some people. Every time the driver would look
away quickly, furiously roll up the window and pull away
without saying anything. My wife was ready to give up, but I
said, “It’s the law of averages: somebody is going to say
yes.” Para 2: Eventually a van drove up and the driver said
yes. We were wild with joy and climbed onto the van.
Upon arrival, he led us to a store where we bought lots
of food and some baskets. Together we packed them up,
carried them onto the van and went to buildings where
there were even people living without electricity. It was
a truly fulfilling experience to make even a small
difference. You see, you can make anything happen if
you commit to it and take action. Miracles like this
happen every day—even in a city where “there are no
vans.”A possible version:
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